Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2019/Multi-tasking and productivity

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:46, 2 October 2018 (UTC)

@U3160221: Just a reminder about this feedback. Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:26, 20 October 2019 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title, sub-title, TOC Title/sub-title was incorrect; now fixed User page Good Social contribution None Section headings OK Avoid having sections with only one subsection - either have no subsections or two or more subsections Be careful not to spend too much time describing about the concepts, and too little time answering the question. The key section will be "What is the relationship between the two?". Consider renaming and making this more prominent in the structure. Avoid getting sidetracked by gender - this is not part of the question, so unless it is relevant to answering the question about MT and productivity, then it doesn't really warrant much mention. Key points Some, but limited development Most key points lack citations Key points not provided for all sections Image None added References Use APA style Resources See also - use bullet points; rename link so with the title of the page; include "Book chapter, 201*) after the links; also include links to relevant Wikipedia pages External links - not provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:46, 2 October 2018 (UTC)

Feedback

Hi, I have provided a link to a image which might be appropriate for your page; https://commons.wikimedia.org/wiki/File:Panicked_Multitasking_Cartoon_Man.svg Also if you have a look on the discussion page, there is an explanation on how to insert a hanging indent for the reference list. This might help you as it helped me. Here is the link to the discussion page. Down below are the steps on how to insert the code if this helps as well. 1. Click edit source 2. Above your first reference paste the first half of the hanging indent code. 3. Below your last reference paste the second part of the code (}}) 4. click publish changes. Your topic seems really interesting, I look forward to seeing your page develop!--U3154928 (discuss • contribs) 08:11, 16 October 2018 (UTC)

Hi, I also added a ted talks video link to your external resources section ('Forget multi-tasking, try monotasking' (Paolo Cardini, Ted Talks, 2.46mins)). Hope this helps. --U3154928 (discuss • contribs) 08:20, 16 October 2018 (UTC)

Hi, hope it's okay but I added an ABC article on the myth of multi-tasking to your external resource ( 'The myth of multi-tasking' (Lynne Malcolm and Muditha Dias, ABC article). --U3154928 (discuss • contribs) 10:25, 16 October 2018 (UTC)

Tip

Hi, just a suggestion maybe instead of putting the point for a correct answer section at the start of the book chapter to maybe place it at the end with a quiz. You could then make a title 'summary quiz' or 'quick quiz' with that section there. This can just test the readers knowledge after reading all of the material. Can't wait to read the book chapter when it is fully completed!

U3160397 (discuss • contribs) 21:52pm, 21 October 2018 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title and sub-title Excellent User page Created, with description about self and link to book chapter Used effectively Social contribution One summarised with links to evidence Section headings Basic, 2-level heading structure - could benefit from further development See earlier comment about Heading casing. Is a top-level section needed for "definitions"? Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Avoid providing too much background information. Instead, briefly summarise generic concepts and provide internal wiki links to further information. Then the focus of most of the content can be on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. Key points Overview - Consider adding focus questions Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles. Consider including more examples/case studies. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section rather than having one longer quiz towards the end. Image Provided, with an APA style caption Cite each figure at least once in the main text. References Good. For full APA style: Use the new recommended format for dois - http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2014/07/how-to-use-the-new-doi-format-in-apa-style.html Resources See also Use bullet-points Rename links so that they are more user friendly Also link to past relevant chapters External links Use bullet-points Rename links so that they are more user friendly

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:47, 27 September 2019 (UTC)

Comments

Hi,

I was having a look at your plan for your book chapter. I really liked your ideas and I was thinking to add to the critical anaylsis of your paper it could be good to include a case study in your overview to provide an example to your audience as to what your paper is going to be about, kind of like an abstract. :)

Kind Regards,

Julia

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a reasonable chapter, but the emphasis on the negative productivity effects of MT was not implied by the topic; positive benefits should also have been considered. This chapter is well under the maximum word count. Overview - consider building on the sub-title by establishing focus questions to help guide the reader and the chapter structure. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits. Theory Relevant theories are described but in a somewhat complicated/laborious way that probably isn't particularly appealing to a lay audience. More examples would be helpful. Research Relevant research is reviewed but individual studies are described in a somewhat overly detailed manner. Ideally, synthesise findings across several studies. When describing important research findings, consider indicating the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Greater emphasis on major reviews and meta-analyses would be helpful. Written expression Written expression Overall, the chapter is reasonably well written but could be improved to make the ideas more accessible to an everyday audience. Avoid starting sentences with a citation unless the author is particularly pertinent. Instead, it is more interesting for the the content/key point to be communicated, with the citation included along the way or, more typically, in brackets at the end of the sentence. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Layout See earlier comments about heading casing. A basic, 2-level structure is used. Learning features Embedding interwiki links links to other related book chapters would help to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. See also - Use interwiki links for Wikipedia links. External links - rename links and include sources in parentheses to make this info more user friendly. Basic use of Interwiki links. Basic use of images. No use of tables. No use of feature boxes. No use of quizzes. No use of case studies. APA style Refer to each Table and each Figure at least once within the main text. Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text. Citations are not in full APA style. For example: A serial comma is needed before "&" or "and" for citations involving three or more authors. Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets. References use correct APA style. Social contribution ~10 logged, useful, but minor, last-minute social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:27, 5 November 2019 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a basic presentation. This presentation makes use of simple tools. Structure and content Well balanced content - not too much or too little. The presentation is well structured. Add and narrate an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered. The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages. Communication The presentation makes use of text and image based slides with narrated audio. Well paced. Some of the font size should be larger to make it easier to read. The visual communication is supplemented by images. Production quality Communicate the chapter title (along with the sub-title) on the opening slide this to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. The chapter title and sub-title are used in the video title - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Audio recording quality was a bit distorted and included some background noise - review microphone set-up. Possibly an on-board microphone was used instead of an external microphone. Visual display quality was basic. Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. Copyright has been violated - remove the presentation. A copyright license for the presentation is provided. A link to the book chapter is provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. A written description of the presentation is not provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:27, 18 November 2019 (UTC)