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Hi, I have found a great article you could use to begin work on your chapter, it is titled Solastalgia: the distress caused by environmental change. The article will help you formulate your overview and definition titles of your chapter. the article also talks about the difference between solastalgia and nostalgia which I think would be interesting for you to include. The article also focuses on two applications including drought in rural NSW and coal mining in the Hunter Valley, these examples would be useful if you are considering including case studies in your chapter. The article can be accessed through EBSCOhost on the university library page. All the best !! http://web.b.ebscohost.com.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/ehost/detail/detail?vid=51&sid=bb733175-f514-4060-870e-f258f4ca7c78%40sessionmgr120&hid=115&bdata=#AN=34660013&db=pbh --LeoDean1993 (discusscontribs) 07:26, 1 October 2016 (UTC)Reply

Hi, I just thought I'd contribute a little since I find your topic really interesting :) As the above user commented, it could be a really good idea to relate solastalgia back to examples that are relevant to us here in Australia. I found a few articles which may be of help, as they involve changes to the environment that are frequently experienced in Australia.

Also, you might want to consider cutting your case study in the overview down a little if you reach the word limit. You could probably communicate what solastalgia is in fewer words anyway, which would make your overview much more effective with regards to the marking criteria. Good luck with the rest! --Qt3141 (discusscontribs) 00:34, 18 October 2016 (UTC)Reply

Hi!! Your topic is so interesting and was a really great read!! Just one thing be careful that you do not go over the word limit because it seems as though you already have a lot of theory and content on Solastaligia --Lizzy94 (discusscontribs) 05:05, 22 October 2016 (UTC)U3083568 (discusscontribs) 16:05, 22 October 2016 (UTC)Reply

The overview worked well to capture your audience!

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That story really sucked me in. I'm sure it will do the same for other readers too. I look forward to reading this when you have all of your info up! I had never even heard of the term "solastalgia" until now. Makes you wonder how the people in Syria etc are coping... I guess the only advice I can give is in regards to the size of your overview.. it might hurt your word count a bit. I'm not sure how you'd cut it down though, it flows so well! Good work so far :) Chot24 (discusscontribs) 01:22, 19 October 2016 (UTC)Reply

Heading casing

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:17, 22 October 2016 (UTC)Reply


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Overall

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  1. Overall, this is a strong chapter which incorporates a balanced, critical overview of relevant theory and research and makes effective use of the wiki environment. The main area for improvement is to address the question within the word count limit.
  2. The chapter is well over the maximum word-count.
  3. For more feedback see [ these copyedits] and the comments below.
  4. Feel free to make ongoing changes to the chapter if you wish to address any of these comments or make other improvements.
  1. Clear, engaging Overview.
  2. Theory is very well explained - just needs to be more succint.
  3. Several helpful examples or case studies were provided.
  4. The Conclusion offers a succint summary and emphasises solutions.
  1. A balanced review of available research is provided.
  2. The Reeve (2015) textbook (note that there is no 2014 edition) is over-used as a citation; preferably consult and cite primary, peer-reviewed sources.
  1. Written expression
    1. Write in third person rather than first person (e.g., avoid "I', "we", "our", "your" etc.).
    2. Some paragraphs are overly long. Paragraphs should communicate a single key idea in about three to five sentences.
    3. The Overview and Conclusion are clear and well-written.
    4. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., above, below, as previously mentioned).
  2. Structure and headings
    1. See earlier comments about heading casing
    2. Each section should include at least one introductory paragraph before branching into sub-sections.
  3. Layout
    1. Add wiki bullet points (some items are pasted from a word processor without applying the wiki bullet points).
    2. There is minimal use of images or tables.
  4. Integration with other chapters
    1. The chapter provides a good range of relevant links to other Wikiversity pages.
  5. Learning features
    1. Add Interwiki links (to relevant Wikipedia articles) to make the text more interactive.
    2. Quiz questions are used effectively to encourage reader engagement.
  6. Spelling
    1. Use Australian spelling (some general examples are hypothesize -> hypothesise; behavior -> behaviour).
  7. APA style
    1. Use double quotation marks for direct quotes.
    2. Put in-text citations in alphabetical order.
    3. The reference list is not in full APA style.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:31, 13 November 2016 (UTC)Reply


Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Moodle site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

Overall

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  1. Overall, this is a well prepared presentation which could be improved by including audio narration.
  1. Overview
    1. Include a Title slide
    2. Abbreviate the initial example - depicting the scenario takes almost a minute
    3. Use the Overview to set up the problem to be solved (the question i.e., the subtitle for the book chapter).
    4. Tell the listener what they will find out about if they watch this presentation.
  2. Selection and organisation
    1. Theory was well covered, although I think SDT might be more applicable than Maslow's hierarchy.
    2. Research is less well covered.
    3. Why is medication recommended as a treatment for such a new concept?
    4. Include citations about evidence for claims.
    5. Check and correct ownership apostrophes.
  3. Conclusion
    1. A Conclusion slide summarising the take-home messages / key points could be helpful.
  1. Audio
    1. Audio consists of music.
    2. Add voice-over narration instead of relying on the viewer to read.
  2. Image/Video
    1. Visuals are very good.
    2. By using audio narration, the amount of visual text can be reduced.
    3. The combination of images and text is effective.
  1. Overall, well produced with the key exception that the lack of audio narration was problematic.
  2. Meta-data
    1. The title and subtitle of the presentation should be the same as the book chapter.
    2. Link to chapter provided.
    3. Good use of the Description field to provide relevant information.
  3. Audio recording quality
    1. Only music provided.
  4. Image/video recording quality
    1. Excellent
  5. Licensing
    1. A copyright license for the presentation is correctly shown in at least one location. Standard YouTube License.
    2. The copyright licenses and sources of the images are indicated.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:14, 21 November 2016 (UTC)Reply