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Hi ALMLoom, Your topic made me think of this TED talk I'd seen by Dan Pink from TEDGlobal2009. If nothing else he does a nice job of raising the idea that monetary 'motivation' doesn't necessarily improve performance! U3012363 (discuss contribs) 10:37, 16 August 2017 (UTC)Reply

Hi U3012363, Thanks for the link, I 've actually included this TED talk already, as I agree it is great support to the idea that intrinsic motivation works better than extrinsic, specificalliy monetary incentives! Glad to know I am on track with some of my ideas for the chapter!
Thanks again! --Alume (discusscontribs) 03:02, 18 October 2017 (UTC)Reply

Article and direct edits

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Hey ALMLoom - great topic and structure!

Just read this and thought of your chapter: "If you feel that you’re “the boss of you,” at least to the extent possible by your job, you’ll feel more fired up to do your job and your work product will reflect this greater passion." Here's a link to the article

Also made a few direct edits (added box, heading casing, bullet points etc) you can see here - please undo anything you don't like!

All the best --u3122707 (discusscontribs) 03:54, 10 October 2017 (UTC)Reply

Thanks U3012363 for the interesting article! It really summaries a lot of what I have been reading in research articles very well, and I plan on using a modified version of the mini Intrinsic vs Extrinsic Motivation test within the article as a learning Tool for my chapter. Also thank you for the edits. The Key Questions are a big standout now, and I think the use of boxes is something I will expand in the chapter to other areas of significance!
Thanks for the assistance! --Alume (discusscontribs) 03:02, 18 October 2017 (UTC)Reply

Looks Awesome!

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)-Jacinta

Hi ALMloom, I am very interested in your topic as I think the culture of the company would have big impact on employee motivation.One of the biggest company in China called"HUAWEI", people in China like to called the company have “the sense of wolf spirit". Even inside of the company, employee are under the fierce competition and big pressures environment but there are still thousand of people would like to work for the company.So, maybe you can consider have a look at how HUAWEI motives their employee as one of your background research. --Rachel Zeng (discusscontribs) 05:34, 1 September 2017 (UTC)Reply

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Just testing putting a comment on this page - ignore. ---- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:50, 11 October 2017 (UTC)Reply

Suggested article

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Hi, I found an article which might be useful to your chapter. It looks at the motivational differences between tipped and nontipped restaurant employees. They found (among other things) that non-tipped employees were more motivated by interesting work and praise for 'a job well done' than tipped employees. Might support an argument for intrinsic over extrinsic motivation in hospitality employees. (Curtis, C. R., Upchurch, R. S., & Severt, D. E. (2009). Employee motivation and organizational commitment: A comparison of tipped and nontipped restaurant employees. International Journal of Hospitality & Tourism Administration, 10(3), 253-269. Hope this helps! Best of luck --WJDHR (discusscontribs) 23:12, 11 October 2017 (UTC)Reply

Heading casing

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:32, 15 October 2017 (UTC)Reply


Topic development review and feedback

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks will be available later via Moodle. Keep an eye on Announcements. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

Title, sub-title, TOC

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  1. Excellent

User page

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  1. Created
  2. Used effectively

Social contribution

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  1. One social contribution; good summary; indirect link
  2. The best links go to direct evidence of the contributions made. View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click compare, and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see the book chapter author guidelines.

Section headings

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  1. See earlier comment about heading casing - someone else has made this change to the chapter
  2. Strong coverage of theory - certainly no more needed and could potential cover less theory, especially theories could be integrated across empowerment and workplace motivation using SDT (which subsumes IM theory) as an overarching framework

Key points

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  1. Provided for all sections
  2. Although you should generally avoid citing from textbooks, make sure to check out the Reeve (2015) material about empowerment
  3. Consider possibly integrating theory and relevant research into the same section, rather than having a separate section for research
  4. Probably best to link the first mention of key terms to Wikipedia articles, but not the headings
  1. Included
  2. Consider increasing image size from default
  3. Consider enhancing figure captions to help connect the image more strongly to key points being made in the text

References

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  1. Good, but not full APA style
  2. Include italics
  3. Use the new recommended format for dois - http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2014/07/how-to-use-the-new-doi-format-in-apa-style.html
  4. Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within a volume

Resources

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  1. See also
    1. Very good, especially as tidied up since topic development submission
  2. External links
    1. Very good; include source in brackets after link (but don't hyperlink the source) - as per See also

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:32, 15 October 2017 (UTC)Reply


Chapter review and feedback

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Overall

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  1. Overall, this is a solid chapter which could be improved by further drafting and proofreading.
  2. For additional feedback, see these copyedits.
  1. Excellent opening scenario
  2. The Conclusion lacks a comprehensive summary of the theoretical components of workplace empowerment, and lacks practical, take-home messages.
  1. Theories were well described and explained.
  2. The Reeve (2015) textbook is overused as a citation - instead, utilise primary, peer-reviewed sources.
  1. Some useful, relevant research is described.
  2. The Conclusion lacks a summary of the research.
  3. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
  4. Greater emphasis on major reviews and meta-analyses would be helpful.
  1. Written expression
    1. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
  2. Layout
  3. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
  4. Learning features
    1. Adding more interwiki links would make the text more interactive.
    2. Scenario-based questions are asked - but no answers are provided?
    3. The chapter makes some basic use of images.
  5. Spelling, grammar and proofreading
    1. Spelling can be improved - see the [spelling?] tags
    2. The grammar for some sentences could be improved - see the [grammar?] tags
    3. More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard.
    4. Remove unnecessary capitalisation of some words
  6. APA style
    1. Use APA style for Figure captions.
    2. Use APA style for citations.
    3. Citations
      1. There should be no comma before et al.
      2. In-text citations should be in alphabetical order
    4. References are not in full APA style e.g.,
      1. Check and correct capitalisation
      2. Check and correct italicisation


Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Moodle site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

Overall

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  1. Overall, this
  1. Add and narrate a Title slide, to help the viewer understanding the focus and goal of the presentation.
  2. Add an Overview slide, to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered.
  3. Consider providing more examples.
  4. Theoretical and research content reasonably well covered.
  5. The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages.
  1. The presentation makes effective use of animation, text, and audio narration, and is reasonably well paced.
  1. The link from the book chapter does not go to the start of the presentation - fixed.
  2. Consider muting the music during narration to help the viewer concentrate on the combination of visual information and narrated audio.
  3. Use the full chapter title and sub-title on the opening slide and in the name of the video because this helps to match the book chapter and to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  4. Audio and video recording quality was very good.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:25, 28 November 2017 (UTC)Reply