Hi, this is a really interesting and important topic.
I thought this could help.
u3081127 contribution 30/9/2016 at15:50
Possible Considerations [ edit ]
Just letting you know that you have a really interesting book chapter topic! I have a few suggestions which you may (or may not) want to take into consideration when you write your chapter. New Zealand is a great practical example of how Indigenous Language can be preserved, as their national anthem is in both their native language and English. A big issue that we face in Australia is the sheer number of Indigenous languages which exist (about 150 still in use today), so which of these do we focus on preserving? Political considerations could also be noted, given Australia's history (Stolen Generation, etc.). You might want to read
Michael Walsh's 2005 article - Will Indigenous Languages Survive?. Hope this helps! -- Qt3141 ( discuss • contribs) 02:43, 16 October 2016 (UTC)
Heading casing [ edit ]
FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use:
==Cats and dogs==
==Cats and Dogs==
-- Jtneill - 21:43, 21 October 2016 (UTC)
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Chapter review and feedback
Overall [ edit ]
Overall, this is a basic chapter on a challenging topic, given the almost complete lack of peer-reviewed psychological literature which is directly related to the core question. Nevertheless, the chapter provides a reasonable answer to the question.
For more feedback see
these copyedits and the comments below. Feel free to make ongoing changes to the chapter if you wish to address any of these comments or make other improvements.
The chapter is well under the maximum word count.
Explain why the topic is important.
Consider including an example or case study (e.g., learning Wiradjuri via CSU?)
Establishes the relevance of the topic. Body
The main improvement for this chapter would be more clearly explain how each of the motivational theories relates to the problem (motivation to revive/non revive Australian Indigenous languages).
The tables would be more effective if they helped to demonstrate how the theory applies to the problem of interest.
The case study(ies) is(are) helpful. Perhaps consider adding more case studies. Conclusion
Offers a clear, well-written summary.
Could be improved by providing some more concrete, take-home messages.
There is little research directly about the topic, but a more indepth review of key, related studies is recommended (e.g., language revival motivation in other countries?)
Were old sources such as South Australia (1844) and (Maslow (1943) directly consulted? If not, don't cite it (or use a
secondary citation). Anonymous (2012) is a weak citation and is not included in the reference list.
When describing important research studies, provide some indication of the nature of the method.
When discussing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
Written expression is reasonably good.
Write for an international, not just an Australian, audience.
Avoid starting sentences with a citation unless this information is particularly pertinent. Instead, provide the citation at the end of the sentence.
The chapter addresses the topic and book theme but lacks practical take-home messages.
The quality of written expression could be improved (e.g., see where
clarification templates such as , , , and may have been added to the page). Some clarification templates have been added to the page. Structure and headings
The chapter is well-structured. Layout
There is minimal use of images or tables.
Some images are used, but the chapter could be improved by adding more images.
Tables and/or Figures are used effectively.
Tables and Figures should be referred to in the main text.
Figure captions could be improved by making them more explanatory. Integration with other chapters
The chapter could be improved by integrating it more deeply with other book chapters by linking key concepts to other related chapters such as Motivation and emotion/Book/2011/Self-determination theory Learning features
Interwiki links (to relevant Wikipedia articles) to make the text more interactive. Quiz questions are used in a basic way to encourage reader engagement. Spelling
Use Australian spelling (some general examples are hypothesize -> hypothesise; behavior -> behaviour).
Some examples of Indigenous language words and how they can affect social identity etc. could be useful. APA style
Check and correct the
APA style for how to report numbers (Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numbers (e.g., 10)). The APA style for the reference list is good; one improvement would be to remove issue numbers for paginated journals.
Jtneill - 06:18, 4 January 2017 (UTC)
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Overall [ edit ]
Overall, this is a basic, sufficient presentation.
Clear, but perhaps outline what content/sections will be covered. Selection and organisation
Well selected content - not too much or too little.
Theory rich; research poor.
Somewhat addresses a self-help theme.
Consider using more illustrative examples.
Citations and references are included. Conclusion
Audio is clear and well-paced.
Varied intonation added interest and engagement. Visuals
Clear and easy to read.
Excellent font size.
Consider including more images, figures, and/or tables.
Overall, basic, effective production.
Rename the title so that it includes the title (and matches the book chapter).
Add a link to the book chapter.
Excellent use of the Description field to provide relevant information. Audio recording quality
Good, clear Image/video recording quality
Effective use of simple tools. Licensing
A copyright license for the presentation is not indicated (i.e., in the meta-data or the visual presentation).
No images used, so no relevant licenses shown.
Jtneill - 06:31, 4 January 2017 (UTC)
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