Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2019/Female killer motivation

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings (or sentence casing). For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

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-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:50, 19 August 2019 (UTC)

@U3160373: Just drawing attention to the feedback above. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:00, 31 August 2019 (UTC)

I really enjoyed reading your book chapter! Your readability and flow of ideas works well. It's a great idea to add your comment at the end that people should understand this topic extends much further than you were able to discuss. I have done mine on motivation to support the death penalty and found my self looking up women currently on death row for murder in the USA. I think it would be very interesting indeed to find out what their motivations were as their crimes and victims are varied. Really awesome work! --U3125721 (discusscontribs) 08:50, 18 October 2019 (UTC)U3125721

Topic development feedback[edit source]

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Title and sub-title[edit source]

  1. Excellent

User page[edit source]

  1. Created, with description about self. Have added link to book chapter

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. Summarised with links to evidence
  2. Remember to sign contributions to talk pages

Section headings[edit source]

  1. Well developed 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic.
  2. Consider introducing case studies earlier.

Key points[edit source]

  1. Key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations.
  2. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles.
  3. Include comma after second last author: (Harrison, Murphy, Ho, Bowers & Flaherty, 2015)
  4. Consider including more examples/case studies.
  5. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section rather than having one longer quiz towards the end.

Image[edit source]

  1. Provided, with an APA style caption
  2. Cite each figure at least once in the main text.

References[edit source]

  1. Excellent.
  2. For full APA style:
    1. Use correct capitalisation
    2. Use correct italicisation
    3. Use the new recommended format for dois -

Resources[edit source]

  1. Excellent

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:40, 25 September 2019 (UTC)

This case may be of interest: -- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:42, 9 October 2019 (UTC)

Hey! This is such an interesting topic, looks like you're doing a great job with it. I have always wondered why people are far more shocked by women who kill as opposed to men who kill. A couple of reasons for this could be: cultural learning, in that we are exposed to more incidences of men who kill and therefore become somewhat desensitised to it. Another reason could be that we associate women with more caring and nurturing characteristics, and are therefore shocked when our biases are contradicted with such violent acts. Anyway, your chapter looks great! Maybe adding a section looking at maternal filicide could be super interesting. Ill link a study I thought could be useful for you:,contains,maternal%20filicide&offset=0

Minor spelling and grammatical errors were corrected. For example, some sentences were missing commas. This chapter is a really interesting read. I particularly enjoy the different case studies which provide a practical application of what had been discussed in the previous paragraph. --Briannathefox (discusscontribs) 01:03, 19 October 2019 (UTC)

They may not be relevant or they may be overlap but I found two previous book chapters on topics you brought up that may be useful to add to the see also section. I'll provide the links below (discusscontribs) 09:12, 19 October 2019 (UTC)

Contribution[edit source]

Hey, I've just read through your chapter and it is really great so far, after a little bit of research i found a journal article (which i have linked) that studied female serial killers and found similarities in demographics and mental health etc, it was mentioned that a majority of female serial killers a caucasian who marry people and have kids and that less than half of them have experienced mental illness. Thought it might be interesting to touch on in ypur chapter :)--U3160677 (discusscontribs) 03:21, 20 October 2019 (UTC)

I've enjoyed reading your chapter, you've sectioned it out nicely using the text boxes to break up content. Good job! --U3158296 (discusscontribs) 08:27, 20 October 2019 (UTC)

Such an interesting topic, your chapter looks greatǃ all I have to offer is a couple of external links - podcasts that I know about which tie in perfectly with your topic. The why women kill podcast and women who kill podcast - Thanks u3114966 (social contrib. 20th October)

Hey, I find your topic very interesting. The difference between male and female crime is astounding. It amazes me how the two sexes differ. check out: Vitopoulos, N. A., Peterson-Badali, M., & Skilling, T. A. (2012). The relationship between matching service to criminogenic need and recidivism in male and female youth: Examining the RNR principles in practice. Criminal Justice and Behavior, 39(8), 1025-1041. --Beth Matthews (discusscontribs) 12:31, 20 October 2019 (UTC)

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to address a real-world phenomenon.
  2. Perhaps a greater emphasis on prevention would be helpful.
  3. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits.

Theory[edit source]

  1. Relevant theories are very well selected, described, and explained.

Research[edit source]

  1. Relevant research is very well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the chapter is very well written.
    2. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned").
    3. The chapter benefited from a well developed Overview and Conclusion, with clear focus question(s) and take-home messages.
  2. Layout
    1. The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections.
  3. Learning features
    1. Interwiki links are well used.
    2. Check and correct (for some links): Use in-text interwiki links, rather than external links.
    3. You may be interested to check out: The Horror of Dolores Roach
    4. Excellent use of images, feature box, and quizzes.
  4. Grammar
    1. Check and make correct use of commas.
    2. Use serial commas[1] - it is part of APA style.
  5. APA style
    1. Use APA style when citing figures.
    2. In-text citations should be in alphabetical order.
    3. References: Check and correct use of capitalisation.

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. 11 logged, useful, social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:06, 4 November 2019 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is an excellent presentation.
  2. This presentation makes effective use of powtoon animation tools.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. Well selected content - not too much or too little.
  2. The presentation is well structured.
  3. Add and narrate an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered.
  4. The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages.
  5. Fix grammar (ownership apostrophe) ~02:45.

Communication[edit source]

  1. The presentation is easy to follow and interesting to watch and listen to.
  2. The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides with narrated audio.
  3. Well paced.
  4. Excellent/Consider using greater intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement.
  5. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read.
  6. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. Communicate the chapter title and sub-title in both the video title and on the opening slide this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. Audio recording quality was excellent.
  3. Visual display quality was excellent.
  4. Image sources are provided.
  5. A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the video description but not in the meta-data.
  6. A link to the book chapter is provided.
  7. A link from the book chapter is provided.
  8. A written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:58, 18 November 2019 (UTC)