Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2015/Climate change and mental health

Reference

http://link.springer.com/article/10.1007/s00038-009-0112-0 -- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:11, 21 October 2015 (UTC)

Hey! Great chapter, well done! There are some excellent external links there. Have you considered adding some internal wiki links under the heading 'See also'?. This is where you could put some links to climate change (natural disasters, drought etc), mental health, and Maslow's Hierarchy of needs.

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:59, 23 November 2015 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a very good chapter. For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below. Theory The ways in which climate change can affect mental health are well covered. It seemed a bit unnecessary/odd to tack Maslow's hierarchy of needs in at the end. Beef up the Conclusion - it need to summarise the key points and provide practical, take-away messages about how the problem can be tackled. More case studies could be helpful. Research Research is reasonably well covered, but describing some key studies in more detail could help to add depth to this aspect of the chapter. Some statements were unreferenced (e.g., see the tags) When describing important research studies, provide some indication of the nature of the sample and possibly cultural context. When discussing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Written expression Written expression is generally very good. Avoid sections with only one sub-section. A section should have no sub-sections or at least two sub-sections. Many paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences. Layout Add bullet-points for See also and External links. See earlier comments about heading casing Minimal use is made of Tables and/or Figures. Learning features Interwiki links could be added (e.g., to relevant Wikipedia articles and other Wikiversity book chapters) to make the text more interactive. Quiz questions are used effectively to encourage reader engagement. Spelling Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize -> hypothesise). Grammar and proofreading Check and correct the use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs. individuals'). APA style Add APA style captions to tables and figures. The reference list is not in full APA style. Put in-text citations in alphabetical order. Direct quotes need page numbers.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:59, 23 November 2015 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient presentation. Structure and content The presentation provides a reasonable overview of the topic. Include citations to evidence for claims. Consider incorporating more explanatory text and/or images/diagrams to help convey the concepts in the narration. What are the practical, take-home messages? Communication Audio is clear and well-paced. Visuals are simple, clear and easy to read. Production quality A link to the presentation is not provided from book chapter (a link has now been added). Audio is cut-off on some slides (e.g., Natural disasters) and there was no audio for at least one slide. Conclusion slide was empty? Fill out the description field (e.g., brief description of presentation, link back to the book chapter, license details, and possibly include references and image attributions). A copyright license for the presentation is not indicated (i.e., in the description or in the presentation slides). No link is provided back to the book chapter.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:36, 3 December 2015 (UTC)