Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2020/Epigenetic impacts on emotional well-being

Stability Overtime

It may be interesting to look into research that focuses on changes over time, to see if the found relationship between epigenetics and emotional wellbeing is stable over time.--U3187381 (discuss • contribs) 07:33, 30 August 2020 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for sentence casing. For example, the wikitext should be: == Cats and mice == rather than == Cats and Mice == -- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:08, 12 September 2020 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title and sub-title Capitalisation, formatting, and spelling of the title/sub-title has been corrected to be consistent with the book table of contents User page Created Minimal, but sufficient Description about self provided Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Summarised with direct link(s) to evidence. When suggesting a link, provide an active hyperlink. Section headings Under-developed, 2-level heading structure - develop further. Aim for 3 to 6 top-level headings between the Overview and Conclus, with up to a similar number of sub-headings for large sections. See earlier comment about Heading casing. Replace generic template content with planned content. Avoid providing too much background content - focus directly on the topic in the chapter sub-title. Key points Limited development Overview - promising. Consider adding: an image. a case study. Remove or adapt generic template content. Limited development of theory and research. Consider including more case studies e.g., some of the content in the research, history, and future sections could make for interesting case studies in feature boxes to accompany the explanation of theory and research. Image An image (figure) is presented. Caption uses APA style. Check spelling. Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text. Cite each figure at least once in the main text. References Weren't cited. For full APA style, use: alphabetical order correct capitalisation the new recommended format for dois Resources See also One of the links doesn't work Also link to relevant book chapters External links None provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:08, 12 September 2020 (UTC)

Editing

Hi there, I have read over your book chapter and wanted to say awesome work! While read through I have made some minor changes to some sentence structure in the overview, Epigenetic impacts on emotional wellbeing and conclusion. As well as some structural changes in the Relevant theories on emotional well-being. these changes can be found using the following links:

• Changes to the overview
• Changes to Epigenetic impacts on emotional wellbeing
• Changes to Relevant theories on emotional well-being ( I changed the formatting of the headings and added some links to this section)
• Changes to the Conclusion

Hopefully these changes have helped but feel free to disregard any that do not work for you. U3191761 (discuss • contribs) 23:52, 17 October 2020 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this chapter provides an insufficient account of a difficult/technical topic. The chapter could be substantially improved if it was more carefully proofread and rewritten in order to use a reasonable quality of written expression. Provide less general emotion theory and more specific theory about how epigenetics can influence emotion. The emphasis seems to be on negative effects but perhaps also consider - can there also be positive effects? This chapter is well under the maximum word count. For additional feedback, see following comments and these copyedits. Theory The Reeve (2018) textbook is overused as a citation - instead, utilise primary, peer-reviewed sources. The emotion theory basically summarises several chapters of the Reeve (2018) textbook. Instead, focus the theory around the topic and make use of primary academic sources. The epigenetic theory is a little better, but sounds suspiciously like some it might be lightly regurgitated from elsewhere? Where technical terms are used, explain them. Otherwise, use simpler terms. This could be a stronger chapter by identifying a smaller number of top-level resources and providing a more focused consideration. Ideally, provide a simple, layperson-understandable, description of epigenetics and how/why it might affect emotion. Research Overall, this chapter provides a basic overview of relevant research. The research component is stronger than the theoretical component. Several appropriate/relevant studies are discussed. More work could be done towards synthesis of the research findings. Identify and emphasise the top-level work in this field e.g., https://www.sciencedirect.com/science/article/pii/S0149763416301397 Written expression Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is below professional standard. Seeking Study Help assistance is recommended. Use third person perspective rather than first person (e.g., "we") or second person (e.g., "you") perspective[1]. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead, use section linking. Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections. Learning features The strongest aspect of the chapter is its use of links. For numbered lists, use Wikiversity formatting per Tutorial 1. See also - rename links to be more user friendly and add "(Book chapter, year)" after the link Basic use of image(s). No use of table(s). Good use of feature box(es). Good use of quiz(zes). Good use of general case studies. Perhaps also consider an individual case study(ies) that provides an everyday, relatable, illustrative example of epigenetics/emotion in action. Grammar The grammar for many sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Due to the extent of problems, professional coaching assistance is recommended e.g., through UC Study Help. Check and make correct use of commas. Use serial commas[2] - it is part of APA style and generally recommended by grammaticists. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals').[3]. Spelling Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour; fulfillment vs. fulfilment). Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the tags). Proofreading More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard. Remove unnecessary capitalisation. Figures and tables Refer to each Table and Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1). Citations use correct APA style. References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation. Check and correct use of italicisation. Include hyperlinked dois. Social contribution ~6 minor, logged, last minute social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:41, 2 November 2020 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an insufficient presentation mainly because it presents too much content visually and auditorily. Structure and content There is too much content, in too much detail, presented within the allocated time frame. Zoom out and provide a higher-level presentation at a slower pace. It is best to do a small amount well than a large amount poorly. The presentation is well structured. Consider adding and narrating an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered. The presentation makes good use of theory. The presentation makes basic use of research. The presentation makes basic use of one or more examples or case studies. A Conclusion slide is presented with a take-home message(s). Communication The presentation is hard to follow because so much visual and auditory content is presented so quickly. The presentation makes basic use of text based slides with narrated audio. Consider slowing down and leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point. Consider using greater intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement. Some of the font size could be larger to make it easier to read. The visual communication could be improved by including some relevant images. Production quality The wording and/or formatting/grammar of the title/sub-title is inconsistent between the name of the video, the opening slide, and/or the book chapter. Audio recording quality was OK. Visual display quality was OK. A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the video description but not in the meta-data. A link to the book chapter is provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. A very brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:37, 20 November 2020 (UTC)