Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2019/Road rage

Comments

I found this really interesting article that may be helpful in the writing of your book chapter? - https://journals.sagepub.com/doi/pdf/10.1177/144078302128756660?casa_token=EDycG2rBN74AAAAA:WzfJZamMgw3R5qnvI2OI8OS7tVnnvhY7a7CTv_K_XS48sstl96bQ8e-qtGuLxAzQ81qRZ-DWJ46TRg - U3160551

Topic development feedback

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Title and sub-title Excellent User page Created, with description about self and link to book chapter Social contribution Summarised with direct links to evidence. Section headings Well developed 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Key points Basic development of key points for each section, with relevant citations. Consider introducing a case study in the Overview. Consider including more examples/case studies. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section. Image An image (figure) is presented. Caption uses APA style. Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text. Cite each figure at least once in the main text. References Excellent Resources Excellent

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 20:32, 28 September 2019 (UTC)

Comment

This seems like a great topic to be writing about. Perhaps place your focus questions in a feature box to place importance on what you are wanting the reader to focus on and the main points you are trying to get across. Keep up the good work, you're almost there! --U3158296 (discuss • contribs) 00:06, 19 October 2019 (UTC)

Comment

Now here's a topic I'm sure most of us can relate to :) I really liked your inclusion of a bunch of focus questions! It really sets the tone for the rest of the page, and as you read along you can keep going back them. I think it really outlines what specific information is important. I sort of wish more people had adopted this focus-question format (I wish I had, too!) --Demimimimi (discuss • contribs) 11:58, 20 October 2019 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits. Theory Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained. Research Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory. Consider using global statistics in the opening sentence of the Overview. Written expression Written expression Overall, the chapter is very well written. The bullet-points should have been in full paragraph format. The chapter benefited from a well developed Overview and Conclusion, with clear focus question(s) and take-home messages. Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections. Learning features Excellent use of interwiki links and embedded links to related book chapters. Embedding interwiki links links to related book chapters would help to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Good use of images. No use of tables. Good use of feature boxes. Good use of quizzes. No use of case studies or examples. Grammar Use serial commas[1] - it is part of APA style and generally recommended by grammaticists. APA style Use APA style when referring to each Table and each Figure at least once within the main text. Citations are not in full APA style. For example: A serial comma is needed before "&" or "and" for citations involving three or more authors. Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets. In-text citations should be in alphabetical order. References use correct APA style. Social contribution ~4 logged, useful, social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:33, 6 November 2019 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a basic presentation that makes effective use of simple tools. Structure and content Opening statistics - context? International? Australian? Add and narrate an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered. Reasonably well selected content - good mix of theory and research - but feels rushes, so probably need to be more selective about presenting only the most important content.. The presentation is reasonably well structured. A Conclusion slide is presented with a take-home message(s). Communication The presentation is easy to follow. Consider adding more examples. The presentation uses text and image based slides with narrated audio. Consider slowing down and leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. The visual communication is supplemented by images. Production quality The chapter title and sub-title are clearly communicated in the video title and opening slide. Audio recording quality was quiet and was faded out at the beginning of several slides - review microphone set-up. Video recording quality was excellent. Image copyright status is provided. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided. A link to the book chapter is provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. A basic written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:33, 17 November 2019 (UTC)