Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2017/Impulsivity

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Hi Tasha92, fantastic question you have picked. Although your outline doesn't provide much information at this time, I can see where you are headed with it. The incorporation of the different brain structures (and I'm assuming their role in impulsivity) is a great addition. I have found two studies which may interest you and may aid your chapter as you start your research:

  • The role of impulsivity in the development of substance use and eating disorders (Dawe & Loxton, 2004). This particular study examines how the multidimensional construct correlates to the development of impulsive behaviours such as drug abuse and eating disorders. The study also examines comorbidity of impulsive behaviours such as shop lifting, self-injurious behaviours, unsafe sex, alcoholism. For example, a reference in the study (Penas-Lledo and Waller, 2001) found that women who had bulimic symptoms/behaviours exhibited high levels of impulsive behaviours such as suicidal thoughts, drug abuse, unsafe sex, and passive-aggressiveness. The specific study is this one here but I can't find the full article. Interestingly, the authors also examine the relationship between impulsiveness and the reward sensitivity/drive. This can link back to the BIS/BAS systems we read about in week 2. Incorporation of this system may also aid the development of your topic. Lastly, based on this first study, there is a high prevalence of impulsivity and mental health comorbidity, particularly bipolar or borderline disorder. This may be something that peaks your interest and may find a way into your outline. All these points link to the heading "The consequences of impulsivity". Although these all seem negative, I am sure there are studies out there that find sometimes impulsivity could lead to rewarding and positive "consequences", such as a better job/promotion, increased social standing, etc. I suppose this depends on how you define impulsivity though.
  • The other study is Functional and Dysfunctional Impulsivity: Personality and Cognitive Correlates by Dickman (1990). This study breaks down impulsivity into two spectrums and assesses these with alternative personality traits over three different studies. For example, in one study, they found that functional impulsivity was more closely related to enthusiasm, adventure seeking behaviour and general activity that dysfunctional impulsivity. They also examined different impulsivity scales/measures such as the EPI impulsivity, BIS-5, Narrow Impulsivity and PRF Impulsivity to verify reliability of other scales. In the conclusion, the author states that functional impulsivity is the ultimate personality trait responsible for impulsivity and information processing. An interesting avenue this study opens up is; Does extraversion and introversion differ in individuals who exhibit impulsive behaviours? In a way, you could almost conclude that those with higher levels of extraversion would be more impulsive given their predisposition to adventure and new activity seeking behaviour. This is also something you may want to look into.

Lastly, an interesting section you could add to you chapter is the "Impulsiveness Inventory" by Eysenck. The inventory examines three personality traits; impulsiveness, venturesomeness, and empathy using 63-items.

I hope this comment aids your development and makes sense. If I could provide one tip, it would be to define what impulsivity is very clearly and carefully. Based on the studies I have seen, it is clearly a multidimensional construct that has multiple influences but is often misunderstood. Best of luck. --U3117126 (discusscontribs) 04:06, 28 August 2017 (UTC)[reply]

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use:

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rather than

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-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:27, 17 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Feedback[edit source]

Hi! Ive just found a good TED talk that i thought you could add to your external sources section. Its about self control to combat impulsivity. I hope you find it useful. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tTb3d5cjSFI --Eadams1994 (discusscontribs) 05:45, 21 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]


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Title, sub-title, TOC[edit source]

  1. Excellent

User page[edit source]

  1. Created
  2. Used effectively

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. Basic summary of contributions with indirect links to evidence
  2. The best links go to direct evidence of the contributions made. View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see the book chapter author guidelines.

Section headings[edit source]

  1. Well developed 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic.
  2. Theory is represented; make sure to incorporate research and examples into content at least if not headings; or remove theory part of heading to allow integrated discussion of theory, research, and examples
  3. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.

Key points[edit source]

  1. Lack of development
  2. Make sure to connect to motivation
  3. Consider including case study/example and/or focus questions, image etc. in Overview to help bring topic to life
  4. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles.
  5. Consider including more examples/case studies.
  6. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section rather than having one longer quiz towards the end.

Image[edit source]

  1. Included
  2. Consider increasing image size from default
  3. Consider enhancing figure captions to APA style and help connect the image more strongly to key points being made in the text

References[edit source]

  1. References but no citations?
  2. Seems odd that all the references are from authors at a similar point in the alphabet?? Perhaps these refs have been copied from somewhere given that they aren't cited??
  3. For full APA style:
    1. Use correct italicisation
    2. Use the new recommended format for dois - http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2014/07/how-to-use-the-new-doi-format-in-apa-style.html
    3. Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within a volume

Resources[edit source]

  1. Not provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:27, 17 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]


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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient presentation.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. Why is my name on the opening slide? It your creation, you are the copyright owner, author etc.
  2. Narrate the Title slide, to help the viewer understanding the focus and goal of the presentation.
  3. Add and narrate an Overview slide, to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered.
  4. Reasonably well selected and structured content - not too much or too little.
  5. The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages.

Communication[edit source]

  1. To improve the visual communication, consider reducing the amount of text and increasing the font size on each slide, and animating the text (i.e., reveal each relevant part as it is discussed).
  2. Reasonably well narrated.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. Poorly titled - use the full chapter title and sub-title on the opening slide and in the name of the video because this helps to match the book chapter and to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. Source of all images is not provided - copyright may have been violated.
  3. Audio and video recording quality was good.
  4. Add an active hyperlink to the book chapter in the video description field.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:24, 28 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]


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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a promising book chapter that could be strengthened by closer citation of primary, peer-reviewed sources, better integration of links to other resources within the wiki environment, and providing more practical examples.
  2. For additional feedback, see these copyedits.

Theory[edit source]

  1. Theories are well described, explained, and integrated.
  2. The Reeve (2015) textbook is overused as a citation - instead, utilise primary, peer-reviewed sources.

Research[edit source]

  1. A lot of statements are unreferenced - see the [factual?] tags
  2. Good coverage of research is provided.
  3. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
  4. Greater emphasis on major reviews and meta-analyses would be helpful.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
    2. Once an abbreviation is established (e.g., PFC), use it.
  2. Layout
    1. Excessive use of background boxes etc. Keep it simple and use extra highlighting judiciously. Some has been removed.
    2. See earlier comments about heading casing.
    3. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
  3. Learning features
    1. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words would make the text more interactive.
    2. Add See also and External links sections.
    3. Goodtab use of images.
    4. No use of tables.
    5. Basic use of quizzes.
    6. No use of case studies.
  4. Spelling, grammar, and proofreading.
    1. Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour).
    2. Check and correct over capitalisation.
    3. Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the [spelling?] tags).
    4. The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags).
  5. APA style
    1. Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numbers (e.g., 10).
    2. Citations
      1. Do not use a comma before "and" or an ampersand for citations involving two authors.
      2. Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets.
    3. References are not in full APA style e.g.,
      1. Check and correct italicisation.
      2. See new doi format.