Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2019/Unconscious motivation

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Heading casing[edit source]

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings (or sentence casing). For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:23, 5 November 2019 (UTC)Reply[reply]


Chapter review and feedback[edit source]

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via UCLearn Canvas, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is an insufficient chapter.
  2. The chapter was posted to a user page - it has been shifted into the main space.
  3. This chapter is one of the shortest submitted; it is well under the maximum word count.
  4. Sub-title was incorrect; now fixed.
  5. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits.

Theory[edit source]

  1. Overall, this chapter makes basic use of historical theory, with insufficient detail or application to motivation.
  2. There is too much general theoretical material. Instead, summarise and link to further information, to allow this chapter to focus on the specific topic (i.e., the sub-title question).

Research[edit source]

  1. Overall, this chapter makes insufficient use of research.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the chapter is underdeveloped - ideally, this would have been presened for the topic development, to allow the feedback to be acted upon for the final draft.
  2. Layout
    1. See earlier comments about heading casing.
    2. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
  3. Minimal use of learning features.
    1. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words would make the text more interactive.
    2. Embedding interwiki links links to other book chapters would help to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
    3. Basic use of images.
    4. No use of tables.
    5. No use of feature boxes.
    6. Basic use of quizzes.
    7. The quiz questions could be more effective as learning prompts by being embedded as single questions within each corresponding section rather than being presented as a set of questions at the end.
    8. No use of case studies or examples.
    9. For numbered lists, use Wikiversity formatting per Tutorial 1.
  4. Grammar
    1. The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags).
    2. A space is needed after a full-stop.
  5. Proofreading
    1. More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard.
  6. APA style
    1. Refer to each Table and each Figure at least once within the main text.
    2. References are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. Present the references in alphabetical order.
      2. Check and correct use of capitalisation.
      3. Check and correct use of italicisation.
      4. See new doi format.

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. No logged social contributions

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:23, 5 November 2019 (UTC)Reply[reply]


Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Canvas site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is an basic, insufficient presentation.
  2. This presentation makes use of simple tools.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. Add and narrate an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered.
  2. Well paced content - not too much or too little.
  3. Check and fix typos (e.g, lisense).
  4. What are the practical take-home message(s) that we can use to help improve our everyday lives?

Communication[edit source]

  1. The presentation makes basic use of text based slides with narrated audio.
  2. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read.
  3. The visual communication could be improved by including some relevant images.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. Communicate the chapter title and sub-title in both the video title and on the opening slide this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. Audio recording quality was poor - review microphone set-up.
  3. Visual display quality was reasonably good.
  4. A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the video description but not in the meta-data.
  5. A link to the book chapter is not provided.
  6. A link from the book chapter was not provided (has now been added).
  7. A written description of the presentation is not provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:31, 18 November 2019 (UTC)Reply[reply]