Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2017/Disgust and prejudice

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Topic development review and feedback

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks will be available later via Moodle. Keep an eye on Announcements. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

Title, sub-title, TOC[edit source]

  1. Excellent
  2. Author details removed - authorship is as per the page's editing history

User page[edit source]

  1. Created
  2. Used effectively

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. Excellent

Section headings[edit source]

  1. Well developed 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic.

Key points[edit source]

  1. Well considered key points are well developed for each section; include relevant citations.
  2. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles.
  3. Good to see examples/case studies.
  4. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section rather than having one longer quiz towards the end.

Image[edit source]

  1. Excellent

References[edit source]

  1. None provided
  2. For full APA style:
    1. Use correct italicisation
    2. Use the new recommended format for dois - http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2014/07/how-to-use-the-new-doi-format-in-apa-style.html
    3. Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within a volume

Resources[edit source]

  1. See also
    1. These need to be added an internal links
    2. Include some info about brackets e.g., (Wikipedia), (Book chapter, 2014)
    3. Also link to past relevant chapters
  2. External links
    1. Excellent

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:56, 17 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Feedback[edit source]

Hi, I really like where you're going with this chapter and I think its going to be very interesting once you've finished. The case studies are a really good idea and add depth to your topic and will be interesting to read when they are completely done. I would say to check some of your sentences. For example "However, disgust has also been found to have a social component, and has been implicated in prejudice - an "unfair or unreasonable opinion or feeling, especially formed without enough thought or knowledge" (Cambridge University Press, 2017" I know its the definition of prejudice but you could probably reword it to make it clearer as its a bit confusing at the moment. Hope this helps --U3115549 (discusscontribs) 00:04, 22 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Hello, I have added the code to make your references have a hanging indent. Your chapter seems interesting so far. --U3113687

Hello again, Just thought I would show you a few things I have found that might be useful. http://bigthink.com/artful-choice/disgust-prejudice-and-stereotypes-pathogen-protection-gone-awry - this article whilst it can't be referenced as it's not peer-reviewed does raise some interesting points to consider, even just as a minor note. https://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pubmed/17877854 - this journal article is directly related to your chapter, can be used as a reference, and you can view the whole thing if you're logged in to the UC site. Hope these are useful and all the best with your chapter. --U3113687

I also found these two videos that talk about different aspects of your topic and reference both disgust and prejudice. They don't directly explain the exact topic, but I thought they might be useful external links for people to watch. 1. https://www.coursera.org/learn/moralities/lecture/vj9e7/the-case-of-disgust 2. https://www.ted.com/talks/paul_bloom_can_prejudice_ever_be_a_good_thing/transcript#t-43261 --U3113687


Chapter review and feedback[edit source]

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via Moodle, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world problem.
  2. For additional feedback, see these copyedits.

Theory[edit source]

  1. Theories are very well described and explained, with examples.
  2. Add a Conclusion to bring together the key points in a section that book-ends the chapter (the Overview is the other book-end).
  3. The Reeve (2015) textbook is overused as a citation - instead, utilise primary, peer-reviewed sources.

Research[edit source]

  1. Excellent review of research.
  2. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
  2. Layout
    1. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
  3. Learning features
    1. This chapter makes excellent use of interwiki links, figures, examples, and quizzes embedded in each section.
  4. APA style
    1. Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numbers (e.g., 10).
    2. Use APA style for Figure captions.
    3. Direct quotes need page numbers.
    4. Citations
      1. A full stop is needed after et al.
      2. Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets.
    5. References are not in full APA style e.g.,
      1. Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within volumes.


Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Moodle site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is an outstanding, highly professional presentation in all respects.
  2. Easily the top presentation of 2017 and maybe ever in this unit!

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. Very well selected and structured content - not too much or too little.

Communication[edit source]

  1. The presentation is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to watch and listen to.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. Use the full chapter title and sub-title on the opening slide and in the name of the video because this helps to match the book chapter and to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. Audio and video recording quality was excellent.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:00, 5 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]