Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2017/Evaluation apprehension

Social Contributions

I thought the real-world examples at the start of the page were great! It introduces you to the topic in a way that is familiar and it pulls you in to make you want to learn the science behind the scenarios. --U3099598 (discuss • contribs) 03:44, 3 October 2017 (UTC)

Thank you kindly. Goodluck!--U3118754 (discuss • contribs) 02:14, 1 November 2017 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:51, 16 October 2017 (UTC)

Thank you for the feeds up--U3118754 (discuss • contribs) 02:16, 1 November 2017 (UTC)

Topic development review and feedback

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks will be available later via Moodle. Keep an eye on Announcements. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

Title, sub-title, TOC Add page title (only sub-title currently included) Link for multimedia presentation removed - replace once it has been published User page Created Used effectively Social contribution One contribution made, but a better link to evidence can be provided. The best links go to direct evidence of the contributions made. View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click compare, and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see the book chapter author guidelines. Section headings See earlier comment about heading casing Only use the Overview heading - no need for an Introduction - consider renaming the latter section with a more descriptive heading or merging with the Overview Agree with previous comment that the examples are very useful Consider removing the "key concepts" heading (doesn't mean much) and moving the sub-sections up one level Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Make sure to avoid providing too much background/generic material. Instead briefly summarise background concepts and provide wiki links to further information. Then focus most of the content on directly answering the core question posed by the sub-title of chapter. Key points Reasonably well developed. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles. Image Excellent - I think the larger image size you had earlier worked better References Good. For full APA style, use correct capitalisation, use the new recommended format for dois - http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2014/07/how-to-use-the-new-doi-format-in-apa-style.html, and do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within a volume Resources See also OK - see extra details added now after the link External links Rename the links Provide more info about source/destination after the link in brackets

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:51, 16 October 2017 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via Moodle, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

Overall Overall, this is a solid chapter. Edits after the due date were ignored for marking purposes. The chapter was over the maximum word count. For additional feedback, see these copyedits. Theory Theory was reasonable well covered and communicated, but could be improved by providing a more integrated message. Perhaps more examples or case studies could be included. Conclusion: What are the practical, take-home messages? Research Lots of interesting, relevant research studies are cited. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Greater emphasis on major reviews and meta-analyses would be helpful. Written expression Written expression Some of the bullet-points should have been in full paragraph format. More careful proofreading is needed to fix typographical, spelling, and grammatical errors. Some statements warranted citations. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. Layout Avoid having only one sub-section within a section; there should be at least sub-sections within a section, otherwise use no sub-sections. Section which contain sub-sections should have an introductory paragraph before branching into sub-sections. Learning features Adding more interwiki links would make the text more interactive. The quiz questions seemed to be underdeveloped/incomplete References are not in full APA style e.g., Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within volumes. See new doi format

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an overly long and technical presentation. Structure and content Too much content is covered - be more selective and disciplined in the structure - Title, Overview, Body, Conclusion with practical, take-home messages. Narrate the Title slide, to help the viewer understanding the focus and goal of the presentation. Consider using more examples. Good use of citations and references. Material beyond 3 minutes from ignored for marking purposes. Add and narrate an Overview slide, to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered. The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages. Communication The presentation is overly technical - not particular accessible or engaging for someone who knows nothing about the topic and who just wants a quick, fun, informative, practical overview. Consider leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point. Visual communication consists mostly of text-based slides with a little bit of clip-art. Production quality The presentation is over the maximum time limit. Use the full chapter title and sub-title on the opening slide and in the name of the video because this helps to match the book chapter and to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Audio and video recording quality was reasonable. Audio recording quality was a bit quiet - review microphone set up. Add acknowledgement of image sources used to create the presentation.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:12, 2 December 2017 (UTC)