Your chapter seems to have some good indepth info, but was thinking maybe a definition of 'elder' would be useful, eg what age or stage of life/ability makes someone considered an elder, and if this differs across cultures (for more cross-cultural as suggested by Zoe)? I also thought that maybe adding some info about whether elder abuse tends to get more significant/change form over time/as they age, or as the elder deteriorates in ability could be interesting.
Hope that might be helpful. Good luck!
Cheers, Dot--Foley.d (discuss • contribs) 00:35, 26 September 2018 (UTC)
Loving how your book chapter is coming along. I'd be interested to see if there are any cross cultural differences in terms of the emotional impacts of Elder Abuse. When I typed "Cross cultural elder abuse" into the UC Library database loads of articles came up. Another interesting point might be to look into trans-generational trauma and how it relates to elder abuse.
Can't wait to read your chapter when its done :)
Hi there, this is a very interesting subject, it looks like you have a good understanding of the topic. My first suggestion would be to swap the figure captions as the first figure says Figure 2, and the second one says Figure 1. I think if it were possible, a few more images would break up the long paragraphs of text, or maybe try including some colourful textboxes to enhance the page. The last thing I've noticed is the reference list is not quite APA, apologies if that's something you're yet to change, but I thought I would point it out! Great work and good luck :) --U3160212 (discuss • contribs) 04:59, 8 October 2018 (UTC)
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in the theories section, it is great now the many theories are laid out from different aspects. as theories are quite complex and require considerable depth, i would recommend choosing 2 or 3 theories and expanding.
The table (labelled as Figure 4. List of some of the more popular elder abuse theories) is excellent and easily the best theoretical material within the chapter. Expansion of at least some of these theories, with citations and examples, would be ideal.
Use of one or more case studies could help to illustrate the issues and bring the topic to life.
Theories are briefly mentioned, but there is a lack of indepth description.
Several interesting, relevant studies are discussed.
The recommendations to use more closed-ended, quantitative survey research methods with an elderly, abused target population are highly problematic. Such an approach is unlikely to be well understood or trusted by the target group and unlikely to lead to useful data.
Written expression quality is basic and sufficient, but not really of professional standard. For example, there is awkward, repetitive expression such as "were reported as the most reported". The chapter could benefit from additional drafting and perhaps assistance with copyediting. Greater engagement in peer reviewing could have been particularly helpful.
Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
The chapter benefited from a reasonably well developed Overview and Conclusion.