--U3073945 (discuss • contribs) 22:44, 2 September 2018 (UTC) Apologies as I wasn't sure where to provide this feedback:
Looks like a great start, one suggestion is that maybe for the overview you can add information about how Australians work long hours and therefore it's important for us to have job satisfaction as we spend a lot of time at our jobs. I remember reading that Australians work the longest hours in the developed world so if you can find evidence of this as a citation it might help provide some context for your overview.
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The chapter relies heavily on old sources. Also incorporate the best available contemporary sources on the topic.
The material about measuring job satisfaction is not directly relevant to addressing the topic: "What are the main ingredients for job satisfaction?". It could possibly be made more relevant by considering the common factors measured across different tools.
When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
Greater emphasis on major reviews and meta-analyses would be helpful.
Some of the bullet-points should have been in full paragraph format.
Avoid starting sentences with a citation unless the author is particularly pertinent. Instead, it is more interesting for the the content/key point to be communicated, with the citation included along the way or, more typically, in brackets at the end of the sentence.
Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
The chapter could benefit from a more developed Overview and Conclusion, with clearer focus question(s) (Overview) and take-home self-help message for each focus question (Conclusion).
Obtaining comments on a more developed chapter plan could have helped to improve the chapter.
The Overview has been expanded, but is undermined by being conceptually vague (e.g., no definition or theories or examples are provided) and the quality of written expression is not of a professional standard.
The Definitions section has been rewritten but still seems to be incomplete (e.g., missing p. # for direct quote and a missing year for the second citation). Written expression needs further work (e.g., who is "we"?).
The Studies on Job Satisfaction section was expanded but is still incomplete in that bullet-points are provided, rather than full sentences and paragraphs. The content doesn't seem to address the question: "what are the ingredients for job satisfaction?".
The What Causes Job Satisfaction? section was expanded and now provides much more relevant material. The section is basic in that it described several studies separately, rather than integrating findings, but it is at least Pass level.
The Theories & Models of Job Satisfaction section is expanded to include Maslow's Hierarchy of Needs. There is basic application of this theory. Probably a better needs theory would be Self Determination Theory. Some minor improvements are made to descriptions of other theories.
There are minor improvements to the measurement section.
A Conclusion has been added. It is very basic and vague, lacking in synthesis of theory and research, with no practical take-home messages.
Clarification requests have been addressed and removed.
APA style is still not used consistently (e.g., ampersands are used outside of parentheses and formatting of references has not been corrected).