Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2018/Self-focused attention and emotion

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a promising chapter, with excellent raw material (i.e., theory and research), but the quality of written expression is problematic and there is little attempt to develop online book chapter learning features. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits. Theory Relevant theories are described and explained. To improve, consider providing more examples. Research Some statements are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags). Relevant research is reviewed and discussed in relation to theory. When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Written expression Written expression Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Layout The chapter used a basic structure. Sub-headings have now been put into standard Wikiversity format. There is little use of learning features Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words would make the text more interactive. No use of images, tables, feature boxes, quizzes, case studies, or examples. Add "See also" and "External links" sections Spelling, grammar, and proofreading. The grammar for many sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Check and make correct use of commas. Use serial commas. APA style Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numbers (e.g., 10). Citations are not in full APA style e.g., Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets. A serial comma is needed before "&" or "and" for citations involving three or more authors. Remove author initials References are not in full APA style e.g., Check and make correct use of capitalisation. Check and make correct use of italicisation.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:17, 29 November 2018 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Canvas site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

Overall Overall, this is a basic, sufficient presentation. Structure and content Well selected and structured content - not too much or too little. Add and narrate an Overview slide, to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered. The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages. Communication The presentation makes basic use of text and image based slides with narrated audio. Some of the font size should be larger to make it easier to read. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images. Production quality Include the chapter title and sub-title on the opening slide and in the video title. Video recording quality was excellent. Audio recording quality was a bit quiet - review microphone set up. Images sources (but not their copyright) are well acknowledged. A copyright license for the presentation is provided. A link to and from the book chapter is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:25, 29 November 2018 (UTC)