Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2016/Mental health help-seeking motivation

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ideas for the chapter[edit]

Hi there, I really like your topic, have you thought about discussing about age and cultural differences with seeking mental health help? Here are some links to some articles: --JazNF (discusscontribs) 07:45, 13 September 2016 (UTC)

Hi, I have found an article trying to explain from the health belief model why people seek/not to seek mental health help, hope it's going to be helpful another one trying to discuss the contribution of gender differences in seeking mental health help (discusscontribs) 11:03, 20 October 2016 (UTC)

ideas for images[edit]

Hi. I found some images on wiki commons that I hoped you might find useful and also and finally, Good luck with your chapter! --U113403 (discusscontribs) 11:23, 21 October 2016 (UTC)

Heading casing[edit]

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:15, 21 October 2016 (UTC)

Rickwood work on help-seeking[edit]

Consider utilising research by Debra Rickwood (a UC psychology academic) on mental health help-seeking: -- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:17, 21 October 2016 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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  1. Overall, this is a reasonable chapter which could be improved by paying closer attention to the quality of written expression and citing more specific research evidence.
  2. For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below.


  1. Basic theory is reasonably well covered, although not particularly well integrated with review of relevant research findings.
  2. The Overview effectively establishes why the topic is important with contrasting case studies.
  3. Perhaps also consider how the type of disorder may affect the likelihood of help-seeking.


  1. Research coverage is somewhat limited.
  2. Relevant prevalence statistics are cited.
  3. Some statements were unreferenced (e.g., see the [factual?] tags)
  4. When describing important research studies, provide some indication of the nature of the method.
  5. When discussing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.

Written expression[edit]

  1. Written expression
    1. Write for an international, not just an Australian, audience.
    2. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
    3. Some clarification templates have been added to the page.
    4. The Conclusion could be improved by providing some more concrete, take-home messages.
    5. Write in third person rather than first person (e.g., avoid "I', "we", "our", "your" etc.).
  2. Layout
    1. See earlier comments about heading casing
    2. Figure captions should be more explanatory.
  3. Learning features
    1. Add Interwiki links (e.g., to relevant Wikipedia articles and other Wikiversity book chapters) to make the text more interactive.
    2. Quiz questions are used in the middle of the chapter (but not also at the end?) effectively to encourage reader engagement.
  4. Grammar and proofreading
    1. The grammar of some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags).
  5. APA style
    1. Check/correct APA style for direct quotes.
    2. When there are three or more authors, subsequent citations should use et al. (e.g., Smith, Bush and Western (2001) first and and then Smith et al. (2001) subsequently).
    3. The APA style for the reference list is reasonably good
      1. Doi -> doi
      2. remove issue numbers for paginated journals.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:09, 9 November 2016 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Moodle site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.



Structure and content[edit]

  1. Overview
    1. Effective
    2. Outline the problem and what will be covered in this presentation.
  2. Selection and organisation
    1. Well selected and structured content.
    2. Theory was well covered.
    3. Research was well covered.
    4. Perhaps consider using more illustrative examples.
    5. Include citations.
    6. References included.
  3. Conclusion
    1. Effective.
    2. None provided.
    3. A Conclusion slide summarising the take-home messages / key points could be helpful.


  1. Audio
    1. Audio for opening slide is slow/echoey.
    2. Well narrated.
    3. Varied intonation added interest and engagement.
    4. Present in the third person (i.e., avoid "I", "my", "we" etc.) because the presentation should be about the topic, not the presenter.
    5. Audio is reasonably clear and well-paced.
    6. Audio is clear and well-paced.
  2. Visuals
    1. Visuals are clear, fun, and easy to read.

Production quality[edit]

  1. Overall, very well produced.
  2. Meta-data
    1. Well titled.
    2. Add a link to the book chapter.
    3. Fill out the description field (e.g., brief description of presentation, link back to the book chapter, license details, and possibly include references, image attributions, and/or transcript).
  3. Audio recording quality
    1. Good except for opening slide audio.
  4. Image/video recording quality
    1. Good
    2. Some audio/image syncing is out.
    3. Effective use of simple tools.
  5. Licensing
    1. The stated license in the description doesn't match the selected youtube license.
    2. The copyright licenses and sources of the images are indicated.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:14, 22 November 2016 (UTC)