Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2020/Protection motivation theory
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Hey! Your chapter is looking good so far. I’ve noticed a couple of things that might be worth fixing 😊 • “Protection motivation theory (PMT) is a cognitive psychological process, it is a process…” Maybe rephrase this so you’re not repeating ‘process’ and improve the flow. • Perhaps use an image of cigarette smoking to refer to it in your writing? • “The benefits need to out way the risk and the comforts need to out way the discomfort in some situations.” – The correct word here is outweigh 😊 • After mentioning protection motivation theory in the first sentence, you should continue to use the acronym you’ve specified instead of referring to it in full. • “Smoking for longer periods of time can create the negative association with addition and also create fear” – Did you mean to refer to addiction? • “Severity and vulnerability are to prevent maladaptive such as the negative aspects in smoking then there is an opposing force, the factor of rewards” – Looks like you’ve forgotten a word after maladaptive. • There are quite a few other grammatical errors that need to be looked into – Maybe have a good proofread of your chapter and use the free draft submission offered by Studiosity (It’ll be in the course links for this unit, second from the bottom). • I’ve noticed you’ve consistently referred to the same references throughout your chapter – would it be worth trying to find some more sources to back up what you’re saying. All in all, your chapter is progressing well but I think you should consider some of the things I’ve mentioned to help you improve it a little more!
--U3190229 (discuss • contribs) 02:37, 16 October 2020 (UTC)
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