The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.
Well developed 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic.
Avoid providing too much background information. Instead, briefly summarise generic concepts and provide internal wiki links to further information. Then the focus of most of the content can be on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. For example, consider narrowing the section on "emotions" to focus on infant/child emotions and parent emotions.
Well done on the book chapter. I originally went searching for yours specifically to provide feedback on, as I thought it would link to my topic (Relationship commitment phobia), as I mention parent-child relationships in my assessment item. I purposefully left commenting on yours until towards the end, as I wanted to see what direction you took. Not the direction I thought you would, by the research I did for my topic, however I think it is really well done, and probably better than I thought it could be. You were quite concise, but went into great detail. That's a good talent to have in academic writing.
My only suggestion, and it is very minor, would be to change the working in your first case study, only slightly. Where it says "Whilst they were on the holiday, Lucy...". Simply state "whilst on holiday, Lucy...". It isn't much of a change, but admittedly it did read a little awkward to me.
I enjoy the layout of your chapter, it is very neatly presented. I hope you do well in the final mark.
--KBPrimrose (discuss • contribs) 08:20, 17 October 2019 (UTC)
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