Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2019/Environmental self-identity

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Hey, just added the https:// to the doi references so it creates a link to the page. Good luck! --Cass1804 (discuss • contribs) 04:27, 20 October 2019 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. For additional feedback, see following comments and these copyedits. Theory Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained. There is too much general theoretical material. Instead, summarise and link to further information (such as other book chapters or Wikipedia articles), to allow this chapter to focus on the specific topic (i.e., the sub-title question). Research Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory. When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Written expression Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is excellent. Use active rather than passive voice[1]. Use third person perspective rather than first person (e.g., "we") or second person (e.g., "you") perspective[2]. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead, use section linking. The chapter benefited from a well developed Overview and Conclusion, with clear focus question(s) and take-home messages. Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections. Learning features Good use of interwiki links to Wikipedia articles, but use in-text interwiki links, rather than external links. No use of embedded links to related book chapters. Embedding links links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Very good use of images. No use of tables. Good use of feature boxes. Excellent use of quizzes. Good use of case studies or examples. Grammar Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals').[3]. Use serial commas[4] - it is part of APA style and generally recommended by grammaticists. APA style Figures and tables Use APA style to refer to each Table and each Figure (e.g., remove full-stops). Citations use correct APA style. References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation. See new doi format. Social contribution ~22 logged, minor social contributions with direct links to evidence. Many of these were links to Wikipedia articles using external links. Ideally, add these as interwiki links.

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a promising, reasonably good presentation. This presentation makes effective use of simple tools. Structure and content Less coverage of general theory and more research and application, with examples, would be ideal. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little. The presentation is well structured. Add and narrate an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered. A Conclusion slide is presented with a take-home message(s). How do theories and research relate to the take-home messages? Communication The presentation is easy to follow. The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides with narrated audio. Well paced. Good intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images. Production quality The chapter title and sub-title are used in the video title - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Use the chapter title and sub-title on the opening slide because this helps to match the book chapter and to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Audio recording quality was excellent. Visual display quality was very good. Remove the speaker icon from the middle of the slides. Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. Either acknowledge the image sources and their licenses in the video description or remove the presentation. A copyright license for the presentation is provided. A link to the book chapter is provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. A written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:20, 22 November 2019 (UTC)