Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2019/WOOP model of motivation

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings (or sentence casing). For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:02, 1 September 2019 (UTC)

@U3118869: Just a reminder about this feedback. Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:50, 20 October 2019 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title and sub-title Very good Authorship details removed - authorship is as per the page's editing history User page Created, with description about self and link to book chapter Social contribution Summarised with direct links to evidence. Section headings Well developed 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic. See earlier comment about Heading casing. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Key points Overview - Consider adding focus questions. Key points are reasonably well developed for most sections. Consider introducing a case study in the Overview. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section rather than having one longer quiz towards the end. Image An image (figure) is presented. Caption uses APA style. Cite each figure at least once in the main text. References Good. For full APA style: Use correct capitalisation Use correct italicisation Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within a volume Resources See also Use bullet-points Rename links so that they are more user friendly Also link to past relevant chapters External links Use bullet-points Rename links so that they are more user friendly

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:07, 28 September 2019 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient chapter which provides an overview of the WOOP refers to some research and suggests some applications. The chapter could benefit from further development of a critical review of research. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits. Theory Relevant background theories are well selected, described, and explained. The WOOP stages/steps are also described, but perhaps more indepth theory around each of these stages could be explored, with more examples or quiz questions etc. for each stage. Research Basic but sufficient coverage of research involving the relation between the target constructs is provided. When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Greater emphasis on major reviews and meta-analyses would be helpful. Written expression Written expression The quality of written expression is OK, however some consistent grammatical issues mean that it is not of professional standard. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Layout Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. The chapter is reasonably well structured, but it is surprising that there are no dedicated sections for each step of the WOOP model. Learning features Consider linking to the WOOP app (e.g., in a feature box). Some good use of interwiki links for the first mention of key words would make the text more interactive. Embedding interwiki links links to other book chapters would help to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Good use of images. Excellent table. No use of feature boxes. Basic use of quizzes. The quiz questions could be more effective as learning prompts by being embedded as single questions within each corresponding section rather than being presented as a set of questions at the end. Good use of case studies or examples. Grammar The grammar for several sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's). Check and correct overuse of semi-colons. Often a colon should be used instead. Check and make correct use of commas. Spelling Be consistent (e.g., wellbeing vs. well-being). Also, use hyphen for short-term, long-term etc. APA style Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numbers (e.g., 10). Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets. Refer to each Table and each Figure at least once within the main text. Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text. Citations use correct APA style. References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation. Check and correct use of italicisation. Social contribution ~10 minor but useful logged social contributions with direct links to evidence, mostly within 24 hours of the chapter being due

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:33, 5 November 2019 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent. This presentation makes effective use of powtoon animation tools. Structure and content Well selected content - not too much or too little. The presentation is well structured. Excellent example (Tom). Add and narrate an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered. Fix grammar ~01:20 - 1960's -> 1960s The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages. Communication The presentation is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to watch and listen to. The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides with narrated audio. Well paced. Excellent pauses between sentences. This helps the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point. Wonderful narration (e.g., excellent intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement). The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images. Production quality The chapter title and sub-title are used in the video title - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Use the chapter title and sub-title on the opening slide and in the name of the video because this helps to match the book chapter and to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Audio recording quality was excellent. Visual display quality was excellent. Image sources are provided. A copyright license for the presentation is provided. A link to the book chapter is provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. A written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:28, 18 November 2019 (UTC)