Template:MEBF/2018
Instructions: This is a marking and feedback template for the book chapter exercise for the motivation and emotion unit. This template is designed to be transcluded on a chapter talk page.
Simple example
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Chapter review and feedback
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This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via Moodle, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements. |
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-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:11, 3 December 2018 (UTC)
Detailed example
[edit source]Example use of the template which includes some commonly provided feedback comments:
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# Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
# Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient chapter.
# The chapter could benefit from further development of the Overview and Conclusion - it should be possible to only read these sections and get a good sense of why the topic is important and what is known/recommended.
# Overview - consider building on the sub-title by establishing focus questions to help guide the reader and the chapter structure.
# This chapter is well over the [[Motivation and emotion/Assessment/Chapter#Word_count|maximum word count]].
# For additional feedback, see comments below and [ these copyedits].
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# Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained.
# Basic but sufficient coverage of theory involving the relation between the target constructs is provided.
# Overall, this chapter makes basic use of theory.
# There is too much general theoretical material. Instead, summarise and link to further information, to allow this chapter to focus on the specific topic (i.e., the sub-title question).
# Overall, this chapter makes insufficient use of theory.
# The Reeve (2015) textbook is overused as a citation - instead, utilise primary, peer-reviewed sources.
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# Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory.
# Overall, this chapter provides a basic overview of relevant research.
# Basic but sufficient coverage of research involving the relation between the target constructs is provided.
# Overall, this chapter makes insufficient use of research.
# When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
# Greater emphasis on major reviews and meta-analyses would be helpful.
# Some statements are unreferenced (e.g., see the {{fact}} tags).
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## Overall, the chapter is very well written.
## The chapter benefited from a well developed Overview and Conclusion, with clear focus question(s) and take-home messages.
## The chapter would benefit from a more developed Overview and Conclusion, with clearer focus question(s) (Overview) and take-home self-help message for each focus question (Conclusion).
## Internationalise: Write for an international, not just Australian audience. [http://www.worldometers.info/world-population/australia-population/ Australians make up only 0.32% of the world human population].
## Obtaining (earlier) comments on a chapter plan and/or chapter draft could have helped to improve the chapter.
## Addressing the [[#Topic development feedback|topic development feedback]] could have helped to improve this chapter.
## Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
## Some sentences are unnecessarily wordy - strive for the simplest expression of the point being made.
## Some sentences are overly long; consider splitting them into shorter, separate sentences.
## Some statements could be explained more clearly - see the {{explain}} tags
## Some of the bullet-points should have been in full paragraph format.
## Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned").
## Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
## Use abbreviations sparingly. Do not use abbreviations for minor terms that aren't used very much in the chapter.
## Use third person perspective, rather than first person (e.g., "we") or second person (e.g., "you") perspective.
## Avoid starting sentences with a citation unless the author is particularly pertinent. Instead, it is more interesting for the the content/key point to be communicated, with the citation included along the way or, more typically, in brackets at the end of the sentence.
## Direct quotes should be embedded within sentences and paragraphs, rather than dumped holus-bolus. Even better, communicate the concept in your own words.
# Layout
## The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections.
## Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
## Avoid having sections with only one sub-section.
## See earlier comments about [[#Heading casing|heading casing]].
# Learning features
## [[m:Help:Interwiki linking|Interwiki links]] are well used.
## Adding [[m:Help:Interwiki linking|interwiki links]] for the first mention of key words would make the text more interactive.
## Embedding [[m:Help:Interwiki linking|interwiki links]] links to other book chapters would help to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
## Use in-text [[m:Help:Interwiki linking|interwiki links]], rather than external links.
## Basic use of images.
## Basic use of tables.
## Good use of feature boxes.
## Basic use of quizzes.
## Basic use of case studies or examples.
## No use of images, tables, feature boxes, quizzes, case studies, or examples.
## For numbered lists, using Wikiversity formatting per [[Motivation and emotion/Tutorials/Introduction|Tutorial 1]].
# Grammar
## Check and make [https://www.grammarly.com/blog/comma/ correct use of commas].
## The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the {{grammar}} tags).
## Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's).
## Use [[w:Serial comma|serial comma]]s[https://www.buzzfeed.com/adamdavis/the-oxford-comma-is-extremely-important-and-everyone-should].
## Check and correct use of [https://www.google.com.au/search?q=grammar+that+vs+who that vs. who].
## Check and correct use of [https://www.google.com.au/search?q=affect+vs.+effect+grammar affect vs. effect].
## Check and correct use of [http://www.colonsemicolon.com/ semi-colons (;) and colons (:)].
## Abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e.., etc.) should only be used inside parentheses.
# Spelling
## Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the {{spelling}} tags).
## Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour; fulfillment vs. fulfilment).
# Proofreading
## More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard.
## Remove unnecessary capitalisation.
# APA style
## Use APA style for Figure captions. [[Motivation and emotion/Assessment/Chapter/Figures|See example]].
## Use APA style for Table captions. [[Motivation and emotion/Assessment/Chapter/Tables|See example]].
## Refer to each Table and each Figure at least once within the main text.
## Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text.
## Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numbers (e.g., 10).
## Direct quotes need page numbers.
## Citations use correct APA style.
## Citations are not in full APA style. For example:
### Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets.
### A [[w:Serial comma|serial comma]] is needed before "&" or "and" for citations involving three or more authors.
### In-text citations should be in alphabetical order.
### When there are three or more authors, subsequent citations should use et al. e.g., Smith, Bush and Western (2001) and thereafter cite Smith et al. (2001).
### A full stop is needed after "et al".
### For APA style, citations in parentheses use a comma between the author(s) and year.
### Check and correct use of [http://research.moreheadstate.edu/c.php?g=107001&p=695202 citations for sources with six or more authors].
### Select up to the top three citations per point (i.e., avoid citing four or more citations to support a single point).
## References use correct APA style.
## References are not in full APA style. For example:
### Check and correct use of capitalisation.
### Check and correct use of italicisation.
### Add spaces between author initials.
### See [http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2014/07/how-to-use-the-new-doi-format-in-apa-style.html new doi format].
### Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within volumes.
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Chapter review and feedback
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This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via Moodle, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements. |
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-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:48, 26 November 2018 (UTC)