Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2018/Parental investment theory

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Heading casing[edit source]

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:12, 29 September 2018 (UTC)


Topic development feedback

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Title, sub-title, TOC[edit source]

  1. Excellent

User page[edit source]

  1. Lovely

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. Excellent summary
  2. See suggestions for how to record social contributions

Section headings[edit source]

  1. Clear, logical heading structure
  2. Main suggestion is to keep initial sections relatively short, to allow focus on the sections which directly address the topic (i.e., the sub-title)

Key points[edit source]

  1. A very good understanding of the topic is evident
  2. Overview is well developed and focused; Conclusion is underdeveloped

Image[edit source]

  1. Excellent captioning

References[edit source]

  1. Useful list
  2. Use APA style

Resources[edit source]

  1. See also - Excellent
  2. External links - Very good

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:12, 29 September 2018 (UTC)


Chapter review and feedback[edit source]

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via Moodle, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world problem.
  2. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits.

Theory[edit source]

  1. Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained.
  2. There is some critique of PIT in the Conclusion, but perhaps this could have been expanded.
  3. Examples are well used.
  4. Perhaps consider, what are the practical, take-home messages that could help to improve our everyday lives?

Research[edit source]

  1. Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory.
  2. Also consider including systematic reviews and/or meta-analyses.
  3. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression is generally very good.
    1. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
    2. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
    3. Avoid starting sentences with a citation unless the author is particularly pertinent. Instead, it is more interesting for the the content/key point to be communicated, with the citation included along the way or, more typically, in brackets at the end of the sentence.
    4. The chapter benefited from a well developed Overview and Conclusion, with clear focus question(s) and take-home messages.
    5. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned").
  2. Layout
    1. The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections.
  3. Learning features
    1. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words would make the text more interactive.
    2. Excellent linking to other relevant book chapters.
    3. Excellent use of images.
    4. Very good use of tables. Add table captions.
    5. Excellent use of research-based examples.
  4. Spelling, grammar, and proofreading.
    1. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's).
    2. Use serial commas.
  5. APA style
    1. Citations
      1. A serial comma is needed before "&" for citations involving three or more authors.
    2. References are not in full APA style e.g.,
      1. Check and correct capitalisation.
      2. Check and correct italicisation.
      3. Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within volumes.


Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is an excellent presentation that makes effective use of simple tools.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. Well selected and structured content - not too much or too little.
  2. The presentation is well structured (Title, Overview, Body, Conclusion).
  3. Examples are used.
  4. Theory and research are covered.
  5. Perhaps add more critique of PIT.

Communication[edit source]

  1. The presentation is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to watch and listen to.
  2. Excellent pauses between sentences. This helps the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
  3. The text is sufficiently large to make it easy to read in the time provided.
  4. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. The presentation is over the maximum time limit.
  2. The full chapter title and sub-title are used in the video title - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  3. The full chapter title and sub-title are used on the opening slide - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  4. Audio and video recording quality was excellent.
  5. Images sources and copyright is well acknowledged.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:27, 13 November 2018 (UTC)