Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2013/Developmental changes in motivation

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Comments[edit]

Hello there! Just thought that this reference could help you in terms of finding a motivational transition between primary school students and adolescent teenagers, http://psycnet.apa.org/psycinfo/2002-02121-003,it primarily talks about achievement motivation :) good luck with your chapter :) Pheonix (discusscontribs) 11:44, 15 October 2013 (UTC) Pheonix (discusscontribs) 11:05, 28 October 2013 (UTC)

Looks like you may be having some trouble with setting up headings. Try these codes '===insertheading===' or '==insertheading==' for subheadings. good luck!--Florence21 (discusscontribs) 02:27, 4 November 2013 (UTC)


Chapter review and feedback

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Overall[edit]

This is a solid chapter. Strengths include the scope (this is a broad topic/question) and coverage of a breadth of motivational and/or developmental theoretical perspectives and explaining how they account for motivational variations across the lifespan.

The Overview provides a friendly, easy-to-read big picture overview of the topic. The definition provides a clear, big picture overview of the scope of motivation.

I made a number of edits (check the page's edit history including: moved the page from your user page to the main space, adjusted heading levels, corrected internal link syntax (e.g., Wikipedia links were made as external links), added paragraph breaks, corrected American to Australian spelling (e.g., behavior - > behaviour), APA style for references (e.g., italics for source title), removal of broken links, some copyediting of the written expression with regard to grammar (e.g., use of ownership apostrophes and commas, spelling, and clarity of expression, and indication of statements that appeared to warrant the use of citations - see [citation needed] tags.). Close copyediting was provided for the Overview through to Current theories sections inclusively, but not for the rest of the chapter.

Theory[edit]

A considerable breadth of theories is considered, with supported by at least some research and, generally, these theories are well related to the topic/question. Perhaps, however, there is too much emphasis on explaining a range of theories and more emphasis could be put on explaining the developmental changes in motivation.

Research[edit]

The chapter included useful citations at many points, although there could have been more explanations of relevant research, as well as perhaps some critical analysis regarding future directions and gaps in the literature, and perhaps some critique of the studies themselves would be useful for future improvement

Written expression[edit]

Much of the the chapter was well-written. The sections that had been carefully drafted and proofread were excellent. However, there were many sections that needed more drafting and proofreading to be grammatical correct and at a satisfactory graduate level of written expression. l errors, be sure to thoroughly edit before submitting.

The structure and selection of content showed a broad understanding of the topic and was impressive in its scope. The chapter seemed to end part-way through, however, and clearly lacked a conclusion section which drew the key points together.

Use of some useful internal links was noted. Some images were included, but could have benefited from more detailed explanatory captions. No other learning features were provided.

Overall, well done. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:34, 1 September 2014 (UTC)


Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit]

A borderline satisfactory presentation due to the absence of audio. Selected content and visual presentation was good.

Structure and content[edit]

The presentation consists of slides which contained a lot of text. Preferably use less text and provide audio. The content itself was interesting and relevant and showed a considered mapping of developmental stages/theories to motivational processes. The content emphasised theory over research.

Communication[edit]

Some slides were difficult to read due to the background picture (e.g., slide about Baby).

Production quality[edit]

Slides were provided, but there was no audio :( Slides were well presented on Prezi.

There was no acknowledgement of the copyright and source of the images used, thus it appears that copyright violation was likely :(

A link was provided from the book chapter to the multimedia presentation, but there no link provided back to the book chapter. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:01, 1 September 2014 (UTC)