Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Effectance motivation

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a basic presentation. The presentation is over the maximum time limit - content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes. Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is presented. Also narrate the title and sub-title to help clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Briefly explain why this topic is important. Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. Content The presentation addresses the topic. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little. The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological theory. The presentation makes little use of relevant psychological research. What is the direction of impact of factors affecting effectance motivation? The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies. Check and correct grammar (e.g., organisms -> organism's). Check and correct spelling (e.g., messaged -> messages). Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with overly detailed take-home message(s). If focus questions were set up, then there can be one take-home message per question. The Conclusion only partially fitted within the time limit. Audio The presentation makes basic use of narrated audio. Audio communication is well paced. Basic intonation. Increased intonation could enhance listener interest and engagement. The audio communication is hesitant in some places - could benefit from further practice. Audio recording quality was basic. Probably an on-board microphone was used. Consider using an external microphone. Video Overall, visual display quality is basic. The presentation makes basic use of text and image based slides. Some of the font size should be larger to make it easier to read. The amount of text presented on some slides should be reduced to make it easier to read and listen at the same time. The presentation is basically produced using simple tools. Meta-data The chapter title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used in the name of the presentation - the latter would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. Links to and from the book chapter are provided. Licensing Ideally, provide clickable links to the original image sources (e.g., in the description). A copyright license for the presentation is not provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:18, 21 November 2021 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a solid chapter that makes good use of psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Overview The Overview is underdeveloped. Explain the problem or phenomenon more clearly. Add focus questions in a feature box to help guide the reader and structure the chapter. Consider introducing a case study or example or using an image to help engage reader interest. Theory — Breadth Relevant theories are selected, described, and explained. The chapter doesn't wander off into discussion of irrelevant theory. Theory — Depth Appropriate depth is provided about the selected theory(ies). Some useful examples are provided to illustrate theoretical concepts. More examples could be useful to illustrate key concepts. Research — Key findings Relevant research is reviewed. Greater emphasis on effect sizes, major reviews, and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Research — Critical thinking Good critical thinking about research is evident. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations suggesting specific directions for future research Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags). Integration Discussion of theory and research is well integrated. Conclusion Key points are well summarised. Add practical, take-home message(s). Written expression — Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is below professional standard. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences. Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes. Layout Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections. Grammar Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals').[2]. The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance. Check and make correct use of commas. Use serial commas[3] - they are part of APA style and are generally recommended by grammaticists. Here's an explanatory video (1 min). Spelling Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour). Proofreading Remove unnecessary capitalisation (e.g., Effectance -> effectance). APA style Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159). Do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc. (e.g., American Psychologist -> American psychologist). Direct quotes need page numbers - even better, write in your own words. Figures Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text. Figure captions should use this format: Figure X. Descriptive caption in sentence casing. See example. Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1). Refer to each Figure using APA style (e.g., do not use italics, check and correct capitalisation). Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: A full stop is needed after "et al" (i.e., "et al."). References are not in full APA style. For example: Include volume number, issue number, and page numbers. Check and correct use of capitalisation and italicisation Page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Include hyperlinked dois Written expression — Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is basic. Basic use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Basic use of image(s). No use of table(s). Basic use of feature box(es). Basic use of quiz(zes). Good use of case studies or examples. Good use of interwiki links in the "See also" section. Basic use of external links in the "External links" section. Social contribution ~1 logged, useful, minor to moderate social contributions with direct links to evidence.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:10, 22 November 2021 (UTC)