Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2018/Gender fluidity motivation

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Any feedback is very much appreciated. Thanks.

This topic development is looking great. I am very excited to read the finished chapter as the topic is relevant and interesting. There are two minor modifications I would make to this. The first is to combine Erikson's stages of psychosocial development and Devor's 14-stage model together into one. The second recommendation is to give the readers some guidance as to what you are going to talk about in your overview. For example, "this chapter will cover X, Y, and Z." Other than that, I can't fault it. Great work.--BB7897 (discuss • contribs) 03:33, 27 August 2018 (UTC)--BB7897 (discuss • contribs) 03:33, 27 August 2018 (UTC)

Book chapter on user page

Hi U3154928,

I noticed that your book chapter on gender fluidity motivation is currently appearing in your user page while the relevant book chapter link is empty. Hopefully this gives you enough time to transfer it over and fill the user page with some information about yourself and link to your chapter. --U3122470 (discuss • contribs) 03:10, 31 August 2018 (UTC)

Thank you so much U3122470. I have now transferred all relevant information to my book chapter link. Thank you again! --U3154928 (discuss • contribs) 04:06, 1 September 2018 (UTC)

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Title, sub-title, TOC Very good User page Excellent Social contribution Good See suggestions for how to record social contributions Section headings Well organised - clear, informative Probably don't need the What is motivation? section - stay focused on motivation for gender fluidity - and just provide a link say to motivation for more info. Key points Well developed ideas for relevant content; well researched, with citations Overview is excellent APA style for direct quotes - include page numbers Expand Conclusion - this is the most important section Image Excellent choice of image and relevant image captioning Excellent use of tables References Well selected Excellent APA style. To improve: Check APA style re inclusion of issue numbers For latest APA style recommended format for dois see http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2017/03/doi-display-guidelines-update-march-2017.html Resources See also - Excellent; Have tidied up the formatting External links - Fantastic

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:26, 29 September 2018 (UTC)

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I found this really interesting to read and loved your use of wiki content. Great job--U3092381 (discuss • contribs) 06:38, 19 October 2018 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help explain and understand a real-world phenomenon. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits. Theory Relevant theories are well selected, described, explained, and critiqued, and integrated. Research Some relevant research is reviewed and discussed in relation to theory. A critical approach is evident. Written expression Written expression Overall, the chapter is very well written. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. Avoid starting sentences with a citation unless the author is particularly pertinent. Instead, it is more interesting for the the content/key point to be communicated, with the citation included along the way or, more typically, in brackets at the end of the sentence. Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections. Avoid having sections with only one sub-section. Learning features Interwiki links are well used. Good use of images. Excellent use of tables. No use of quizzes. Some use of case studies or examples. Spelling, grammar, and proofreading. Generally, excellent. Use serial commas. APA style Generally, excellent. A serial comma is needed before "&" or "and" for citations involving three or more authors. In-text citations should be in alphabetical order.

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent presentation that makes effective use of simple tools. Structure and content Well selected and structured content - not too much or too little. The presentation is well structured (Title, Overview, Body, Conclusion). Communication The presentation is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to watch and listen to. Excellent pacing of narration and pauses between sentences, as well as clearly articulated. This helps the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point. Consider leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has The visual communication makes effective use of readable text and images. Production quality The full chapter title and sub-title are used in the video title - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. The full chapter title and sub-title are used on the opening slide - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Audio and video recording quality was excellent. Images sources are well acknowledged, but permission to re-use some of the images is dubious. A copyright license for the presentation is provided. A link to and from the book chapter is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:12, 15 November 2018 (UTC)