Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2019/Asylum seeker detention and emotional well-being

From Wikiversity
Jump to navigation Jump to search


Chapter review and feedback[edit source]

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via UCLearn Canvas, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a promising, informative chapter that provides a basic overview of relevant theory and research.
  2. Overview - consider adding an example or case study.
  3. For additional feedback, see following comments and these copyedits.

Theory[edit source]

  1. Relevant theories are described and explained in relation to asylum seeker detection.
  2. More examples or case studies would be helpful.

Research[edit source]

  1. Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the [factual?] tags).
  2. Relevant research is reviewed and discussed in relation to theory in a basic way.
  3. When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
  4. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is reasonably good
    2. The chapter benefited from a well developed Overview and Conclusion, with clear focus question(s) and take-home messages.
  2. Layout
    1. For numbered lists, use Wikiversity formatting per Tutorial 1.
  3. Learning features
    1. Basic use of embedded interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive.
    2. No use of embedded links to related book chapters. Embedding links links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
    3. Basic use of images.
    4. No use of tables.
    5. Excellent use of feature boxes.
    6. Basic use of quizzes.
    7. Basic use of case studies or examples.
  4. Grammar
    1. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals').[1].
    2. Check and correct use of affect vs. effect.
  5. APA style
    1. Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10).
    2. Direct quotes need page numbers.
    3. Figures and tables
      1. Refer to each Table and Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1).
    4. Citations are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets.
    5. References are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. Check and correct use of capitalisation.
      2. Check and correct use of italicisation.
      3. See new doi format.

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. ~3 logged, very minor, social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:47, 24 November 2019 (UTC)[reply]


Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Canvas site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a reasonably good presentation.
  2. This presentation makes effective use of powtoon tools.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little.
  2. Add and narrate an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered.
  3. The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages.

Communication[edit source]

  1. The presentation is interesting to watch and listen to.
  2. The presentation makes effective use of text and animated image based slides with narrated audio.
  3. Reasonably well paced.
  4. Consider slowing down and leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
  5. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read.
  6. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. The chapter title but not the sub-title are used in the video title - the latter would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. The chapter title and sub-title are used on the opening slide - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  3. Audio recording volume was variable - check microphone set-up.
  4. Visual display quality was excellent.
  5. Image sources and their copyright status are provided.
  6. A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the video description but not in the meta-data.
  7. A link to the book chapter is provided.
  8. A link from the book chapter is provided.
  9. A written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:57, 24 November 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Retrieved from "https://en.wikiversity.org/w/index.php?title=Talk:Motivation_and_emotion/Book/2019/Asylum_seeker_detention_and_emotional_well-being&oldid=2096216"