Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2019/Locus of control and motivation

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Heading casing[edit source]

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings (or sentence casing). For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:57, 19 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Feedback[edit source]

This is merely by own suggestion here. You could consider writing a dedicated section distinguishing extrinsic and intrinsic motivation, as well as how they are relevant to discussing locus of control. The concepts can also be tied into some of the research you've cited, chiefly the study by Mourges, Hein, Tan, Diffley, and Grigorenko (2016).

Aalto Bowers (discusscontribs) 08:26, 28 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]

This looks like a really great book chapter, you should be very happy with your progress so far. In the occasion that you are not done with your research I would like to offer a contribution of a fairly topical article discussing locus of control. This is subject that briefly comes up in my book chapter and while the article is of no use to me, I think it may be useful to you - if you haven't already referenced it. Good luck with everything.

--U3100384 (discusscontribs) 01:08, 18 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Reactance theory[edit source]

I would love to start a conversation with you about your findings related to Reactance Theory. I am touching on this theory in my chapter and would love to be able to talk to you about it to help consolidate my understanding of the theory. Let me know if you are interested in chatting to me :) --U3173480 (discusscontribs) 00:35, 31 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Topic development feedback[edit source]

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

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Title and sub-title[edit source]

  1. Sub-title did not match main list of book chapters (now fixed)
  2. Otherwise good.

User page[edit source]

  1. Created, with description about self.
  2. Add a link to the book chapter you are working on

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. Well summarised.
  2. Add direct link to evidence of contribution. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions.

Section headings[edit source]

  1. See earlier comment about Heading casing.
  2. Well developed 2-level heading structure, however avoid providing too much background information. Instead, briefly summarise generic concepts and provide internal wiki links to further information. Then the focus of most of the content can be on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title.
  3. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.

Key points[edit source]

  1. Excellent.
  2. Consider including more examples/case studies.
  3. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section.

Image[edit source]

  1. Provided, with an APA style caption
  2. Cite each figure at least once in the main text.

References[edit source]

  1. Good.
  2. For full APA style:
    1. Use correct capitalisation
    2. Use the new recommended format for dois (make the hyperlinks active) -
    3. Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within a volume

Resources[edit source]

  1. See also
    1. Use bullet-points
    2. Rename links so that they are more user friendly
    3. Also link to past relevant chapters
  2. External links
    1. Use bullet-points
    2. Rename links so that they are more user friendly

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:34, 26 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Chapter review and feedback[edit source]

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a solid chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
  2. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits.

Theory[edit source]

  1. Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained.
  2. The chapter could be improved by embedding more links to related Wikiversity book chapters and Wikipedia articles.
  3. The Reeve (2018) textbook is overused as a citation - instead, utilise primary, peer-reviewed sources.

Research[edit source]

  1. Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory. This is mostly provided by reviewing four individual studies in a single section. To improve, consider incorporating and synthesising the review of research into the review of theory.
  2. When describing important research findings, consider including the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
  3. Greater emphasis on major reviews and meta-analyses would be helpful.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the chapter is well written.
    2. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
  2. Layout
    1. See earlier comments about heading casing.
    2. The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections.
  3. Learning features
    1. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words would make the text more interactive.
    2. Embedding interwiki links links to related book chapters would help to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
    3. Excellent use of images.
    4. No use of tables.
    5. Basic use of feature boxes.
    6. Basic use of quizzes.
    7. The quiz questions could be more effective as learning prompts by being embedded as single questions within each corresponding section rather than being presented as a set of questions at the end.
    8. No use of case studies or examples.
  4. Grammar
    1. The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags).
    2. Check and make correct use of commas.
    3. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's).
  5. APA style
    1. Refer to each Table and each Figure at least once within the main text using APA style (e.g., no full-stop).
    2. Use APA style for Figure captions. See example.
    3. Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text.
    4. Citations are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. A serial comma is needed before "&" or "and" for citations involving three or more authors.
      2. No comma is needed before "et al".
    5. References are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. Check and correct use of capitalisation.

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. ~5 logged, useful, social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:27, 6 November 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a basic Prezi presentation.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. The presentation provides a basic overview of the topic.
  2. Add and narrate an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered.
  3. A Conclusion slide is presented with a take-home message(s). Consider making the messages more practical - things people can apply immediately, in their everyday lives.

Communication[edit source]

  1. The presentation makes use of text and image based slides with narrated audio.
  2. Reasonably well paced.
  3. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read.
  4. The visual communication is supplemented by images.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. Communicate the full chapter title and sub-title in both the video title and on the opening slide this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. Audio recording seemed to be cut off for one slide. Otherwise clear.
  3. Visual display was effective.
  4. Image sources and their copyright status are very well indicated.
  5. A copyright license for the presentation is provided.
  6. A link to the book chapter is not provided.
  7. A link from the book chapter is provided.
  8. A written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:00, 17 November 2019 (UTC)[reply]