Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2017/Biological factors in emotional reactivity

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Title, sub-title, TOC Excellent User page Created Used effectively Social contribution Well summarised User a numbered list Last link is excellent because it goes to direct evidence - the best links go to direct evidence of the contributions made. View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click compare, and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see the book chapter author guidelines. Section headings Basic heading structure Consider expanding to include sub-headings for major sections Make sure to avoid providing too much background/generic material. Instead briefly summarise background concepts and provide wiki links to further information. Then focus most of the content on directly answering the core question posed by the sub-title of chapter. There doesn't seem to be any sections directly about the relationship between biological factors (e.g., brain structures, neurotransmitters etc.) and emotional reactivity? Key points Key points are provided for some sections - these are reasonably well developed Image Effectively used References Very good For full APA style also use italics Resources Excellent

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:44, 15 October 2017 (UTC)

Hi, I've read what you're written so far and think that while the overall elements of what your writing about are good you could make some improvements. Firstly, you should explain what the brain areas are in general terms before you talk about them specifically to your topic so like where they are located and what they generally are involved in. This would make what you're talking about a lot clearer and easier to follow. You should also make sure you are explaining what all your acronyms mean and what they are in full form because just having the acronym is very confusing. My last piece of advice would be to talk about fewer brain areas in greater depth (so just talk about the main really important ones so that a greater understanding can be given to them) I hope this helps --U3115549 (discuss • contribs) 01:14, 19 October 2017 (UTC)

Thank youǃ This is great to know. I've been reading so much about different regions that I've lost sight of what is and isn't general or assumed knowledge about the brainǃ I'll be sure to address that, narrow the focus, and introduce acronyms APA styleː) RaniaLillian (discuss • contribs) 02:33, 19 October 2017 (UTC)

Feedback and empirical references

Hi Rania,

Great page thus far, you have sourced a comprehensive breath of resources which covers each perspective on this physiological topic. I love how you have broken your chapter into succinct chunks (i.e. the prefrontal cortex and limbic system headings). The bringing it together paragraph is excellent - it is easy to deduce that one brain region is responsible in its entirely for one specific function - however the case is more likely that it is a synthesis of incoming stimuli/neurotransmitters/hormones/neuropeptides etc. as well as communication with other brain regions. I think this is important to extrapolate as it will provide a comprehensive coverage (so great job!)

Moreover, I did a quick control + find search for the word stress and I believe this is the most well known implication of emotional reactivity - and by the looks of it you did too as it came up with a lot of results. I would suggest here, providing a more extensive overview of stress (maybe a subheading under epigenetics because this is where stress is mentioned a lot) and then you can integrate stress elements into your chapter more eloquently. Whilst I am on the topic of stress, I found this extensive review that extrapolates how constant daily life stresses can inflate psychosis, however, this may be mediated by biological predispotions (this would tie in your nature/nurture paragraph and your practical implications one). here is the reference:

Myin-Germeys, I., Krabbendam, L., Delespaul, P A E G, & Van Os, J. (2003). Do life events have their effect on psychosis by influencing the emotional reactivity to daily life

stress? Psychological Medicine, 33(2), 327.

I also noticed that depression is the predominant psychopathological disorder referenced in this chapter - as it deserves being the most cited disorder relative to emotional reactivity (in my opinion). However there are other disorders which may be recognised (if your word limit permits haha) these are specifically personality disorders as well as psychotic disorders (as aforementioned). Relative to personality disorders (explicitly borderline personality) Feliu and colleagues (2014) suggest emotional dysregulation a 'hallmark' for the development of personality disorders, suggesting the implementation of mindfulness activities (as well as dialectal behaviour therapy) can be correlated with improved clinical symptomology and lower emotional reactivity. I noticed you talked about mindfulness in implications for assessment and treatment and this may be applicable here, the references is as follows:

Feliu-Soler, A., Pascual, J. C., Borràs, X., Portella, M. J., Martín-Blanco, A., Armario, A., . . . Soler, J. (2014). Effects of dialectical behaviour therapy-mindfulness training

on emotional reactivity in borderline personality disorder: Preliminary results: Dialectical behaviour therapy-mindfulness training. Clinical Psychology & Psychotherapy, 21(4), 363-

370. doi:10.1002/cpp.1837

Once again, great chapter so far and I am really looking forward to reading more as it develops! --U3144362 (discuss • contribs) 14:27, 19 October 2017 (UTC)u3144362 1:27AM

Thank you for your extensive feedbackǃ I was planning on talking a little about BPD as at least one of the primary assessment tools for emotional reactivity was tested in (and in part devised for) this populationǃ I'm currently in the process of figuring out the best way to incorporate some of the other things you've mentioned, and this has definitely given me more direction with how I might do that. You make a great point about the prevalence of stress-related research in this area, and I think you might be right about the benefits of addressing this more specifically. It's definitely been a challenging topic, but I think it's beginning to come togetherǃ Thanks againǃ RaniaLillian (discuss • contribs) 22:43, 19 October 2017 (UTC)

Hi Rania, Your content is sounding really interesting! Just thought I would give you a few formatting suggestions. Your stop & think box is a great idea, it might help if you can alter the spacing on it a little though - the first letters on each line blend with the box border. I wasn't sure how to change this as I have used a different box style myself and I didn't want to start fiddling in case I messed it up. The other suggestion I had is regarding your captions under your pictures. If you set them up and link them from Wiki commons, I'm pretty sure you don't need all the information you have in there -just "Figure 1. Title/brief description of what the picture is showing". Again your chapter sounds really interesting and all the best with it :) --U3113687

Ohh thank youǃ I was meaning to check what the guidelines were around image captioning/acknowledgement, but that makes senseǃ I also noticed the box/border/letters problem, but didn't know how to change it, so if you have a style of box that doesn't have that problem I might just come and have a look at your page, and see if that style will work in place of what I have nowǃ Thanks for the feedback and suggestions ː) RaniaLillian (discuss • contribs) 22:24, 26 October 2017 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address the target topic, with practical implications. For additional feedback, see these copyedits. Theory Consider including more examples to illustrate theoretical principles. Theories are well very described and explained. The integration between theories is particularly impressive, as is the integration between theory and research. Research Excellent review of relevant research across a range of theoretical perspectives. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Written expression Written expression The chapter benefited from a well developed Overview and Conclusion, with clear focus question(s) and take-home messages. Layout The Overview is probably too long - consider splitting into another section or moving some content into other sections. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. The chapter was well structured, with major sections using sub-sections. Learning features Interwiki links, images, tables, and quizzes are well used. Spelling, grammar, and proofreading is excellent - only minor typos notes. APA style Use APA style for Table captions. References are not in full APA style e.g., Remove unnecessary quote marks.

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-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:51, 5 December 2017 (UTC)