Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2017/White collar crime motivation

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Hey, As an idea for what motivates white collar crime some demographic connections could be really interesting to talk about. Two that come to my mind are whether having a family (e.g. dependent children) and the socio-economic status that a person grew up in would be risk factors. The family could produce a motivation to provide for the family (and would generally increase a person's costs) and socio-economic status could lead to particular wealth expectations. Goodluck! --Liam C (discuss • contribs) 12:37, 3 September 2017 (UTC)

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Title, sub-title, TOC Excellent User page Created Excellent; used effectively Social contribution Summaries OK, but links do not go to direct evidence - see guidelines - the best way is to view the page history, compare the version before and after your changes, and use this website address as the direct link to evidence of your contribution Section headings Excellent draft structure - appropriate number/range of top and secondary level headings, with meaningful titles A section should contain either 0 or 2+ sub-sections - avoid having sections which contain 1 sub-section. Key points Limited coverage - key points not provided for all sections Make sure to cover the three key marking criteria: theory, research, and written expression including interactive elements such as e.g., interwiki links, examples/case studies, images, quiz questions etc.? Image Well used Consider expanding the captions to provide more detail which helps to communicate key points being made in the text References Good Use the new recommended format for dois - http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2014/07/how-to-use-the-new-doi-format-in-apa-style.html Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within a volume Resources See also Excellent External links Excellent

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:14, 14 October 2017 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a good chapter. The key strength is the emphasis on theory. For additional feedback, see these copyedits. Theory The Overview could be improved by providing greater clarity e.g., what is WCC? Example? Case study? Image? etc. How can WCC have occurred throughout evolution, before white collars, money etc. had evolved? (Example of lack of clarity/precision). The restorative justice suggestion is a good one, but pops out of nowhere? Otherwise, a wide range of relevant theories are reasonably well described and explained. Perhaps consider adding more examples or a case study to help illustrate the theoretical ideas presented. Research Sufficient coverage of research involving the relation between the target constructs is provided, but to improve, perhaps less on theory and more about research would provide for a more balanced chapter. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Greater emphasis on major reviews and meta-analyses would be helpful. Written expression Written expression Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences. Some sentences are unnecessarily wordy - strive for the simplest expression of the point being made. Layout Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Otherwise, the chapter was well structured, with major sections using sub-sections. Learning features Some Interwiki links are used; more could be added to make the text more interactive. Reasonable use of images. Effective use of a table. Effective use of a quizzes. No use of case studies. Spelling, grammar, and proofreading Check and correct use of affect vs. effect Spelling can be improved - e.g., see the tags. The grammar for some sentences could be improved - e.g., see the tags. More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes e.g., individuals -> individual's APA style Citations Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets. et al. should have a full stop at the end and should not have a comma before In-text citations should be in alphabetical order A comma is needed before "&" for citations involving three or more authors See new doi format

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a reasonably good presentation. Many of the comments about the book chapter also apply to this presentation. Structure and content Well structured content - perhaps too much content, though, as the presentation is over the max. time limit. Add and narrate an Overview slide, to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered. The presentation is strengthened by the Concluding take-home messages slide, although this is somewhat brief (even though it is arguably the most important part of a presentation). The presentation is theory-heavy, with limited coverage of theory or case study examples. Communication The presentation is easy to follow, and interesting to watch and listen to. Audio communication, but probably slightly too fast - consider slowing down and being more selective about what to present. Visual presentation is excellent. Production quality The presentation is over the maximum time limit. Audio recording quality was a bit distant - review microphone set up. Use the full chapter title and sub-title on the opening slide and in the name of the video because this helps to match the book chapter and to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 13:38, 30 November 2017 (UTC)