Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2017/Orgasm health benefits

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Hi,

I'm doing my book chapter on orgasm neurology and have come across these articles that I think might also be helpful to you.

1. Colson, M. H. (2010). ‘Female orgasm: Myths, facts and controversies’. Sexologies, 19(1), 8-14. http://www.sciencedirect.com/science/article/pii/S115813600900173X This one specifically looks at women but it does look at various aspects of female orgasms and not just the biological side.

2. Georgiadis, J. R. (2011). ‘Exposing orgasm in the brain: A critical eye’. Sexual and Relationship Therapy, 26(4), http://www.tandfonline.com/doi/full/10.1080/14681994.2011.647904?scroll=top&needAccess=true This is a review of a lot of the research that has been done on the structures of the brain that are involved in orgasms, as well as some of the hormones etc. It has been very useful to me and I saw that one of your sections was on the neurology of orgasms so I thought it might be helpful as a starting point for you.

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Overall Overall, this is a short, but well-focused chapter. For additional feedback, see these copyedits. Theory Theories are well described and explained. Consider providing more practical, take-home messages - e.g., what is the optimal "orgasm prescription"? Research Good coverage of relevant research. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Greater emphasis on major reviews and meta-analyses would be helpful. Written expression Written expression Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences. Layout See earlier comments about heading casing. The chapter was well structured. Learning features Interwiki links are well used; more could be added. Minimal use of images. No use of tables. Basic use of quizzes. No use of case studies. Spelling, grammar, and proofreading. Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour). Check and correct over-capitalisation. The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). APA style Citations A comma is needed before "&" for citations involving three or more authors. Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets. References are not in full APA style e.g., Check and correct italicisation. See new doi format. Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within volumes.

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent presentation. Structure and content Well selected and structured content. Narrate the full title, to help the viewer understanding the focus and goal of the presentation. Communication The presentation is easy to follow and interesting to watch and listen to. Consider presenting less text per slide - it is hard to take in the audio narration and read a lot of text. Consider leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point. Production quality Use the full chapter title and sub-title on the opening slide and in the name of the video because this helps to match the book chapter and to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Audio and video recording quality was excellent.

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