Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2014/Social media motivation

Feedback help from the author

Hi! If anyone happens to go through my page, I'm hoping for a bit of feedback on:

Layout

• I'm unsure on the layout at the moment...is the coloured boxes too much?
• My TOC and the picture seem to create a lot of white space and cause extra scrolling down the page to get to the information. Is there a way I can break make it fit a bit neater?

Images

• My Figure 1, description doesn't show up on the page, and shows up only if you place your cursor on top of it. does anyone know how to fix this? or knows if it matters?

Clarification

• whether I am missing out on anything to properly explain/clarify ideas

Psychological Theories

• Do I need to put in a bit more information and work on my psychological theories?

Information

• I'm worried that my information is in 'excess' and detracting from the topic and question
• Is my information sufficient?
• Does it answer the case studies?

--Can Rogerthat (discuss • contribs) 23:55, 23 October 2014 (UTC)

Other

Direct quotes not referenced

It appears that that are some direct quotes from other websites on your page that are not referenced. These include: The reason so many people use online social networking is that it provides a way for people to connect. From: http://www.ukessays.com/essays/media/people-spend-over-700-billion-media-essay.php

and

Maslow used the terms Physiological, Safety, Belongingness and Love, Esteem, Self-Actualisation and Self-Transcendence needs to describe the pattern that human motivations generally move through. Maslow’s hierarchy of needs is often portrayed in the shape of a pyramid with the largest, most fundamental levels of needs at the bottom and the need for self-actualisation at the top. From: http://roarlocal.com/maslows-hierarchy-social-media/

Or very little has been changed in the sentence: For example: "If you move away from friends, an online social network can help you keep in touch and it’s a great way to expand your social circle. It's the ultimate networking tool." is very similar to: http://www.life123.com/parenting/tweens-teens/social-networking/why-do-people-use-online-social-networking.shtml --N8. (discuss • contribs) 05:59, 17 October 2014 (UTC)

thanks...these were just google searches to paste what I knew I was going to research so I could visually see my layout on here. I have now researched each of these topics and referenced these accordingly.--Can Rogerthat (discuss • contribs) 00:20, 21 October 2014 (UTC)

:)

I would probably recommend putting the green case study boxes after the Overview section. It's just that things get pretty heavy before the reader even really knows much about what the page is going to be about. Plus, with very little adjustment, the Overview will flow nicely into the case study boxes. N8. (discuss • contribs) 03:36, 22 October 2014 (UTC)

Thanks N8. much appreciated!--Can Rogerthat (discuss • contribs) 11:14, 22 October 2014 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:55, 20 October 2014 (UTC)

cheers--Can Rogerthat (discuss • contribs) 00:21, 21 October 2014 (UTC)

Last sentence in conclusion

Just had a breif run through and just noticed the last sentence seemed a bit funny. Should we word or chuck a comma in :)

Social media & Gender differences in motivation

Hi! Thank you for your comment on my discussion part of my page. I have looked at your page for some guidance as to how you're setting it out - great work! I have also put a link to your page on my 'see also section' :) Would you have any feedback for me on theories? It seems including the gender differences i've come unstuck! As all your theories are great with relation to social media, i am unsure how to relate mine! From: Social media motivation & gender!

Thanks :) I'm sure I came across something in my notes, i'll refer back to them and let you know!--Can Rogerthat (discuss • contribs) 11:15, 22 October 2014 (UTC)

APA style captions for images and tables

I recommend using APA style captions i.e., Figure 1, Figure 2 etc. for all images, graphs etc. and Table 1, Table 2 etc. for all tables. The caption text should not be in italics. For more detail and examples, see http://libguides.newcastle.edu.au/content.php?pid=113807&sid=1208571 -- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:44, 23 October 2014 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Moodle site. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener. If you wish to dispute the marks, see the suggested marking dispute process.

Overall Overall, this is a well developed presentation on a very current area of interest. Congratulations! Structure and content The structure is very clear, and the flow is logical. Theory is a major focus of the presentation. Three important theories are explored, including the use of real-life examples to facilitate understanding. Research is also incorporated, but is less of a focus. Communication Communication is good. The voice-over is generally well done, although perhaps slightly too fast in areas. Very good expression is used. The slides are nicely developed, with appropriate use of colours and images. Production quality Basic production tools are used effectively. The audio quality is good. The visuals are clear. A link back to the chapter is provided. Image source information is provided.

ShaunaB (discuss • contribs) 03:07, 19 November 2014 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via Moodle, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

Overall This chapter describes a rich array of possible psychological causes/contributions to social media use. It could be improved by describing and linking more closely to related research studies. For more feedback, see my copyedits and comments below. Theory A wide range of possible psychological motivators for social media usage are presented. Research The chapter could be improved by integrating more research. Some statements were unreferenced - see the tags Written expression Written expression is reasonable, but needs some improvements to be of professional quality. The Overview is well developed, with some excellent case studies. The Overview or the the sections immediately following could do a better job of introducing the wide range of motivations which the chapter discusses. Some of the bullet-points should be rewritten into full paragraph format. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. Layout Tables and/or Figures were used effectively. See earlier comments about heading casing Learning features Some links to Wikipedia and/or Wikiversity articles were added as external links - these should be changed to interwiki links Excellent use of links to other related chapters. Grammar and proofreading Grammar for some sentences needs improving (e.g., see the tags) Use abbreviations such as "e.g." inside brackets and "for example" outside brackets APA style Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets. Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numbers (e.g., 10) Direct quotes need page numbers. Add APA style captions to tables and figures. The reference list is not in full APA style. Remove issue numbers for seriated journal references.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:12, 30 November 2014 (UTC)