Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2014/Infidelity and needs

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APA Formatting[edit source]

Hey! For the titles, you don't need to have it all in capitals - instead of 'Personality and Mental Health" have "Personality and mental health". You've done it throughout so maybe just go through and change it up :) Thats just what James has been telling people! Otherwise looks like you have made a good start, look forward to reading the final topic.--U3083978 (discusscontribs) 09:40, 26 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Suggestions[edit source]

Hi :) Perhaps you could elaborate on Hull's drive theory! Maybe include how it links to infidelity and needs, this willmake it a bit more relevant to your overall topic, looking good though :) Goodluck! --121.223.186.132 (discuss) 09:42, 26 October 2014 (UTC) --Bekaguilar (discusscontribs) 12:01, 26 October 2014 (UTC)(Note: I just added another time stamp as when I added mt first one I wasn't logged in oops!)[reply]

Relating back to main question[edit source]

Hey, with your personality and culture sections you should try and link them back to your overall topic, also in your influences section i think you need to reference your table according to APA quidelines a bit more accurately. Great topic though, I look forward to reading more of this! U3068702 (discusscontribs) 10:02, 26 October 2014 (UTC)u3068702U3068702 (discusscontribs) 10:02, 26 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]


Chapter review and feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is an informative chapter that shows sounds understanding of relevant theory and research. See my copyedits and comments below for further feedback.

Theory[edit source]

  1. A wide range of theory was mentioned, with an emphasis on need fulfillment. This theory was mostly well related to infidelity.
  2. In some places there was a significance reliance on textbook citations rather than primary sources.
  3. In some places theory could have been better integrated with research.

Research[edit source]

  1. Some useful research was considered.
  2. There was a significance reliance on textbook citations rather than primary sources.
  3. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. In general, the chapter was well-written and made effective use of some figures, tables, and a quiz.
    1. The chapter could have benefited from a more developed Overview (explaining what theories and research will be covered) and Conclusion. The focus questions were somewhat broad/general and could benefit from being more specific to the question.
    2. Obtaining (earlier) comments on a chapter plan and/or chapter draft could have helped to improve the chapter.
    3. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
    4. Avoid directional referencing e.g., "As previously mentioned"
  2. Learning features
    1. Adding interwiki links would make the text more interactive.
    2. More images could be added
  3. Spelling, grammar and proofreading was generally good
  4. APA style
    1. Direct quotes need page numbers.
    2. Use/add APA style captions for figures and tables
    3. et al -> et al.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 20:19, 18 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is an all-round impressive presentation – well done!

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. A well designed and organised presentation which provides a very good overview of how need fulfillment is related to infidelity. The presentation displayed logical flow between concepts related to the topic, as well as good understanding, explanation and integration of Hull’s drive theory and related research. As there is quite a lot of content covered an overview slide or initial explanation of the presentation's structure would be helpful to the viewer. In text referencing to match the end of text reference list would also have improved the presentation. A useful take home message is provided at the end of the presentation.

Communication[edit source]

  1. Clear communication of ideas using voice and image was displayed. The presentation was well-paced and engaging and displayed good use of illustrative examples, images and diagrams. Posing questions to the audience was a great way to further engage the audience.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. The presentation had clear picture and audio quality and demonstrated effective use of screenr to communicate ideas. Rehearsal may have prevented the presentation from appearing scripted. No copyright license is provided for the presentation. A link is provided to and from the book chapter. No image attributions are provided - this presentation is likely to have violated copyright laws. A comprehensive reference list is provided.

RenaeLN (discusscontribs) 06:43, 21 November 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Missing image[edit source]

Your Figure 3:Alternative Sex Response Cycle has been deleted.GwenFord (discusscontribs) 11:05, 7 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@GwenFord: A student from 2014 is unlikely to see this message. Please be bold and make an appropriate correction yourself. Thanks! -- Dave Braunschweig (discusscontribs) 13:54, 7 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]