Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2014/Hoarding and motivation

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Hi there,

Your page was a great read. I was once a bit of a hoarder (now I throw everything away because I hate clutter) and it was interesting to learn about why people develop this behaviour. I also love your inclusion of pop culture in discussing hoarding. You have positioned it at the end of the chapter which I think will help in drawing readings back in if they have begun to feel tired. Might I suggest that if you are able to, without breaching copyright, to include a screenshot of a television show incorporating hoarding. If it is a familiar television show, I think it will encourage readers to investigating hoarding further.

For your section Age and hoarding, might I suggest also including some socioeconomic effects. I am unsure if this is correct but I understand many people who lived through the World Wars, Great Depression and Vietnam War were poor and often held onto things they did not need because if they suddenly had a need for it, they could not replace it financially. This may be incorrect but it would be an interesting thing to investigate and if relevant, mention.

Well done.

--Bectionary (discusscontribs) 5:45, 27 October 2014 (UTC)

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-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:27, 23 October 2014 (UTC)

APA Formatting[edit]

Hey! I have an interest in this topic, as people consider me a hoarder and it'd be interesting to read theories on why I am! I've heard that it can be related to Obsessive Compulsive Disorder, so this could be something worth researching? I've just gone ahead and edited the images in your page to be of APA format. which for future reference, further images just need to be numbered, by putting in italics Figure 1. and for this assignment, doesn't need acknowledgement from the source if they are from wiki :)--Can Rogerthat (discusscontribs) 23:22, 23 October 2014 (UTC)

Old people and hoarding[edit]

Hey! Really interesting topic! I was actually watching a show recently on hoarding, I can't remember it exactly but it was really fascinating and it discussed how hoarding it much more common in the elderly! That could be another topic worthwhile discussing if you're looking for anything extra! Great work though :) --121.223.187.104 (discuss) 10:24, 26 October 2014 (UTC)

Suggestions[edit]

Hi! Your page is coming along well, easy to read and interesting :) I saw that you tweeted an interesting video earlier in the week in regard to hoarding, i would perhaps suggest you find some more interesting videos like that and add them into your "see also" section :) Would make it really interesting, looks great though good luck with the rest! --121.223.186.132 (discuss) 10:04, 26 October 2014 (UTC) --Bekaguilar (discusscontribs) 11:59, 26 October 2014 (UTC) (Note: I just added another time stamp as when I added mt first one I wasn't logged in oops!)

Suggestions[edit]

So far, so good! It will be good to see the final concept come together, but you are definitely on the right track! I like how you have including diagnosis of hoarding according to the DSM, some individuals might not think its an actual disorder without this – so that was a good idea! I had no idea that animals, as well as digital hoarding even existed, very interesting topic! You have covered hoarding in a variety of diverse ways, especially with the use of your videos --U3069714 (discusscontribs) 14:39, 26 October 2014 (UTC)


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Overall[edit]

  1. Overall, this is a good presentation, with solid integration of theory and research. Congratulations.

Structure and content[edit]

  1. The structure is clear, and the flow was logical. Relevant theories and research are very nicely covered. The ending was a little abrupt, and could be improved by including some summarising statements.

Communication[edit]

  1. Communication is good. The voice-over is well paced, with appropriate expression. Slides are basic but clear. Inclusion of illustrative examples would improve the presentation.

Production quality[edit]

  1. Production quality is good. Audio and visuals are both of a high quality.

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Overall[edit]

  1. Overall, this is a wonderful chapter. Its a tour de force - it really grapples with a specific motivational problem (hoarding) and integrates an excellent review of relevant theory and research, with real-life examples and interactive learning features in a wiki environment. The main areas for improvement are in proofreading and adding more interwiki links. See my copyedits for proofreading suggestions.

Theory[edit]

  1. Excellent understanding of hoarding demonstrated. Makes effective use of DSM and several motivational theoretical persoecTheory comment

Research[edit]

  1. Research citations are well integrated, showing excellent familiarity with relevant material.
  2. A critical approach is evidence, with a future-focus :)
  3. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.

Written expression[edit]

  1. Overall, the chapter was well written.
    1. The chapter benefited from an excellent Overview and Conclusion.
  2. Learning features
    1. Adding more interwiki links would make the text more interactive.
  3. Spelling, grammar and proofreading
    1. Use of ownership apostrophes needs checking and correction e.g., Hoarders front yard-> Hoarder's front yard
  4. APA style
  5. Citation style for two authors needs correction: e.g., (Frost, Steketee, 1998) -> (Frost & Steketee, 1998) and three authors: e.g., (Melamed et al, 1998) -> (Melamed et al., 1998)
  6. The reference list is close to APA style but should put journal numbers in italics and do not include issue numbers for seriated journals.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:27, 12 November 2014 (UTC)