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The topic sub-title suggests a potential three top-level heading structure - perhaps consider using it to help organise the chapter, and then perhaps the existing heading structure can be reorganised within those three broad questions
A starter reference (under the References heading) and chapter template have been added to the book page.--GabiK (discuss • contribs) 14:00, 2 September 2018 (UTC)
Hi there, Your image is too small to read and i tried to adjust the size but I think it may have been uploaded incorrectly. --U3092381 (discuss • contribs) 07:54, 2 September 2018 (UTC)
Hi, I have added an internal wiki link for you under self-determination theory. I found the link had helpful information on the theory as well as adding links to your book chapter.--GabiK (discuss • contribs) 03:13, 23 September 2018 (UTC)
hi there! i think your chapter is really interesting however i feel as though some images could really enhance this book chapter! your theories and content is really interesting so it just may make it more visually appealing to have some pictures for the reader. Joog 17 (discuss • contribs) 1:30, 21 October 2018 (UTC)
Hi, content wise you've done well on the aspects of this chapter that you've completed. I agree with Joog that pictures would improve the visual appeal of the page. I also think that adding other interactive features like quizzes, boxes and hyperlinks would benefit the page. Good luck. - U3144461 16:33, 21st October 2018.
Hi there, there are no images in the chapter, some use of images will be helpful to create interest for the readers. Best of luck. --(UTC)--Reet josan (discuss • contribs) 03:30, 21 October 2018 (UTC)'Reet josan
Overall, this provides reasonable coverage of relevant theory and research, but seems to struggle to express the content in a way that embraces the possibilities of this online, interactive, self-help book project.
The main concept is well explained, however there is less info about how it can be managed.
More examples would be helpful.
More tips and take-home messaged would be helpful.
This chapter seems to make out some people are depleted and some aren't (a dispositional view) rather than explaining that everyone gets ego-depleted and that their performance is negatively in this state (i.e., state vs. trait). This is an important, if subtle, distinction.
Relevant research is described. To improve, present a synthesis of findings, rather than summaries of individual studies.
When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
This is a somewhat long, tediously written chapter.
Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
The chapter could benefit from a better developed Overview and Conclusion, with clear focus question(s) and take-home messages.
Paying more attention to earlier comments could have helped to improve the chapter.
Avoid starting sentences with a citation unless the author is particularly pertinent. Instead, it is more interesting for the the content/key point to be communicated, with the citation included along the way or, more typically, in brackets at the end of the sentence.
Overall, too much detailed content, too fast - be more selective. Focus more on addressing the focus questions (in the sub-title - e.g., one third of the presentation on each question). For a brief presentation, focus on the big picture and do that well rather than racing through too much detail.
Add and narrate a Title slide, to help the viewer understanding the focus and goal of the presentation.
Add and narrate an Overview slide, to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered.
The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages.