Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2018/Mindfulness and sporting performance

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Really nice outline. I noticed you had an empty subheading for 'flow' and found for my chapter a really nice summary of flow styles in rock climbing that may be of use;

Delle Fave. A., Bassi. M., & Massimini. F. (2003). Quality of experience and risk taking perception in high-altitude rock climbing. Journal of Applied Sport Psychology. 15. 82-98.

Essentially it discusses how in rock climbing the ability to use flow states for motivational means is crucial to people sticking with the sport and progressing. I know your chapter is on mindfulness but I imagine several concepts are interchangeable such as emotional regulation, being fully in the moment and activity, focus ability, skill development, etc.

I hope this helps! --U3114099 (discuss • contribs) 02:44, 2 September 2018 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:39, 1 October 2018 (UTC)

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-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:39, 1 October 2018 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a basic, insufficient chapter. Overview is promising, but rather than "touch on" the effects that mindfulness has on sporting performance", this should be the primary focus of the chapter. Key points would probably be better as focus questions. Consider adding a case study. The Conclusion is basic; add practical, take-home messages for how to enhance sporting performance via mindfulness. For additional feedback, see comments below and [ these copyedits]. Theory Discussion of theory is OK, but lacks depth. The discussion of SDT is not connected to the book chapter's topic; neither is the section on intrinsic motivation and mindfulness. There is a lack of detail in practical application. Research Some relevant research is briefly mentioned towards the end of the chapter, but I am doubtful that the best available literature has been identified, summarised, and synthesised in this chapter. Many statements are unreferenced (see the tags). When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Greater emphasis on major reviews and meta-analyses would be helpful. Written expression Written expression The overall quality of written expression is barely sufficient for 3rd year undergraduate, and is not of a professional standard. More effort and/or assistance is needed. Internationalise: Write for an international, not just Australian audience. Australians make up only 0.32% of the world human population. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences. Use third person perspective, rather than second person perspective. Layout See earlier comments about heading casing. Avoid having sections with only one sub-section. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Learning features Embed links to other relevant chapters. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words would make the text more interactive. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's). Basic use of images. No use of tables. No use of quizzes. Some use of case studies or examples. Spelling, grammar, and proofreading. The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Use serial commas. APA style Use APA style for Figure captions. Citations Comma is need after author name and before the year. Do not include author initials. Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets. More than one citation per point should be included within the one set of parentheses, separated by a semi-colon. References are not in full APA style e.g., Check and correct capitalisation. Check and correct italicisation.

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent presentation that makes effective use of Moovly. Structure and content Well selected and structured content - not too much (although the presentation feels a little fast/rushed - could be more mindful?) or too little. The presentation is well structured (Title, Overview, Body, Conclusion). Communication The presentation is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to watch and listen to. The presentation makes effective use of text and animation-based slides with narrated audio. Consider slowing down and leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read in the time provided. Production quality No need to brand the presentation with the specific unit details etc. - the idea is to make a presentation with broad, rather than specific, appeal. The full chapter title and sub-title are used in the video title - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. The full chapter title and sub-title are used on the opening slide - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Audio and video recording quality are excellent. Consider muting the music during narration to help the viewer concentrate on the combination of visual information and narrated audio. A copyright license for the presentation is provided. A link to and from the book chapter is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:25, 16 November 2018 (UTC)