Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2019/Habitual instigation and habitual execution

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Topic development feedback[edit source]

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

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Title and sub-title[edit source]

  1. Excellent

User page[edit source]

  1. Created, with description about self and link to book chapter
  2. Used effectively

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. 2 summarised. Provide more direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions.

Section headings[edit source]

  1. Well developed 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic.
  2. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.

Key points[edit source]

  1. Write using 3rd person perspective.
  2. Key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations.
  3. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles.
  4. Consider including more examples/case studies.
  5. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section.

Image[edit source]

  1. Provided, with an APA style caption
  2. Cite each figure at least once in the main text.

References[edit source]

  1. Good.
  2. For full APA style:
    1. Use correct capitalisation
    2. Use the new recommended format for dois - http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2014/07/how-to-use-the-new-doi-format-in-apa-style.html
    3. Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within a volume

Resources[edit source]

  1. Good targets - but see my reformatting for better presentation

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:30, 27 September 2019 (UTC)


Chapter review and feedback[edit source]

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via UCLearn Canvas, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a mediocre chapter. A basic understanding is demonstrated, but there is a lack of depth in reviewing research and providing practical application.
  2. Overview - Consider presenting one or more examples or case studies.
  3. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits.
  4. This chapter is well under the maximum word count.

Theory[edit source]

  1. Sufficient coverage of theory involving the relation between the target constructs is provided. The theoretical explanations are somewhat bland and could benefit from further examples and tighter integration with research evidence.

Research[edit source]

  1. Basic but sufficient coverage of research is provided.
  2. When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
  3. Greater emphasis on major reviews and meta-analyses would be helpful.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. OK, but somewhat awkward and untidy.
    2. Use third person perspective, rather than first person (e.g., "we") or second person (e.g., "you") perspective.
    3. Some of the bullet-points should have been in full paragraph format.
    4. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned").
    5. Some statements could be explained more clearly - see the [say what?] tags
  2. Layout
    1. Increase the size of Figure 1 to make it easier to read.
    2. Figure 1 has been uploaded in violation of copyright restrictions - I've nominated it for deletion.
  3. Learning features
    1. Some use of interwiki links; the chapter could be improved by using more. Also consider embedding interwiki links links to other book chapters to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
    2. Basic use of images.
    3. No use of tables.
    4. Basic use of feature boxes.
    5. No use of quizzes.
    6. Basic use of case studies or examples.
  4. Grammar
    1. The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags).
    2. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's).
  5. Spelling
    1. Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the [spelling?] tags).
  6. Proofreading
    1. More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard.
  7. APA style
    1. Refer to each Table and each Figure at least once within the main text.
    2. Citations are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. A serial comma is needed before "&" or "and" for citations involving three or more authors.
      2. Check and correct formatting of multiple citations within parentheses.
    3. References are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. Check and correct use of capitalisation.
      2. See new doi format.

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. ~2 logged, useful, social contributions with direct links to evidence; already credited as part of the Topic Development.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:28, 4 November 2019 (UTC)


Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Canvas site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a basic presentation.
  2. This presentation makes use of simple tools.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. Add and narrate an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered.
  2. Some practical examples would be helpful; the material covered is quite general and abstract.
  3. There is an unnecessary focus on measurement - instead focus on theory, research, and applications.
  4. Check and correct spelling error on Conclusion slide.
  5. A Conclusion slide is presented but what are the practical take-home message(s) that we can use to help improve our everyday lives?

Communication[edit source]

  1. The presentation is pedestrian, based on narration of simple text-based slides.
  2. Well paced - not too fast or slow.
  3. Font size should be larger to make it easier to read.
  4. The visual communication could be improved by including some relevant images.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. The chapter title but not the sub-title are used in the video title - the latter would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. The chapter title and sub-title are used on the opening slide - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  3. Audio recording quality was very good.
  4. Visual display quality was basic.
  5. A copyright license for the presentation is provided.
  6. A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the video description but not in the meta-data.
  7. A link to the book chapter is provided.
  8. A link from the book chapter is provided.
  9. A written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:03, 18 November 2019 (UTC)