Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2018/Job satisfaction

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Hey! Here are a few articles that might help to get you started. Really interesting topic!,, Good luck! --U3158984 (discusscontribs) 22:43, 1 September 2018 (UTC)

--U3073945 (discusscontribs) 22:44, 2 September 2018 (UTC) Apologies as I wasn't sure where to provide this feedback: Looks like a great start, one suggestion is that maybe for the overview you can add information about how Australians work long hours and therefore it's important for us to have job satisfaction as we spend a lot of time at our jobs. I remember reading that Australians work the longest hours in the developed world so if you can find evidence of this as a citation it might help provide some context for your overview.

Heading casing[edit]

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:44, 1 October 2018 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via Canvas. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

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Title, sub-title, TOC[edit]

  1. Excellent

User page[edit]

  1. Good

Social contribution[edit]

  1. None summarised on user page

Section headings[edit]

  1. Limited development
  2. Replace template heading with customised headings
  3. Consider using sub-headings within the main headings
  4. Introduction content should appear in the Overview or some other section with another name (i.e., don't have an Introduction)

Key points[edit]

  1. Limited development


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-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:44, 1 October 2018 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback[edit]

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via Moodle, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

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  1. Overall, this chapter is current below requirements for Pass-level.
  2. Basic Overview - consider adding focus questions, a case study, interwiki links etc.
  3. No Conclusion Frowny.svg.
  4. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits.


  1. There is a scatter-gun approach to mentioning various theories, but a distinct lack of integration and synthesis.
  2. The bullet-point definitional material should be reduced, synthesised, and expressed in a single paragraph.
  3. More examples would help to illustrate practical understanding and application of theoretical concepts.
  4. A Conclusion and practical take-away messages are needed.


  1. The chapter relies heavily on old sources. Also incorporate the best available contemporary sources on the topic.
  2. The material about measuring job satisfaction is not directly relevant to addressing the topic: "What are the main ingredients for job satisfaction?". It could possibly be made more relevant by considering the common factors measured across different tools.
  3. When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
  4. Greater emphasis on major reviews and meta-analyses would be helpful.

Written expression[edit]

  1. Written expression is not of a professional standard.
    1. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned").
    2. Some of the bullet-points should have been in full paragraph format.
    3. Avoid starting sentences with a citation unless the author is particularly pertinent. Instead, it is more interesting for the the content/key point to be communicated, with the citation included along the way or, more typically, in brackets at the end of the sentence.
    4. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
    5. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
    6. The chapter could benefit from a more developed Overview and Conclusion, with clearer focus question(s) (Overview) and take-home self-help message for each focus question (Conclusion).
    7. Obtaining comments on a more developed chapter plan could have helped to improve the chapter.
  2. Layout
    1. See earlier comments about heading casing.
    2. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
  3. Learning features
    1. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words would make the text more interactive.
    2. Links to external resources should be moved into the "External links" section at the end of the chapter.
    3. No use of images.
    4. Very basic use of a table.
    5. No use of quizzes.
    6. No use of case studies or examples.
  4. Spelling, grammar, and proofreading.
    1. The quality of written expression is not of professional standard and needs more effort (proofreading) or external professional assistance.
    2. More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard.
    3. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's).
    4. Check and correct use of commas.
    5. Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the [spelling?] tags).
    6. The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags).
    7. Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour).
  5. APA style
    1. Direct quotes need page numbers. Where page numbers are cited, APA style formatting hasn't been used.
    2. Direct quotes do not indicate achievement of learning outcomes. A better approach is present a synthesis of concepts in your own words.
    3. Did you consult Hoppock (1935)? If not, this should be a secondary citation.
    4. Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numbers (e.g., 10).
    5. Use APA style for Table captions.
    6. Refer to each Table and each Figure at least once within the main text.
    7. Citations
      1. Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets.
      2. A serial comma is needed before "&" or "and" for citations involving three or more authors.
      3. Incorrect formatting is used for et al.
    8. References are not in full APA style e.g.,
      1. Check completeness - some required information is missing.
      2. Check and correct capitalisation.
      3. Check and correct italicisation.
      4. Add spaces between author initials.
      5. See new doi format.
      6. Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within volumes.

Multimedia feedback

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  1. Overall, this presentation does not satisfy the requirements for this assessment exercise.
  2. This video should be deleted because it uses copyrighted material without permission.

Structure and content[edit]

  1. Many of the comments about the book chapter also apply to this section.
  2. Add and narrate a Title slide, to help the viewer understanding the focus and goal of the presentation.
  3. Add and narrate an Overview slide, to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered.
  4. The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages.


  1. The presentation consists mostly of video clips from commercial, copyrighted movies/TV. There is also some slides with text.
  2. No narrated audio is presented.
  3. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read in the time provided.

Production quality[edit]

  1. Use the full chapter title and sub-title on the opening slide and in the name of the video because this helps to match the book chapter and to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. Copyright is violated and sources are not acknowledged.
  3. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided.
  4. An active, working, clickable hyperlink to the book chapter is not provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:45, 16 November 2018 (UTC)

Chapter resubmission comments[edit]

Based on these changes, the following copyedits were made and some additional feedback is:

  1. The Overview has been expanded, but is undermined by being conceptually vague (e.g., no definition or theories or examples are provided) and the quality of written expression is not of a professional standard.
  2. The Definitions section has been rewritten but still seems to be incomplete (e.g., missing p. # for direct quote and a missing year for the second citation). Written expression needs further work (e.g., who is "we"?).
  3. The Studies on Job Satisfaction section was expanded but is still incomplete in that bullet-points are provided, rather than full sentences and paragraphs. The content doesn't seem to address the question: "what are the ingredients for job satisfaction?".
  4. The What Causes Job Satisfaction? section was expanded and now provides much more relevant material. The section is basic in that it described several studies separately, rather than integrating findings, but it is at least Pass level.
  5. The Theories & Models of Job Satisfaction section is expanded to include Maslow's Hierarchy of Needs. There is basic application of this theory. Probably a better needs theory would be Self Determination Theory. Some minor improvements are made to descriptions of other theories.
  6. There are minor improvements to the measurement section.
  7. A Conclusion has been added. It is very basic and vague, lacking in synthesis of theory and research, with no practical take-home messages.
  8. Clarification requests have been addressed and removed.
  9. APA style is still not used consistently (e.g., ampersands are used outside of parentheses and formatting of references has not been corrected).
  10. No interactive learning features were added.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:06, 14 December 2018 (UTC)

Multimedia resubmission comments[edit]

  1. Selection and organisation of content improved
  2. Visual communication improved
  3. No improvement in auditory communication
  4. No improvement in meta-data
  5. No improvement in licensing

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:17, 14 December 2018 (UTC)