Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2017/Team sport and emotion

limitations, and headings

Hi,

Have you considered having a section on limitations of current research, questions that still need to be answered and/or suggestions for further research?

Also remember that headings on Wikiversity should start with a capital, then be lower case

E.g.

           Attributions and emotion in sports teams

Happy writing!

EmmAnder18 -U3133718 (discuss • contribs) 03:02, 10 October 2017 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:25, 16 October 2017 (UTC)

Topic development review and feedback

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Title, sub-title, TOC Very good Capitalisation of the title/sub-title has been corrected to be consistent with the book table of contents Authorship details removed - authorship is as per the page's editing history User page Created, minimalistic Social contribution Excellent Section headings See earlier suggestions about capitalisation Some good ideas, but limited development overall Key points Some good ideas, but limited development overall Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles. Consider including more examples/case studies. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section rather than having one longer quiz towards the end. Image One image effectively used Consider enhancing figure captions to connect the image more strongly to key points being made in the text References Good. For full APA style: Use correct italicisation Use the new recommended format for dois - http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2014/07/how-to-use-the-new-doi-format-in-apa-style.html Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within a volume Resources None added

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:25, 16 October 2017 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient chapter. The main area for potential improvement is in the quality of written expression. For additional feedback, see these copyedits. Theory A basic coverage of relevant theory is provided. The first example involves an individual rather than a team sport - and no group sport examples are provided The Conclusion lacks specific take-home messages that those involved in team sport can put into action. Research A basic coverage of some relevant research is provided. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Greater emphasis on major reviews and meta-analyses would be helpful. Written expression The quality of written expression needs improvement to be of an acceptable, professional standard. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences. Learning features Use in-text interwiki links, rather than external links, for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles. No quizzes, tables, or external links are provided. Spelling, grammar and proofreading Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes e.g., individuals -> individual's Check and correct use of affect vs. effect The grammar for some sentences could be improved - see the tags APA style Citations No comma should be used before et al. In-text citations should be in alphabetical order References are not in full APA style e.g., See new doi format Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within volumes.

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, ... Structure and content The presentation could be more focused on the assigned question: "How does playing team sport affect one's emotional state?" (e.g., the opening overview mentions other questions, but not this question). Add and narrate an Overview slide, to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered. Consider using more examples that illustrate how the theories and research discussed apply to emotions in team sport. Reasonably well selected and structured content, however there is probably too much emphasis on cognitive appraisal theory. The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages. Communication Well narrated. Effective use of text and image-based slides. Production quality Use the full chapter title and sub-title on the opening slide and in the name of the video because this helps to match the book chapter and to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Audio and video recording quality was excellent. Source of images and copyright is well acknowledged.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:03, 28 November 2017 (UTC)