Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2024/Breathing exercises and relaxation

Changing layout

Hello, I've just finished reading your chapter so far, and it looks like you're off to a great start! One thing I would recommend in the 'Mechanisms of breathing exercises' section is to put the 'types of breathing exercises' at the beginning of this section before discussing the psychophysiological mechanisms. Or, you could even do a seperate section for the types of breathing exercises before the 'mechanisms of breathing exercises' section. This way, I think your reader will be better able to visualise the breathing exercises before you begin talking about how they impact the brain, nervous system, etc. Hope this helps! --U3236447 (discuss • contribs) 08:59, 30 September 2024 (UTC)

Comment

Hi there,

I'm very eager to see what information you put together for this topic. I feel like our two topics are very closely related - Mine is Guided Meditation and Emotion Regulation.

It's very early on in the semester so I don't expect you to have thought of all points you are going to make in your chapter, however some food for thought - How might breathing exercises help with pain management?

Best of luck this semester! SMurray24 (discuss • contribs) 08:19, 31 July 2024 (UTC)

Initial suggestions

@MGibb.23: Thanks for tackling this topic. Some initial suggestions:

• Check out other related chapters and see how you can build on, link to, and integrate with that work:
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Stress
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Relaxation
• Also search past book chapters for related topics
• For the topic development, consider:
  • What psychological theory(ies) can help to understand and explain this topic? Broadly speaking, physiological theory/theories make sense. But perhaps also consider e.g., cognitive perspectives?
  • What is the main research in this area?
• Let me know if I can do anything else to support the development of this chapter.

Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:42, 8 August 2024 (UTC)

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1. Title The title is correctly worded and formatted 2. Headings Excellent – Well developed -level heading structure. Meaningful headings clearly relate directly to the core topic. Remove colons from the end of headings Good alignment between focus questions and heading structure 3. Overview Excellent - Scenario, image, evocative description of the problem/topic, relevant psychological theory/research, and focus questions 4. Key points Partial development of key points for some sections, with some relevant citations For sections which include sub-sections, include the key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings There seems to be reasonably good coverage of theory, however, strive to balance the content with critical review of relevant research Use APA style 7th edition for citations Hasn't been developed What might the take-home, practical messages be? (What are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?) 5. Figure Excellent - A relevant figure is presented, captioned, and cited 6. Learning feature Promising use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Promising use of example(s)/case study(ies) Promising use of quiz question(s) Also consider using one or more tables to summarise key information 7. References Very good Move links to Wikipedia articles into See also Move non-academic / non-peer reviewed sources to External links Are there any systematic reviews about this topic? For APA referencing style, check and correct: italicisation 8. Resources See also Not developed External links Not developed 9. User page Excellent – used effectively Excellent description about self provided Link(s) provided to professional profile(s) Link provided to book chapter 10. Social contribution Excellent – at least three different types of contributions with direct link(s) to evidence At least one contribution has been made and summarised with indirect link(s) to evidence If adding the second or subsequent link to a page (or a talk/discussion page), create a direct link like / Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions. Great to see you on X! Use a numbered list (see Tutorial 02) Add a brief summary of each contribution None summarised on user page with direct link(s) to evidence – this was covered in Tutorial 03. Looking ahead to the book chapter submission, see how to earn marks for social contributions.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:53, 17 August 2024 (UTC)

Suggestions

Hi!

Really interesting chapter, wanted to give a few thoughts and suggestions I had going through it.

One thing to make sure of is having the capitalisation correct for headings and subheadings, with only the first word having its first letter capitalised and not the following words. I noticed this on a few of the main headings/subheadings, just a minor thing to easily fix up.

Another thing that may help improve the readability a bit is in the Breathing Exercises section . Perhaps presenting the information for the specific benefits as more complete sets of sentences if you can find a way to have them flow together or connect them. Or possibly having some of the information in small tables.

A final suggestion is that you could present your quiz lower down in a box, just to make it look a bit more colorful. Purely a cosmetic point and nothing else, if you wanted to do this though here is the code for it.

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Your quiz information, layout, template etc, as you have it now

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Then just change the theme in its edit for different colours.

I hope some of this may be of use or helpful, but regardless your chapter is incredibly interesting to read and wish you the best of luck on anything left with it! StephenBlume (discuss • contribs) 11:43, 17 October 2024 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a basic presentation The presentation is over the maximum time limit. Content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes. Overview The opening conveys the purpose of the presentation in a basic way The presentation has an engaging introduction to engage audience interest A context for the presentation is established Consider asking focus questions to help focus and discipline the presentation Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic There is too much content (goes over time) The presentation makes excellent use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes insufficient/no use of relevant psychological research The presentation makes insufficient/no use of citations to support claims The presentation makes excellent use of examples The presentation provides useful practical advice The presentation provides easy to understand information Conclusion The Conclusion did not fit within the time limit Audio The audio is easy to follow and interesting to listen to The presentation makes very good use of narrated audio Audio communication is well-paced Very good intonation For greater engagement/audience interest consider using a human voice The narration is well practiced and/or performed Audio recording quality was very good Mute the music during narration to help the viewer concentrate on the combination of visual information and narrated audio The narrated content is well matched to the target topic Video Overall, visual display quality is very good The presentation makes creative use of text and animation The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time The presentation could be strengthened by including more text The visual communication is supplemented in an very good way by relevant images and/or diagrams The presentation is very well produced The visual content is reasonably well matched to the target topic Meta-data The correct title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used, as the name of the presentation. This would help to convey the purpose of the presentation and be consistent. Provide a written description of the presentation to help potential viewers A link to the book chapter is not provided A link from the book chapter is provided Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not clearly indicated A copyright license for the presentation is not clearly indicated

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:07, 10 November 2024 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:12, 16 November 2024 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is an insufficient chapter The main area for potential improvement is to write using your own words based on reading and citing of the most relevant peer-reviewed academic literature about the topic I suspect that some of this chapter is based on unacknowledged use of genAI output; if so, it violates academic integrity principles I suspect that the recommended 5 topic development hours and 45 book chapter hours were not invested in preparing this chapter Insufficient use of primary, peer-reviewed sources as citations (e.g., see the tags) Under the maximum word count, so there is room to expand For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Underdeveloped Engages reader via a case study or scenario in a feature box with a relevant image Does not compellingly explains the psychological problem or phenomenon Relevant focus questions are provided in a feature box Theory A good range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained What is coherence vs. HRV? (explain) Builds on two previous chapters and/or Wikipedia article Build more strongly on related chapters and/or Wikipedia articles (e.g., by embedding interwiki links for key terms) Basic depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) Use tables, figures, and/or lists to help convey key theoretical information Insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Very good use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research Insufficient review of relevant research More detail about key studies would be ideal Any systematic reviews or meta-analyses in this area? Insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Insufficient critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Many claims lack sufficient citation (e.g., see the tags) Integration Insufficient integration between theory and research The chapter places more emphasis on theory than on research; strive for an integrated balance Where research is discussed, it is integrated with theory Insufficient integration with chapters Conclusion Excellent Key points are well summarised Clear take-home message(s) Include more citations Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is OK but reads like it has been AI-generated without acknowledgement and the lack citations mean that the work falls below the standard of Level 3 academic work Figures Very well well captioned Use this format for captions: Figure X. Descriptive caption goes here in sentence casing. See example. Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., "(see Figure 1)") Citations use basic APA style (7th ed.). To improve: If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either: in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020) List multiple citations in alphabetical order by first author surname Move embedded links to non-peer reviewed sources into the External links section; only cite peer-reviewed sources References use poor APA style: Check and correct use of capitalisation[1] Check and correct use of italicisation Separate page numbers using an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Include hyperlinked dois Move non-peer reviewed sources into the External links section Use hanging indent (fixed) Learning features Insufficient use of learning features Two uses of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. One use of figure(s) No use of table(s) One use of feature box(es) Very good use of scenarios, case studies, or examples No use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) No use of interwiki links in the "See also" section No use of external links in the "External links" section Social contribution ~4 logged contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:12, 16 November 2024 (UTC)