Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2015/Exercise motivation in people living with dementia

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Hi, this looks great, Two suggestions from me. Can I suggest making sure all the style is consistent as it chops and changes in a few areas and it make it a little distracting. Also wondering if you thought about putting a section on research in your page. Dementia research is at its highest ever funding peak and allot of interesting research is being funded. U116040

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Hello, great topic. :) I completed an essay a few semesters ago on the impacts of physical activity on cognitive performance in old age. Here are some of the references I used and that found great results. You could possibly use them in you "benefits of exercise" section :)

Colcombe, S., Kramer, A., F., (2003). Fitness effects on the cognitive function of older adults: A meta-analytic study. Psychological Science, 14(2), 125-130.

Ferencz, B., Jonsson Laukka, E., Welmer, A. K., Kalpouzos, G., Angleman, S., Keller, L.,…Bäckman, L. (2014) The benefits of staying active in old age: Physical activity counteracts the negative influence of PICALM, BIN1, and CLU risk alleles on episodic memory functioning. Psychology and Aging. (this one is particularly useful as it discusses episodic memory functioning :) )

Nagamatsu, L. S., Chan, A., Davis, J. C., Lynn Beattie, B., Graf, P., Voss, M. W., Sharma, D., & Liu-Ambrose, T., (2013). Physical activity improves verbal and spatial memory in older adults with probable mild cognitive impairment: A 6-month randomized controlled trial. Journal of Aging Research, 2013.

Thank you, it is helpful to get some references from someone that has read previously about this topic. These articles fit in really well with the areas I have chosen to focus on --U3083687 (discusscontribs) 15:45, 22 October 2015 (UTC)

Hi there,

This looks like an interesting topic and I like that it's unique. Given that exercise motivation can be difficult for people without mental disabilities I'm interested to know more about how people with dementia get motivated. I think what you've covered so far is great, a few things you could add are the types of exercise, the effect of time of day for exercise, incorporating exercise that doesn't feel like exercise such as dancing and gardening and also safety concerns. I found this link quite interesting --U3046579 (discusscontribs) 09:03, 21 September 2015 (UTC)

Thank you! This feedback was really great I had not really thought about searching for articles which focused upon exercise doesn't feel like exercise but it makes a lot of sense. I have been reading up on this and it has helped me to include more relevant and practical information in my chapter. --U3083687 (discusscontribs) 15:45, 22 October 2015 (UTC)


I've come across this study that i think will be great for those of us doing exercise motivation. I've only read the summary but the general idea should be applicable.

Have a look.

i found this article on it also

Bee Taylor (discusscontribs) 04:49, 21 August 2015 (UTC)

Suggestions on pages to add to see also[edit source]

Hi, I have found a few other book chapters from past years relating to your topic that you might consider putting under your 'see also' heading. 1) Motivation and emotion/Book/2011/Exercise motivation 2)Motivation and emotion/Book/2014/Exercise motivation 3)Motivation and emotion/Book/2014/Dementia care motivation 4)Caffeine and exercise motivation 2015 (page not created yet). --U3081508 (discusscontribs) 05:14, 11 September 2015 (UTC)

Thank you for finding these! There are some here I had not seen before! --U3083687 (discusscontribs) 15:45, 22 October 2015 (UTC)

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Your chapter looks really good i think you have defiantly hit the criteria for covering the theory. I have some corrections: Maybe link more words. The link for dementia should be in the overview as that is where it is first mentioned. I know the answers to the focus questions are throughout the chapter but maybe add a section in the conclusion directly answering the questions? In this sentence “Dementia is characterised by cognitive decline in individuals eventually leading to dependence regarding daily functioning (refer to Figure 1)” i think it reads better if you change it to "is characterized by A cognitive decline". In the table under developing exercise motivation all the sentences need a full stop at the end as you did it for the first one but not the others. In the first blue box do you need to reference where the participants statements came from? and lastly, under cognitive function in the last sentence there is a gap between the words can and have. good luck.--U3081508 (discusscontribs) 11:53, 25 October 2015 (UTC)

Final Comments!![edit source]

Hi Eve, your chapter is amazing! Really well thought out - you've clearly put a lot of time and effort into it and it's definitely paid off for you! I particularly love your use of case studies and quizes to make the reader reflect back on what they've learnt - I think it really makes them connect with the topic. I think it flows really well from heading to heading and makes it easier for the reader to navigate their way through the topic. Only suggestion I have is to maybe add some dementia support organisations in your external links section like Alzheimer's Australia or Alzheimer's Association wh~ich also has a support hotline phone number on it for carers or sufferers. Other than that, awesome job! Best of luck finishing the final few bits U3096454! (discusscontribs) 12:04, 25 October 2015 (UTC)

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  1. Overall, this is a fantastic chapter which makes effective use of the wiki environment and provides an indepth, but very readable synthesis of psychological theory and research on the topic.
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Theory[edit source]

  1. Theory is well covered and explained.
  2. The case studies/examples were helpful.

Research[edit source]

  1. Research is well covered and explained.
  2. When discussing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.

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  1. Written expression was very professional.
    1. Avoid sections with only one sub-section. A section should have no sub-sections or at least two sub-sections.
    2. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
    3. Avoid sections with only one paragraph. A section should have at least two paragraphs.
  2. Layout
    1. Add bullet-points for See also and External links
    2. Figures are used effectively.
  3. Learning features
    1. The chapter makes excellent use of interwiki links to other book chapters and to relevant Wikipedia articles.
    2. Quiz questions are used effectively to encourage reader engagement.
  4. Spelling, grammar, and proofreading are excellent.
  5. APA style
    1. The APA style for the reference list is good but apply italics and remove issue numbers for seriated journals.

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is an excellent all-round presentation.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. Well structured.
  2. Theory and research were well covered.
  3. Useful take-away messages.

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  1. Audio is clear and well-paced.
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  1. Overall, well produced using simple tools.
  2. Excellent, title, description, meta-data, link back to book chapter etc.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:29, 26 November 2015 (UTC)