Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2017/Culture shock

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As an international student, I find this book chapter interesting and relatable. I should say that the aspect of culture shock thst is most challenging is the process of adapting to the new culture. However, I would also emphasise the importance of the availability of the support system. I will be looking forward to the development of your work. --May EJ20 (discusscontribs) 15:34, 4 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Hi there, I just added the topic questions in the overview section. Feel free to remove or change them I just thought it may help you along. All the best with it! - U310775

Hey there. Interesting topic. I like the detail included regarding the stages of Culture shock, i found them quite informative. One thing i think would help would be to go into further detail about the theories which cover culture shock. You listed them with dot points but perhaps highlighting how they are applied to culture shock would be beneficial. Also perhaps add a bit more detail to the known outcomes of culture shock, maybe give examples of what the outcomes would look like. Overall it was an interesting read! Good luck! U3119288 (discusscontribs) 03:16, 21 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Hello, I found an interesting TEDxTalk on culture shock and overcoming it that you might like to add to you external links section. Hope this helps- https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rGSD6jduFJg AnnetaJ (discusscontribs) 07:38, 21 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]


Topic development review and feedback

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks will be available later via Moodle. Keep an eye on Announcements. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

Title, sub-title, TOC[edit source]

  1. Adjusted to reflect book TOC

User page[edit source]

  1. Wasn't created at time of submission

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. None provided at time of submission

Section headings[edit source]

  1. Casing and formatting adjusted
  2. Avoid having one sub-section within a section - should be 0 or 2+ sub-sections

Key points[edit source]

  1. Reasonable description of stages, but not so much about what can be done about it - focus on this to fit with book theme
  2. What are the emotional components of culture shock - focus on these to fit with book theme
  3. Emphasis is on theory - what about research - include a focus on this to fit with marking criteria
  4. What interactive components will be provided? e.g., case study? quiz? wiki links? etc.

Image[edit source]

  1. None provided at time of submission

References[edit source]

  1. For APA style, check capitalisation, italicisation, use of dois (http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2014/07/how-to-use-the-new-doi-format-in-apa-style.html), do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within a volume, present in alphabetical order

Resources[edit source]

  1. See also
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  3. External links
    1. Section added

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:27, 10 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Culture Shock to Culture Comfort[edit source]

Hey! I found this Ted talk which I found was very interesting and which you could include as an external resource Why we need to embrace culture shock | Kristofer Gilmour | All the best! :) --Slucic94 (discusscontribs) 16:48, 22 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]


Chapter review and feedback[edit source]

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a very good chapter, with a particularly strong coverage of theory.
  2. For additional feedback, see these copyedits.

Theory[edit source]

  1. Theories were well described, compared, and critiqued.
  2. Perhaps consider adding more examples or a case study.

Research[edit source]

  1. Good coverage of research.
  2. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
  3. Greater emphasis on major reviews and meta-analyses would be helpful.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. The chapter benefited from a well developed Overview and Conclusion, with clear focus question(s) and take-home messages.
  2. Layout
    1. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
    2. The chapter was well structured, with major sections using sub-sections.
  3. Learning features
    1. Adding interwiki links would make the text more interactive.
    2. Only very basic use of images.
    3. No use of tables.
    4. Basic use of quizzes.
    5. No use of case studies.
  4. APA style
    1. Provide more detailed Figure captions
    2. Citations
      1. In-text citations should be in alphabetical order
      2. There was some typographical errors in citations which have been fixed.
    3. References are not in full APA style e.g.,
      1. Check and correct capitalisation
      2. Check and correct italicisation
      3. See new doi format
      4. Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within volumes.


Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Moodle site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a very good presentation which provides an excellent summary of the key points from the chapter about the topic.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. Add and narrate a Title slide, to help the viewer understanding the focus and goal of the presentation.
  2. Add and narrate an Overview slide, to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered.
  3. Well selected and structured content - not too much or too little.
  4. The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages.

Communication[edit source]

  1. The presentation is easy to follow, and interesting to watch and listen to.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. Use the full chapter title and sub-title on the opening slide and in the name of the video because this helps to match the book chapter and to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. Audio recording included background sounds - review microphone set up.
  3. Include references.
  4. Limited use of the description field.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:38, 30 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]