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Hello,

You have a great page so far! I found your topic personally interesting as I am currently also studying Criminology and so I have a little understanding of how crime committed to the elderly is heavily portrayed in the media, and thus can cause a copy cat effect (which you have addressed in providing the Social Learning Theory).

I just thought I'd provide this article on some recent statistics on abuse in the elderly, theoretical explanations for abuse to the elderly, consequences of abuse to the elderly and areas for future study.

The link is here: http://web.a.ebscohost.com.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/ehost/pdfviewer/pdfviewer?vid=4&sid=7f60d94f-f0ab-4179-8d46-3f5de7b9302b%40sessionmgr4006

I hope you find this helpful!

--Ju3141393 (discusscontribs) 15:01, 1 September 2018 (UTC)Reply


Hi,

Have found an interesting paper examining the effects of elder abuse in affecting the onset of dimentia, think it would be an interesting piece! hope you find it helpful! https://search.proquest.com/openview/6c2d50a762ac659bd74406307c61c6b7/1?pq-origsite=gscholar&cbl=40661



Hi,

Your page is looking really good! It looks like you have considered the topic very broadly and have a great structure to work within.

Have you considered also adding a section on the systematic issues that can arise in nursing home care? This could possibly fit under your current heading of 'common abusers'.

Here is an article on the topic that I thought provides a good summary of this issue (although it is not an academic paper) - http://australianageingagenda.com.au/2016/02/03/tackling-elder-abuse-in-residential-care-requires-systemic-culture-change/

Good luck! --Liam C (discusscontribs) 12:20, 3 September 2017 (UTC)Reply


Hi! You've picked an interesting topic. I'm keen to see the finished product and read the informative points you'll research for this topic. You have made a sound progression with the subheadings you want to use. Perhaps you could add points or tips throughout your chapter regarding some resolutions about broadening the communities knowledge and advocating compassion towards the elderly. For example, PSA (public service announcement): a reminder that next time you encounter an elderly who appears to need help, offer your assistance. --u3066780 (discusscontribs) 1:59, 4 September 2017 (UTC)

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Bužgová, R., & Ivanová, K. (2009). Elder abuse and mistreatment in residential settings. Nursing Ethics, 16, 110 - 126. doi: 10.1177/0969733008097996--U3117418 (discusscontribs) 05:27, 3 September 2017 (UTC)Reply

Hello, I found a link to an ebook that gives some pretty good information on the theoretical model of elder abuse motivations. Hope this helps- https://www.nap.edu/read/10406/chapter/5 AnnetaJ (discusscontribs) 07:21, 21 October 2017 (UTC)Reply


Topic development review and feedback

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Title, sub-title, TOC

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  1. Excellent

User page

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  1. Created
  2. Used effectively

Social contribution

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  1. Excellent

Section headings

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  1. Excellent overall structure.
  2. Perhaps overly detailed into 3rd-tier headings e.g., types of elder abuse could possibly be more effectively summarised into a table with a brief descriptive Overview and provide interwiki links to more info, so that the chapter concentrates on what motivates it and what can be done about it.
  3. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.

Key points

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  1. Key points provided for most sections
  2. The applied ecological model sounds promising as integrative, applied model
  3. Include citations for most important theory and research
  4. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles.
  5. Consider including more examples/case studies
  1. Excellent

References

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  1. Good.
  2. For full APA style:
    1. Not brackets for volume no., include volume no., italicise volume no., do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within a volume
    2. Use the new recommended format for dois - http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2014/07/how-to-use-the-new-doi-format-in-apa-style.html

Resources

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  1. Excellent

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:18, 16 October 2017 (UTC)Reply


The National Elder Mistreatment Study

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Hi, you have provided a sound chapter outline, however, limited information or progression is evident. I actually wrote about this in my first year at uni so I understand all the points you are intending to explore. One thing your chapter may benefit from is the inclusion on current statistics. I located a study/survey report, based in the US, that examines elder mistreatment. Acierno and colleagues (2010) found that elderly abuse is prevalent, with 4.6% suffering emotional abuse, 1.6% physical abuse, 0.6% sexual abuse, 5.1% for potential neglect, and 5.2% for current financial abuse. These stats are appalling! Here is the full access version of the study. It may interest you to compare statistics from this US study to other countries (i.e. Australia). I think what's most shocking is that almost 5% of the entire elderly population is suffering a form of abuse at any given time. Best of luck with your chapter. --U3117126 (discusscontribs) 11:31, 22 October 2017 (UTC)Reply

Added to see also section

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Hello,

I added 'Suicidality in the elderly (Book chapter, 2018)' in your see also section, with it hyperlinked to the chapter. The chapter 'Suicidality in the eldery' already has your chapter on its see also page.

I hope this helps!

--Ju3141393 (discusscontribs) 03:35, 20 October 2018 (UTC)Reply


Chapter review and feedback

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Overall

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  1. This chapter is well over the maximum word count. The introductory material about types and prevalence etc. could be abbreviated, with links to more info, to allow the chapter to focus on the topic (i.e., motivations rather than prevalence). The relevant material starts approximately half-way through the chapter.
  2. Overall, this is a solid chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
  3. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits.
  1. There is too much preliminary, background material.
  2. Relevant theories are selected, described, and explained.
  1. Relevant research is reviewed and discussed in relation to theory.
  2. When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
  1. Written expression
    1. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
    2. Internationalise: Write for an international, not just Australian audience. Australians make up only 0.32% of the world human population.
    3. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned").
  2. Layout
    1. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
    2. The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections.
  3. Learning features
    1. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words would make the text more interactive.
    2. Embedding interwiki links links to other book chapters would help to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
    3. Good use of images.
    4. Good use of tables.
    5. No use of feature boxes.
    6. No use of quizzes.
    7. Limited use of case studies or examples.
  4. Spelling, grammar, and proofreading.
    1. Use serial commas.
    2. The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags).
    3. Check and make correct use of that vs. who.
  5. APA style
    1. Refer to each Table and each Figure at least once within the main text.
    2. Use APA style for Table captions.
    3. Citations
      1. A serial comma is needed before "&" or "and" for citations involving three or more authors.
      2. Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets.
      3. In-text citations should be in alphabetical order.
      4. When there are three or more authors, subsequent citations should use et al. e.g., Smith, Bush and Western (2001) and thereafter cite Smith et al. (2001).

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:06, 26 November 2018 (UTC)Reply


Multimedia feedback

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Overall

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  1. Overall, this is a promising, sufficient presentation.
  1. There is too much emphasis on general, preliminary content - motivations don't begin to be addressed until 1:42 mins.
  2. What are the practical, take-home messages? (e.g., how can theory/research by used to help prevent/minimise elder abuse?)
  3. Consider possibly providing an overview of the presentation - to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered.
  1. The presentation is interesting to watch and listen to.
  2. The visuals could be improved to better match the narration (e.g., for "Intergenerational transmission of family violence").
  3. Well paced. Excellent pauses between sentences. This helps the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
  4. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read in the time provided.
  1. Consider muting the music during narration to help the viewer concentrate on the combination of visual information and narrated audio.
  2. Use the full chapter title and sub-title on the opening slide and in the name of the video because this helps to match the book chapter and to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  3. Audio and video recording quality was excellent.
  4. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided.
  5. A link to the book chapter is not provided.
  6. A link from the book chapter was not provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:05, 28 November 2018 (UTC)Reply