Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2015/Menstrual cycle and emotion

Comments and Feedback

Hi, I learnt way to much about my cycle but it was very interesting. I've corrected a few errors however I think you might have stopped mid sentence in your conclusion... it says The secondary as then nothing. Thought it was really good. U116040

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I love how many definitions you have put in and all the links to other pages for more information! The use of colour throughout your chapter makes it flow and easy to read. I also liked how you had a quiz towards the beginning of the chapter to test our knowledge. I just had one concern which was when I did the first quiz, not realizing there was a second, it had already submitted answers for the second quiz, meaning I would have to reset the quiz in order to take it. Not sure if that happened just for me, but thought I would mention it. Looks great otherwise, great work! --U3096825 (discuss • contribs) 12:18, 25 October 2015 (UTC)

Feedback

Hey! I like how you've included a quiz at the start to see how much people know before they read your chapter, and the quiz at the end! Structure is realyl good as well. The images and diagrams also make the page brighter and more interesting (instead of just paragraphs of writing) :). U3097090 (discuss • contribs) 10:26, 23 October 2015 (UTC)

Hi, your chapter is looking great so far. The only thing I could find wrong with it is that some of your tables haven't been mentioned in the text, such as the DSM IV - TR diagnostic criteria for PMDD table. Zac.webster

Comment

Hello,

Your topic is a fun one, and you've been very thoughtful in what you've included. Two concerns are that Wikipedia will generally apply whatever answers chosen for the first quiz to the second, so the user scrolls down to see the answers pre-highlighted. I also had this issue, and decided to put a bold note before the first quiz asking readers press reset before continuing down, which may be helpful for you. The second concern is fairly minor, but the different alignments as I move down the page felt a little disorientating to me. over, good page!

U3069744 (discuss • contribs) 09:28, 25 October 2015 (UTC)

Hi there

This is a fantastic topic, wish I'd thought of it! if you were looking to include a bit of easy action research in your chapter, perhaps you could chart your own menstrual cycle (presuming you are female) or that of a friend/colleague/partner. It could perhaps take the form of a diary and interviews and give an overview of the cycle/emotions over the whole 28 days; every second day; or only the really 'emotionally eventful' days. You could even construct a compare and contrast sort of chart to illustrate differences/similarities in the cycles you study. KRD 1000 (discuss • contribs) 14:02, 21 September 2014 (UTC)KRD 1000KRD 1000 (discuss • contribs) 14:02, 21 September 2014 (UTC)

I really like this topic, your layout is very good. I'm not sure I am a huge fan of the heading box right at the top but a change of colour and font size? I'm interested to continue reading this as you put more content up --Ekclements (discuss • contribs) 03:23, 15 October 2015 (UTC).

Hi, im pretty sure that when you do in text citations (for apa) youre suppose to have the citation inside of the period. I think it would be set up like this: The menstrual cycle occurs when a woman reaches puberty and becomes fertile (Oertelt – Prigione, 2012). Instead of this: The menstrual cycle occurs when a woman reaches puberty and becomes fertile. (Oertelt – Prigione, 2012). Everything else looks good! Uu3148421 (discuss • contribs) 04:10, 19 October 2015 (UTC)

Hi, really like your structure and your content is very interesting going through your page. Just a little suggestion that ohce your treatment option has been done, i would like to see some pictures in their so it could make your section more appealing and visual. --U3083568 (discuss • contribs) 00:52, 22 October 2015 (UTC)

Hi Linda, Thanks for your comment on my talk page. I really like your page too, it is an interesting topic especially for those who experience such changes in emotion first hand. I also think it is a great topic and sometimes it seems as also a 'taboo' thing to talk about. So kudos to you for academically exploring it further. I also really like your ideas on including the case studies and the quizzes are very informative. James mentioned that when including Figures they should be referred to at least once in writing (e.g. Figure 2 clearly illustrates the different structures of the endocrine system) - this could be helpful for your first figure (Figure 1) as it looks like quite a complex image. Otherwise I think your chapter is great!!! Em.jacobs (discuss • contribs) 02:30, 22 October 2015 (UTC)

Hey, your chapter is looking great so far. The structure flows really well and the presentation of some information in tables make it much easier to read. I've added a couple of internal links to Wikipedia articles for some of you concepts. Zac.webster

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:07, 21 October 2014 (UTC)

Thanks for this tip James! Would not have realised that myself. Tessa Power (discuss • contribs) 23:46, 16 October 2015 (UTC)

Ideas

Hi Linda, it looks like you have put a lot of effort into your page. In particular, the theory and research section is very well detailed and formatted, so well done. One consideration for you in enhancing your treatment options segment is to include the current discussion that is ongoing within society regards treatment v management of the emotional variations through the menstrual cycle. I hope this helps! :)

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Hello!Very interesting topic and I like the layout, you could also include information about how people can/do moderate their emotions throughout the cycle? i.e exercise/diet/medication/herbal supplements ect U3100474 (discuss • contribs) 22:04, 16 October 2015 (UTC)u3100474

HI there great topic You should think about why the menstural cycle makes us emotional and what part of the brain that is allocated to.

Goodluck

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Hey! This looks great, a really interesting topic! You could also incorporate specific hormones that are associated with the different phases of the menstrual cycle and how these hormones influence what emotions are more predominant just to elaborate and make it more informative :) Good luck with the rest! --121.223.187.104 (discuss) 10:53, 26 October 2014 (UTC)

Hey, I found an article discussing the effect of different stages of the menstrual cycle on various parts of the brain related to emotion. It might with a physiological perspective.

Andreano, J. M., & Cahill, L. (2010). Menstrual cycle modulation of medial temporal activity evoked by negative emotion. Neuroimage, 53(4), 1286-1293. doi:10.1016/j.neuroimage.2010.07.011

--Zac.webster

Hi! You could also include how the use of drugs such as contraceptive pills change/alter the emotions women feel during their menstrual cycle - does it dull the emotions or help to regulate them? Look forward to reading more :) --U3081677 (discuss • contribs) 02:56, 15 October 2015 (UTC)

Hi there, your page is looking good so far. I like the picture and the text boxes. Just a reminder that we have to add a box for our multimedia presentation just underneath the title so you may want to reconsider the placement of that first text box depending on what it looks lie. Someone commented earlier on the physiological aspects of emotion and the menstrual cycle and I've found another article but it's specific to the orbitofrontal cortex activity in relation to emotions during the menstrual cycle.

http://www.pnas.org/content/102/44/16060 --U3046579 (discuss • contribs) 06:06, 15 October 2015 (UTC)

Hi there Linda, In terms of your theories, I think the James-Lange Theory could also be utilised to help explain emotional behaviour during menstruation. The James-Lange theory basically suggests that people experience emotions because they perceive and react to their bodies physical responses to external events. So by applying this theory to your topic, women don't cry during their menstruation cycle because they feel angry/sad, rather during the cycle they feel angry/sad because they are crying.

--U3034876 (discuss • contribs) 20:16, 15 October 2015 (UTC)

Hey Linda :) have you thought about looking into diet and menstrual cycle. You can look at like vegans or vegetarians and people with unhealthy diet and people with normal healthy diet? I would be interested in reading about that you may also want to look at like break out and menstrual cycle and diet and the relationship there. Best of Luck Iga.leszczynska (discuss • contribs)

Hi Linda, So far I am liking your chapter. Very interesting subject, and a well laid out format- I especially like your case study idea to be used throughout and quiz to test readers knowledge. An interesting subject to perhaps discuss and perhaps another theory is around women's propensity to commit crime when on their period. Here's a link to an interesting article on Women and Crime: Premenstrual issues. http://aic.gov.au/media_library/publications/tandi_pdf/tandi031.pdf Also you probably are still planning to do this but I noticed you need to add more links throughout your text to create a more interactive chapter.

Good Luck, Candice

--CJBush03 (discuss • contribs) 09:59, 18 October 2015 (UTC)

PMDD

Have you considered looking into Premenstrual Dysphoric Disorder? Its essentially severe premenstrual syndrome, but quite interesting :) About 2% of the female population meet the criteria.121.127.213.102 (discuss) 23:44, 3 October 2015 (UTC) U3100310

Looks great - I would add some more regarding emotions and their link with hormones at different times in the cycle. U3040525 (discuss • contribs) 11:03, 16 October 2015 (UTC)u3040525

Structure

The structure looks reasonably clear. I've made some minor edits. Whilst, separate theory and research sections can work, perhaps consider integrating this material (e.g., when discussing a theory, also include a review of related research)). Also, avoid having sections with a single sub-heading (i.e., have 2 or more sub-headings or none). -- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:37, 18 October 2015 (UTC)

Additions

Hi, I added a component on 'cognitive theory' to your Theory and research section. Feel free to change/remove it, but I thought it was quite relevant. Perhaps you could divide the theory into two sections: 1) biological/physiological (biorhythm theory and hormones) and 2) psychological (social learning and cognitive) - and then discuss an integrated approach at the end? I also found some statistics I thought you might find interesting: PMS occurs in approximately 75% of women of reproductive age. Post-menopausal dysphoric disorder (PMDD) is severe form of PMS, considered to affect at least 3–8% of women of reproductive age (Kues et al., 2014).

I also found this article interesting: Romans, S., Clarkson, R., Einstein, G., Petrovic, M., & Stewart, D. (2012). Mood and the menstrual cycle: a review of prospective data studies. Gender medicine, 9(5), 361-384. DOI:10.1016/j.genm.2012.07.003 (link): it suggests negative stereotypes regarding PMS may underlie perceived emotional fluctuations.

Overall the chapter layout looks good and I really like the idea of a practical case study! Good job :)

Reference: Kues, J. N., Janda, C., Kleinstaeuber, M., & Weise, C. (2014). Internet-based cognitive behavioural self-help for premenstrual syndrome: study protocol for a randomised controlled trial. Therapy (CBT), 14, 16. Available from: http://www.trialsjournal.com/content/15/1/472

U3083676 (discuss • contribs) 00:03, 20 October 2015 (UTC)

Hi Linda, many thanks for your considered feedback regarding my book chapter (topic 41) on flow and mastery. With respect to your book chapter regarding the menstrual cycle and emotion, I, much like the other contributors, found your treatment informative and interesting. Great work! I particularly liked your comprehensive use of headings, figures and drop down menus, which added clarity and interactivity to a complex topic. For your review and consideration, I have included some more specific suggestions, as follows:

The first reference to the word 'menstrual' after the 'Overview' heading may benefit from being externally hyperlinked to a web page that defines/discusses it as a stand alone concept. I understand the phrase 'menstrual cycle' is hyperlinked in the next section so you may have already considered the pros and cons of not including the hyperlink on the first mention of the term. Under the same Overview heading, the same suggestion is made in respect of terms such as: 'memes'; 'emotion'; and 'mood'. Likewise, the reference to 'youtube videos' may benefit from being linked to an example video, the same applies to the term 'articles'. Linking the above text may assist in clarifying terminology and illustrating concepts that form part of the basis for understanding what follows.

Under the heading 'Menstrual cycle', the term 'fertile' may benefit from a hyperlink. In this section, I was impressed by your use of a quiz to establish a baseline with regard to the reader's initial level of knowledge. If this is the purpose, you may even wish to consider placing the first quiz even earlier in the article? Question 4 of the first quiz contains a reference to the term 'eggs', which I'm not sure has been previously defined in the article. If this is the case, you may wish to define or clarify the term prior to its inclusion in a quiz question.

Under the heading 'Hormones and the menstrual cylce', a full stop may be required after the hyperlinked term 'ovaries'. The table on Hormones, Location and Function contains a reference to 'Brain' as the location for GnRh, you may wish to consider a more specific location reference. The reference to 'reals' under the Function heading may be a typo.

Under the heading 'Emotions', you have a useful figure setting out some core/complex emotions. You may wish to insert pictures of what people look like when experiencing some of these emotions. In this section, when you write 'it is considered', you may wish to consider specifying by whom it is considered or perhaps incorporating a link. The 'Fact box' was an effective way to highlight this important information. I note your use of links here regarding terms such as 'mood', and you may have already considered that such links were better here rather than on first use of the terms earlier in the article.

Under the heading 'menstrual cycle disorders', when introducing the list of symptoms, you may wish to consider using the words 'may include one or more of the following'. PMS and PMDD may benefit from being linked. In figure 4, lists of symptoms are provided. I noted with interest that feeling and physiological symptoms were listed but cognitive elements (e.g. per cognitive theory discussed later) were not.

Under the heading 'biorhythm theory', the term 'pseudo-theory' is used and may benefit from a link. While it's on my mind, you may wish to incorporate a section on directions for future research on your topic of choice.

With respect to figure 5, you may wish to increase the font size of the text, if this is convenient.

Under the heading 'cognitive theory', the term aetiology may benefit from an explanatory link.

Under the heading 'treatment options', it may be useful to incorporate information on whether incorporating saffron into a woman's dietary intake is of assistance.

The final quiz contained a good mix of relatively simple and more challenging questions. Your list and use of the references was impressive.

Thanks again for your feedback and I hope the above is of some assistance.

Kind regards

Daniel u118741

Suggestions

1. I like that the Overview serves to answer the question up-front. The next most important section is the Conclusion, so its worth having a shot at this section, as the other bookend.
2. The Overview perhaps could be improved by explaining what the "stereotypical"/cultural meme answer to the questions (rather than relying on the reader to click on the video link to find out). It could also be helpful to outline the theoretical components that may link the menstrual cycle to mood.
3. Change the "Figure" caption for the Table, to a Table caption (check APA style).
4. Having looked over the page, I think that it would be helpful to embed the case on the main page, rather than have it on a subpage. I suggest also removing the collapsible boxes. This looks an important, useful, practically applicable content, so there's no need to hide it. The page is quite busy, so I suggest keeping it simple.
5. The key challenge/possible improvement for this chapter is to more directly address the question. For example, the final column in the first table is potentially the most important single chunk of content in the whole chapter.
6. There is arguably too much emphasis on menstrual-related disorders and too little on how emotion/mood varies with "normal" cycles. Nevertheless, study of disorders can provide valuable insight.
7. Consider merging the "Hormones and the menstrual cycle" content within "Menstrual cycle" and possibly moving the table into the later section about hormones and emotions.
8. Spell out abbreviations in the second quiz.
9. Avoid having sections with only one sub-section e.g., merge "Other similar constructs" with "Emotion"

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:13, 22 October 2015 (UTC)

I quickly skimmed over the chapter. My main remaining suggestion is to provide a conclusion with key take-home messages / answers to the question. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:31, 25 October 2015 (UTC)

Suggestions

Hi Linda. I think looking into the relationship between the luteinizing hormone and emotions and mood would be beneficial to answer the key questions of your topic. In one study I looked at, the luteinizing hormone (LH) is associated with anxiety (this was in infertile men). Additionally, another study I looked into, showed that during menopause a woman's oestrogen levels declined, yet the luteinizing hormone levels increased. The lack of oestrogen and increase in LH suggests an underlying correlation between the increase in LH levels and mood disorders in perimenopausal and menopausal women.

ref: Bak, C. W., Seok, H. H., Song, S. H., Kim, E. S., Her, Y. S., & Yoon, T. K. (2012). Hormonal imbalances and psychological scars left behind in infertile men. Journal of andrology, 33(2), 181-189. Steiner, M., Dunn, E., & Born, L. (2003). Hormones and mood: from menarche to menopause and beyond. Journal of affective disorders, 74(1), 67-83.

Anyway, your page is excellent, really well written and I look forward to reading the finished chapter soon :) --U3034876 (discuss • contribs) 00:48, 24 October 2015 (UTC)

More feedback

Hey Linda, great chapter very interesting. Love how you added quizzes, fun facts and case studies to make it interactive to read. • I noticed you have four hyper links to “menstrual cycle”. Im not sure if this is correct or not I have not done my hyper links yet however, I believe you just hyper link the first mention of that subject so the first time you say “menstrual cycle”. • Also, you might need to add a reference before your current first reference in your overview. • The sentence “An analysis of research conducted by Romans, Clarkson, Einstein, Petrovic & Stewart (2012) looked at a variety of research” reads abit funny, maybe change the second “research” to “studies”. • I think “Oertelt – Prigione (2012) also explained that” should be “Oertetlt and Prigione (2012)”. So an “and” instead of a dash as it is not in brackets. • premenstrual dysphoric disorder (PMDD) the first letter “p” is not hyper linked here. • Under the DSM section, you might have to formally site the DSM. Not sure what cite you would use for this one but for an example it would be (American Psychological Association, 2000) just an example not sure of the year for the DSM IV-TR exactly. • Obviously not finished but don’t forget your conclusion. Great job and good luck  ---u3079526--- 24/10/2015---

See also

I've noticed that you don't have any links in your "See also" section. I thought this was interesting and relevant for general interest that would not be covered in your chapter. Irritable male syndrome

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Overall Overall, this is a fantastic chapter which makes effective use of the wiki environment and provides a well-balanced, well-rounded consideration of the topic. For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below. Theory Theory is well covered, including physiological and psychological aspects. The basics of the menstrual cycle are well explained without overly focusing on this aspect to the detriment of the topic. The Overview establishes the relevance and importance of the topic. Research Many very useful/relevant research studies are described. When describing important research studies, provide some indication of the nature of the sample and possibly cultural context. When discussing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Written expression Written expression is excellent. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. Layout The chapter is well-structured. Tables and Figures are used effectively. Learning features The chapter makes excellent use of interwiki links. Quiz questions are used effectively to encourage reader engagement. Spelling, grammar, and proofreading are generally excellent. APA style Check and correct the use of "&" vs. "and" (Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets). Check and correct the APA style formatting of in-text citations where multiple citations are reported within brackets. The APA style for the reference list is very good; remove issue numbers for seriated journals.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 20:07, 22 November 2015 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a well prepared and executed presentation. Structure and content Theory and research are well covered. Minor grammar/spelling errors. Communication Audio is clear and well-paced. Visuals are clear and easy to read. Production quality Overall, well produced. No link is provided back to the book chapter. Change standard youtube license to Creative Commons.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:33, 26 November 2015 (UTC)