Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2018/Conformity and emotion

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Comments[edit source]

I really love the topic you have picked and i think you have a really good outline for it. I noticed that you haven't edited the quiz questions yet. A suggestion for a quiz question is the difference between private and public conformity. Joog 17 (discusscontribs) 12:48, 02 September 2018 (UTC)

Thanks Joog_17! That is an excellent idea, I will keep that in mind for when I continue the chapter--U3097076 (discusscontribs) 08:07, 2 September 2018 (UTC)

External Link Suggestion[edit source]

Hi I thought it was great to include the study on Asch's line experiment, I have had a look on YouTube and found an a video clip of the original testings of this work. I think it would be a great suggestion to add as an external link to your chapter. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=NyDDyT1lDhA --U3160483 (discusscontribs) 12:12, 20 October 2019 (UTC)

A Suggestion[edit source]

You have explained quite well the interesting phenomena that is conformity. However, I have a suggestion for you that may make your chapter higher in quality, and that is to read through what you have written a couple more times with the intent of looking out for spelling and grammatical errors. Finding and correcting these mistakes will make your chapter much more engaging and enjoyable for the reader. Otherwise, the content here is very interesting and enlightening! Thank you --Dtd1986 (discusscontribs) 08:46, 30 August 2019 (UTC)Dtd1986

Article Suggestion[edit source]

Hey, I really love your topic so far! I found this article on 'Belief in collective emotions as conforming to the group' that I thought may be of interest! I hope you find it useful! --U3097480 (discusscontribs) 12:16, 2 September 2018 (UTC)

Hey, great topic! perhaps a small section on the evolutionary/biological basis of conformity would be useful. Here's a link to a pretty good article https://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pmc/articles/PMC3375089/ --U3151994

Heading casing[edit source]

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use:

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rather than

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-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:34, 2 October 2018 (UTC)


Topic development feedback

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

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Title, sub-title, TOC[edit source]

  1. Excellent

User page[edit source]

  1. Excellent

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. Very good
  2. Links don't go directly to evidence of contributions (it should be easy to see the changes you made at first glance, without any searching)
  3. See suggestions for how to record social contributions

Section headings[edit source]

  1. Basic, sufficient development
  2. Remove template headings

Key points[edit source]

  1. Limited development
  2. Conclusion - expand - this is the most important section

Image[edit source]

  1. Excellent

References[edit source]

  1. Good
  2. Use APA style
  3. For latest APA style recommended format for dois see http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2017/03/doi-display-guidelines-update-march-2017.html

Resources[edit source]

  1. Sufficient
  2. See also - also add links to related book chapters

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:34, 2 October 2018 (UTC)


Chapter review and feedback[edit source]

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a promising chapter, but it is overfocused on general description of conformity and the quality of written expression is pretty rough.
  2. The Overview is well-written and presents an engaging scenario, but it makes little mention of emotion Frowny.svg.
  3. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits.

Theory[edit source]

  1. There is too much general theoretical material about conformity. Instead, summarise and link to further information, to allow this chapter to focus on the specific topic (conformity and emotion).
  2. Otherwise, relevant theories are described and explained.

Research[edit source]

  1. Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. Avoid starting sentences with a citation unless the author is particularly pertinent. Instead, it is more interesting for the the content/key point to be communicated, with the citation included along the way or, more typically, in brackets at the end of the sentence.
    2. Avoid unnecessary capitalisation.
    3. Use third person perspective, rather than first person (e.g., "we") or second person (e.g., "you") perspective.
    4. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
    5. The chapter benefited from a well developed Overview and Conclusion.
  2. Layout
    1. Avoid having sections with only one sub-section.
    2. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
    3. The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections.
  3. Learning features
    1. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words would make the text more interactive.
    2. Embedding interwiki links links to other book chapters would help to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
    3. Basic use of images.
    4. No use of tables.
    5. No use of feature boxes.
    6. Basic use of quizzes.
    7. Very good use of case studies or examples.
  4. Spelling, grammar, and proofreading.
    1. Check and make correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's).
    2. Check and make correct use of commas.
    3. More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard.
    4. Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the [spelling?] tags).
    5. The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags).
  5. APA style
    1. Refer to each Table and each Figure at least once within the main text.
    2. Citations
      1. Use APA style (e.g., do not include author initials).
      2. Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets.
    3. References are not in full APA style e.g.,
      1. Check and make correct use of capitalisation.


Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a good that makes effective use of simple tools.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. Many of the comments about the book chapter also apply to this section - too much general conformity info; emotions aren't addressed until half-way through.
  2. The presentation is well structured and well paced (Title, Overview, Body, Conclusion).
  3. Add and narrate an Overview slide, to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered.
  4. More detail could be added to the Conclusion slide - add practical, take-home messages.

Communication[edit source]

  1. The presentation is easy to follow, and interesting to watch and listen to.
  2. The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides with narrated audio.
  3. Well paced, which helps the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
  4. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read in the time provided.
  5. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. Use the full chapter title and sub-title on the opening slide and in the name of the video because this helps to match the book chapter and to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. Video recording quality was excellent.
  3. Audio recording quality is very good, although it changes significantly at the end.
  4. More detail is needed about the image sources.
  5. A copyright license for the presentation is provided.
  6. A link to and from the book chapter is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:47, 18 November 2018 (UTC)