Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2014/Amygdala and emotion

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Possibly other areas[edit source]

Hello, I was just wondering, other than the Amygdala which predominantly controls emotions; what other areas of the brain controls emotion? Or does the Amygdala play the only significant role? Just a though :) Good luck with your chapter! Pheonix (discusscontribs) 11:34, 15 October 2013 (UTC)

Comment[edit source]

The Amygdala plays a central role in fear. It is what can activate the fight or flight response. However many other parts of the brain can also effect emotions, such as the hippocampus and the hypothalamus. --[[User:Janed1987|Janed1987 (discusscontribs) 08:19, 26 October 2013 (UTC)

Hello, I just wanted to say that your book chapter is looking awesome! Great pictures! One tip I thought I mentioned is that James mentioned is that the use of coloured backgrounds behind the text can sometimes make the chapter hard to read. I was going to include them in my chapter but after talking to James I decided not too. However, I would talk to James before making your final decision. Hope that helps. Cheers User:NjzarbNjzarb (discusscontribs) 07:02, 18 October 2014 (UTC)

Hi, you design is amazing, you have gone to so much effort you should be very happy. especailly the rotating head goodluck with the rest of it . --u3083063

Heading casing[edit source]

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:43, 22 October 2014 (UTC)

Suggestions[edit source]

Hi Beck

Your page is looking great!.

I've just made a little change (a capital in one citation).

I've just noted a couple of things:

I wondered if in your last paragraph under What is Amygdala if it would be better to move the second line first.

In your first introduction of the Amygdala catergories you've used capitals for their names, but not under The Amygdala's Role in Fear Conditioning. It is probably best you're consistent in either using caps or not.

You might want to review your headings - we need to use wiki formatting, which is not all caps.

In the case of PTSD - I think once you've abbreviated it you can stick with the abbreviation. Maybe in the case of the headings you would use the full term, and then abbreviate it in the first instance within the paragraph, and in subsequent use of the term.

Under What is Phobias? you've said 'often disrupting every day-to-day life'. I think 'every' may be superfluous in this case.

I changed 'difficulty to recognise' to 'difficult to recongise'. Hope that's ok.

Also, I think et al is always 'et al.', so in citations it's xx et al., I've corrected a couple, but you might want to do a through check.

Where you've inserted the date for Charles Darwin's work - I don't think you need to put the 1872 in unless you're referencing his work directly (which would be pretty cool). If you got the info from Matsumoto et al. then you would only use that citation.

You might want to double check your citations. I noticed in Universal Facial Expressions you cited 'Matsumoto, & Hwang, 2011'. I don't think you need the comma after Matsumoto. This may only be for this author, it didn't jump out at me elsewhere.

Lastly - I'm pretty sure the guidelines include a conclusion. So you might want to do a little summary.

Other than that, it looks great and reads well. You've done a great job!

ChelsiCFD (discusscontribs) 01:34, 23 October 2014 (UTC)

Heading names[edit source]

I suggest using the standard headings as described here Motivation and emotion/Assessment/Chapter#Written expression. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:51, 23 October 2014 (UTC)

APA style captions for images and tables[edit source]

I recommend using APA style captions i.e., Figure 1, Figure 2 etc. for all images, graphs etc. and Table 1, Table 2 etc. for all tables. The caption text should not be in italics. For more detail and examples, see -- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:55, 23 October 2014 (UTC)

Quick Edit[edit source]

Hey, fixed the lowercase on your "Phobias" heading, the p was lowercase. Also, I linked to your chapter from mine since I mentioned the Amygdala and thought it would be a good bridge. I also fixed the order of PTSD section title as it was PSTD on the page.U3054842 (discusscontribs) 02:36, 25 October 2014 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this presentation provided sound coverage of theory and made good use of slides and images. Well done!

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. There was good coverage of the different aspects of emotion the amygdala is related too, and some good real life examples i.e PTSD.
  2. For improvement, consider using a case study or briefly discussing some specific studies, as there was little research covered

Communication[edit source]

  1. The presentation could be improved by a more engaging presentation style, i.e alteration of voice tone and a slightly faster pace
  2. Overview and Conclusion slides would be helpful.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. Production quality was sound, image and voice was clear.
  2. No attributions were provided for the images used, thus this presentation may have violated copyright.
  3. Also include link to the book chapter in the presentation description

Courtney.Bruce (discusscontribs) 03:52, 23 November 2014 (UTC)

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a good, solid chapter. It could be improved by being abbreviated and more focused on practical, take-home messages derived from theory and research. For more feedback, see [my copyedits] and comments below.

Theory[edit source]

  1. Theory is well covered, but should be more selective, with emphasis on summarising the relevant theories in the Overview and Conclusion, and demonstrating their relevance to real-life application.

Research[edit source]

  1. Several relevant studies are discussed.
  2. Consider whether there is relevant meta-analytic work that can be included.
  3. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. Abbreviate; the chapter is over the maximum word count
    2. Some paragraphs were overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
    3. The chapter would benefit from further improvements to the Overview and Conclusion (e.g. does the Conclusion answer the focus questions in the Overview?)
  2. Layout
    1. Could be simplified - e.g., see my copyedits
  3. Learning features
    1. Some use of Figures; greater use of Tables and Figures could be helpful.
    2. The text could become more interactive by including interwiki links.
    3. Only 1 out of 4 quiz questions related to the amygdala's role of emotion
  4. Spelling, grammar and proofreading is generally good.
    1. Use Australian spelling e.g., hypothesize -> hypothesise
  5. APA style
    1. Not all in-text citations are in alphabetical order.
    2. Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets.
    3. The references are not in full APA style

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:42, 27 November 2014 (UTC)