Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2017/Time perspective and relationships

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Heading casing[edit]

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:20, 1 September 2017 (UTC)


Topic development review and feedback

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks will be available later via Moodle. Keep an eye on Announcements. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

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Title, sub-title, TOC[edit]

  1. Good; topic title was needed; has been added

User page[edit]

  1. Created
  2. Used effectively

Social contribution[edit]

  1. Excellent

Section headings[edit]

  1. Simple, effective 2-level structure
  2. Perhaps consider highlighting the use of examples/case studies in some way e.g., a feature box

Key points[edit]

  1. Very good familiarity with key concepts and the topic demonstrated
  2. It could be useful to explore how TP can be used to deal with conflicts in relationships
  3. Also try to provide image captions that connect meaningfully to the point being made in the section; or images can potentially be used to provide examples
  4. Excellent use of table
  5. Good use of wiki links

Image[edit]

  1. Use effectively and well captioned
  2. Figure 1 works well, but note for other images it may be useful to expand the default image size

References[edit]

  1. Very good
  2. Check APA style for books
  3. Use the new recommended format for dois - http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2014/07/how-to-use-the-new-doi-format-in-apa-style.html
  4. Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within a volume
  5. APA style - Note that a citation like (Zimbardo, Kewough & Boyd, 1997) should have a comma after the second author name

Resources[edit]

  1. Very well used
  2. See also
    1. Also link to the other 2017 TP chapter
  3. External links
    1. Consider adding the Zimbardo TED talk video

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 20:28, 12 October 2017 (UTC) Hi I looked up book chapter --Rachel Zeng (discusscontribs) 22:34, 18 October 2017 (UTC)and I think "time perspective research" section is bit too long for readers to read. And the "Balanced time perspective"section maybe can move into the "time perspective research" section, as it might help to understand the realationship between five dimentions of time perspective and blanced time perspective. Also maybe disucss how the five TPs and BTP affect our realationship, respectively. Some small error I found in the section of "What is Time Perspective?" like you have the bracket but no in-text references. Some hyperlink can try to add in your content too, for example person "Lewin" and The Zimbardo Time Perspective Inventory. Hope this help, all the best. --Rachel Zeng (discusscontribs) 22:34, 18 October 2017 (UTC) Hi there, thanks for the response it's very helpful. And i looked up chapter it looks very good and I can't think of any feedback about the content but i think you can try add some boxes to let the reader more easy to follow. all the best for the chapter. --Rachel Zeng (discusscontribs) 08:54, 22 October 2017 (UTC)


Chapter review and feedback[edit]

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Overall[edit]

  1. Overall, this is an excellent chapter.
  2. The sub-title was updated to match the book table of contents.
  3. For additional feedback, see these copyedits.

Theory[edit]

  1. Theories were very well described and integrated, with examples, and a critical perspective.

Research[edit]

  1. The limited research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory.
  2. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
  3. Citations are very well used.
  4. The research is interpreted with appropriate caution and a critical perspective is evident, with suggestions for further development.

Written expression[edit]

  1. Written expression
    1. The chapter is very well written.
    2. Some paragraph, perhaps, were overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
    3. The chapter benefits from a well developed Overview and Conclusion.
  2. Learning features
    1. Limited use is made of interwiki links - they help to the text more interactive.
    2. Tables, images, and feature boxes are well used.
  3. APA style is very good
    1. Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numbers (e.g., 10)
    2. Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within volumes.


Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit]

  1. Overall, this is an excellent presentation.

Structure and content[edit]

  1. Well selected and organised content - didn't attempt to present too much info
  2. Clear beginning, middle, and end, with practical, take-home messages

Communication[edit]

  1. Well paced and spoken audio, with interesting, engaging visuals and animations

Production quality[edit]

  1. Audio was a little quiet - it was OK to listen to at maximum volume. Perhaps it was recorded with an on-board microphone rather than a headset microphone - or perhaps the microphone was a little too far away
  2. Include the title and sub-title to match the book chapter

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:53, 24 November 2017 (UTC)