Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2017/End of life regrets

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Interesting Article![edit]

Hey! I found this interesting article Looking back with regret: Visual perspective in memory images differentially affects regret for actions and inactions where they reported that regret can be increased and decreased through the modifications of imagery perspective. Hope you find this helpful, and all the best! :)

--Slucic94 (discusscontribs) 16:31, 22 October 2017 (UTC)


Chapter review and feedback[edit]

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Overall[edit]

  1. Overall, this is a reasonable chapter which could be improved by focusing less on regrets in general (this has been covered by a previous chapter) and focusing more on end-of-life regrets (the specific focus of the current chapter).
  2. For additional feedback, see these copyedits.

Theory[edit]

  1. The Overview and chapter is overly focused on regret as a general concept (this was covered in the 2016 chapter) and not focused enough on end-of-life regret.
  2. Consider including a case study to help capture reader interest in the Overview.
  3. Consider including practical, take-home messages that a reader can apply in everyday life.
  4. Several relevant theories were described. Examples could help to illustrate their application.

Research[edit]

  1. Basic but sufficient coverage of research involving the relation between the target constructs is provided.
  2. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
  3. Greater emphasis on major reviews and meta-analyses would be helpful.
  4. Some statements were unreferenced - see the [factual?] tags

Written expression[edit]

  1. Written expression is reasonable.
    1. Use default heading style - remove bold
    2. Link "regret" to the 2016 book chapter about regret to help create interlinkages between the chapters
    3. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
    4. Avoid directional referencing e.g., "As previously mentioned"
  2. Layout
    1. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
  3. Learning features
    1. Basic of use of interwiki links - more use would make the text more interactive.
    2. Basic use of images.
    3. No use of tables.
    4. Basic use of quizzes.
    5. No use of case studies.
  4. Spelling, grammar, and proofreading
    1. The grammar for some sentences could be improved - e.g., see the [grammar?] tags.
    2. Check and correct use of commas.
    3. Spelling can be improved - e.g., see the [spelling?] tags.
  5. APA style
    1. Use APA style for Figure captions
    2. Provide more detailed Figure captions that connect the image to the text e.g., what is the relevance of "MRI of orbitofrontal cortex"?
    3. Citations
      1. Use no more than the top three citations per point.
      2. A comma is needed before "&" for citations involving three or more authors
      3. However a comma is not needed e.g., for Coricelli, et al., 2007 -> Coricelli et al., 2007
    4. References are not in full APA style e.g.,
      1. Check and correct capitalisation
      2. Check and correct italicisation
      3. See new doi format
      4. Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within volumes.


Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Moodle site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

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Overall[edit]

  1. Overall, this is a promising presentation with several strengths, but is somewhat let down by the poor audio recording quality.

Structure and content[edit]

  1. Narrate the Title slide, to help the viewer understanding the focus and goal of the presentation.
  2. Add and narrate an Overview slide, to help orientate the viewer about what the problem is and what will be covered.
  3. The three main points don't refer to end-of-life? Frowny.svg
  4. Excellent emphasis on top 4 regrets.
  5. Check and correct spelling e.g., failire -> failure
  6. Well selected and structured content - not too much or too little.
  7. Excellent emphasis on take-home messages.

Communication[edit]

  1. The visual and audio presentation is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to watch and listen to.

Production quality[edit]

  1. Audio recording quality is very quiet - review microphone set up. The audio on the very last slide was louder.
  2. Consider muting the music during narration to help the viewer concentrate on the combination of visual information and narrated audio.
  3. Use the full chapter title and sub-title on the opening slide and in the name of the video because this helps to match the book chapter and to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:01, 2 December 2017 (UTC)