Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2018/Restorative justice and emotion

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u3155743 (Luke Mahoney) Bazemore, G., & Schiff, M. (2015). Restorative community justice: Repairing harm and transforming communities. Routledge. really good article on the benefits of restorative justice and healing Indigenous Communities

Suggestions[edit]

Hi, great work on the chapter, I have a few small suggestions to improve your work! Firstly, adding hyperlinks to key words in the text will enhance the page and make it more interactive, secondly maybe look to add more images, tables or colourful text boxes etc as that would enhance the look of the page, it is currently quite monotone in colour, also maybe consider adding more relevant chapters from previous years in your see also section. I am going to go through your references and remove the capitals from the journal articles as only the first word needs capitalisation, and also remove the capitalisation from your headings where it is not needed. Hope this is helpful! --U3160212 (discusscontribs) 04:30, 21 October 2018 (UTC)

Feedback[edit]

Great work on the book chapter! It was very well written and interesting to read. I think you should keep the practical applications section separate from the emotional intelligence section as it makes the chapter flow better. I enjoyed the quizzes as they made the chapter more engaging and interactive and broke up the text. I think you could improve the chapter by adding hyperlinks to the Wikipedia pages for key terms to make the page more interactive and to help readers understand key terms and concepts. You can do this by searching the key terms in Wikipedia and copying the title of the Wikipedia page. You can then highlight the key word in your chapter and select link. Search for the page by typing w:and the title of the Wikipedia page. This should create a hyperlink. As mentioned in the comment above, I think it would also help to add more colour and images to the page in order to enhance the look of the book chapter. --Bridie Mcinerney (discusscontribs) 08:26, 21 October 2018 (UTC)



Topic development feedback

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via Canvas. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

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Title, sub-title, TOC[edit]

  1. Good

User page[edit]

  1. Very good

Social contribution[edit]

  1. OK
  2. Links don't go directly to evidence of contribution
  3. Sign comments on discussion pages (use ~~~~ at the end of the comment)
  4. See suggestions for how to record social contributions

Section headings[edit]

  1. The key section in terms of addressing the topic and marking criteria will be "Role of emotion in restorative justice". The previous sections could be condensed/summarised, with links to other Wikiversity/Wikipedia resources for more info. That will allow the bulk of the chapter to focus on the specific topic in the sub-title. Either that or incorporate "emotion" more clearly into these earlier sections.

Key points[edit]

  1. Overall, reasonably good.
  2. The book-end sections, Overview and Conclusion, are arguably the most important. These are currently underdeveloped, so it is difficult to see where the chapter is going. I suggest working on these before bulking out the main content.

Image[edit]

  1. Excellent

References[edit]

  1. OK
  2. Use APA style
  3. For latest APA style recommended format for dois see http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2017/03/doi-display-guidelines-update-march-2017.html

Resources[edit]

  1. OK
  2. See also - also include links to related book chapters

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:00, 1 October 2018 (UTC)

References[edit]

Hey there, i have just had a quick skim through your chapter after seeing your comment on canvas and have noticed that you are using the older format for doi presentation. here is the link that James sent me explaining the new way http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2017/03/doi-display-guidelines-update-march-2017.html Essentially you want to delete the 'doi:' and instead display it with "http//doi.org/" at the beginning. Hope this was helpful! :)

Suggestion for journal article[edit]

Really enjoying the quizzes after each section really gets the reader to test their knowledge on the topic.

https://www.researchgate.net/profile/Tyler_Okimoto/publication/5889247_Retributive_and_Restorative_Justice/links/559f6aef08ae03c44a5cf65e/Retributive-and-Restorative-Justice.pdf

this journal article would be good if u wanted to provide a differences of what restorative and and retributive justice are

U3160397 (discusscontribs) 17:23pm, 21 October 2018 (UTC)

Heading casing[edit]

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings (or sentence casing). For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:08, 17 November 2018 (UTC)


Chapter review and feedback[edit]

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Overall[edit]

  1. Overall, this is a very impressive chapter on a somewhat challenging topic.
  2. This chapter over the maximum word count. There is too much generic background - summarise this and link to Wikipedia articles for further information.
  3. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits.

Theory[edit]

  1. Overall, this chapter does an excellent job of incorporating a range of theory in considering the role of emotion in restorative justice.
  2. Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained.
  3. Cognitive theory is about the amygdala? (Cognitive is about thinking; amygdala relates to neuropsychological theory).
  4. I didn't really get the point of the Rossner case study - probably needs to be summarised more briefly, with more explanation of its relevance to the topic - emotion and RS.
  5. A critical, solution-focused perspective is evident.

Research[edit]

  1. Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory.
  2. When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.

Written expression[edit]

  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, this is a well written and well constructed chapter.
    2. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
    3. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned").
    4. The chapter benefited from a well developed Overview and Conclusion, with clear focus question(s) and take-home messages.
  2. Layout
    1. The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections.
  3. Learning features
    1. Interwiki links are reasonably well used; perhaps more could be added.
    2. Basic use of well captioned images.
    3. No use of tables.
    4. Fabulous use of quizzes.
    5. Some use of case studies or examples.
  4. Spelling, grammar, and proofreading is very good.
  5. APA style
    1. Direct quotes need page numbers.
    2. Use APA style for Figure captions.
    3. Citations
      1. In-text citations should be in alphabetical order.
      2. Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets.
    4. References
      1. Seems like a short reference list - is everything cited in the reference list?
      2. Excellent APA style


Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Canvas site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

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Overall[edit]

  1. Overall, this is a competent presentation that makes effective use of simple tools.

Structure and content[edit]

  1. Well selected and structured content - not too much or too little.
  2. The presentation is well structured (Title, Overview, Body, Conclusion).

Communication[edit]

  1. The presentation makes effective use of text based slides with narrated audio.
  2. Well paced.
  3. Consider increasing the font size to make it easier to read (may mean less text or more slides).
  4. The visual communication could be improved by including some relevant images.

Production quality[edit]

  1. Use the full chapter title and sub-title on the opening slide and in the name of the video because this helps to match the book chapter and to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. Audio and video recording quality are clear.
  3. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided.
  4. A link to and from the book chapter is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:17, 17 November 2018 (UTC)