Consider introducing an example or case study and perhaps adding an image. Don't provide detailed content - move it into subsequent sections.
Avoid overcapitalisation. So, "Emotional Schema Therapy" can be "emotional schema therapy". You could set up an abbreviation to EST and use thereafter.
Examples based on articles can be useful. But also consider giving some simple, everyday examples to help make the topic more accessible.
See also - excellent
Embed more interwiki links to other book chapters and/or Wikipedia articles, especially for first mention of key words e.g., therapeutic relationship.
Hi! Interesting topic you've chosen- I'd like to suggest maybe portraying information in a visualy stimulating way. This might make infomation easier to follow and will create a more engaging and interactive experience! Maybe a mind map. U3176522 (discuss • contribs) 01:56, 15 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
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Overall, this is a very good chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
Title and sub-title were adjusted to match the overall table of contents.
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Overall, the quality of written expression is very good.
"People" is often a better term than "individuals"; similarly "participants" is preferred to "subjects".
Use 3rd person perspective rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you")[1].
The chapter benefited from a well developed Overview and Conclusion, with clear focus question(s) and take-home messages.
Layout
The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections.
Learning features
Basic use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive.
Excellent/Very good/Good/Basic/No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
Ideally, use in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Other links can be moved to the external links section.
Basic use of image(s).
Excellent use of table(s).
Good use of feature box(es).
Excellent use of quiz(zes).
Proofreading
More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard.
Figures and tables
Use APA style to refer to each Table and each Figure (e.g., check and correct capitalisation).
The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's UCLearn site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.
An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little.
The presentation is well structured.
Consider adding and narrating an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered.
The presentation makes very good use of theory.
The presentation makes very good use of research.
The presentation makes excellent use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice.
A Conclusion slide is presented with a take-home message(s).
What are the practical take-home message(s) that we can use to help improve our everyday lives based on the best available psychological theory and research about this topic?
The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages.
