Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2014/Obesity treatment and needs
Minor changes and suggestions
Contribution from u3082340
Hello! Great topic - Definitely one that fits in with the theme of the book. Noticed some minor spelling errors and grammatical things you may have missed and fixed them up for you. Also noticed that there are some sentences/ points without a reference at the end - Might wanna just go over that to double check all of that! Also - You do make reference to The Drive Theory - But perhaps make it a link within the chapter so people can have a look? Goodluck!
I came across these articles when searching for references for my topic. I haven't actually read them, but on 'title-value' they seem like they may be good for your topic.
1) Sheldon, K. M., Joiner, T., & Williams, G. (2003). Motivating health: Applying Self-Determination Theory in the clinic. NewHaven, CT: Yale Univeristy. 2) Williams, G. C., Rodin, G. C., Ryan, R. M., Grolnick, W. S., & Deci, E. L. (1998). Autonomous regulation and long-term medication adherence in adult outpatients. Health Psychology, 17, 269 -276.
If you havent already found these, I hope they help in some way :)
This is a very interesting topic! Just a suggestion to put in a table of contents to guide the reader through your chapter and what you will be writing about. Cheers U3081461 (discuss • contribs) 03:15, 12 October 2014 (UTC)
This topic is really interesting, i agree with the above comment on including a table of contents, but i'm sure you'll get to that when you add more information. SO far i really like how you have included health care sectors, and have mentioned campaigns such as " how do you measure up" i really look forward to reading this when its complete :) Cheers--U3080857 (discuss • contribs) 01:15, 13 October 2014 (UTC)
It looks like your heading in the right direction here, I like the way you use question to encourage the reader to consider these while reading the rest of the chapter. I think it would be good to include a real life example so that the reader might be able to better understand what motivates this behaviour and what motivates people turning to treatment. Great work U3068859 (discuss • contribs) 07:34, 20 October 2014 (UTC)
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