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A basic heading structure is provided, with no sub-headings - on closer examination, there do appear to be sub-headings but these haven't been put into wiki format, so they don't appear in the table of contents
Possibly too much is planned to be covered in the Overview - consider moving some of this content into subsequent sections and possibly into sub-sections within subsequent sections
A common mistake is to provide too much generic content (e.g., what is motivation) - this can be covered very briefly, with links to further information, so that there can be more focus on the chapter topic i.e., ph and motivation
Perfume?
Some reference to animals may be of interest (e.g., for a feature box/interesting fact), but the overwhelming emphasis should be on how this topic applies to human motivation and how an understanding of the topic can be used to help enhance our lives
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The general section about motivation can be replaced by a brief summary, with a relevant link e.g., to the Wikipedia chapter about motivation.
The section about motivation theories is only weakly related to pheremones e.g., I don't understand how SDT is related to pheremones? This section doesn't seem to be based on any reliable sources. This would be a stronger chapter without these general theories, as they aren't integrated with the rest of the content.
The Reeve textbook is over-used as a citation. Instead, access primary sources.
Clearer explanation is needed about how chemosensory signals are involved in mate selection in relation to kin
The biological explanations of the motivational function of pheremones is reasonably good.
Limited research evidence is presented. Ideally, research findings should be explained in more detail e.g., "This genetic influence on mate selection and reproduction can be linked to findings[1] that pheromones in humans influence mate selection and are able to identify those genetically similar to you (siblings and family relations) as to determine successful partnership and offspring."
What evidence is there that animals make conscious use of pheremones? (seems like a bold claim)
When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
Some statements were unreferenced - see the [factual?] tags
The written expression needed closer proofreading to be of professional standard.
Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes e.g., individuals -> individual's
Learn about the difference between affect and effect
Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
Abbreviations such as etc. should only be used within parentheses
What are the practical, take-home messages about the motivational effects of pheremones that people reading this chapter can apply to their everyday lives?
Learning features
The chapter is well presented and makes good use of wiki learning features, including inter-wiki links, images, feature boxes, and quiz questions.
The two general motivation quiz questions were removed - not directly relevant to the chapter topic.
Spelling, grammar and proofreading
The grammar and spelling could be improved - see the [grammar?] and [spelling?] tags
APA style
APA style citations rather than hyperlinks should be used
Check and correct capitalisation in the reference list
Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within volumes.
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Audio recording quality was a bit quiet - review microphone set up.
Use the full chapter title and sub-title on the opening slide and in the name of the video because this helps to match the book chapter and to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
